Hello dear readers!
This is a reworked chapter from my first fanfic The Power!
Believe me, there was a LOT to be edited here... Same for chapter two..
But! Anyway, yes, this was my first ever fanfic on the site.
I do have to say though, this story was the one that seemed to get A LOT of negative comments, such as 'this has no character diologue' or 'you spelled Ben Bocquelet's name wrong', seriously there was almost no praise for it like my other fanfics.
But, with that out of the way, here is the updated reworked version of Chapter one of The Power!
Oh real quick note! This story has a few references to Frozen, if they aren't obvious. I stated that in the old, so I'm saying it in the new.
Enjoy the chapter!
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It.
This was the term Gumball often used, whenever he thought about the mysterious power inside him.
He never remembered how he got it, or if he was born with it, but there was one thing he never wanted to do, tell anyone about it.
This was a factor he hated the most, since he had to keep this big secret from everyone he knows and loves, including his brother Darwin.
And without anyone, he was pretty much on his own when trying to control it.
The power was strange, and often was a red glowish light that occurred, which always seemed to escape him, or what he called, 'blasting' away.
Yes, there was a term for that too.
Even through preschool he had to deal with this secret, which some might think that he would have revealed it during that time.
However, even his younger toddler self knew not to tell anyone either, in worry that people could take it the wrong way, and... Possibly... Fear him..
Though the secret was sort of easy to keep, the power was harder to conceal.
It seemed to grow stronger and stronger each day, which worries him greatly.
But it seems that the secret will not stay secret forever, and the nightmares of this he always feared of, will come true.
The alarm clock on the nightstand went off, blaring loudly with all its might.
A blue paw reached out and threw it to the ground, shutting the clock off instantly.
The blue feline known as Gumball Watterson got out of bed, and looked over at the calendar that always hung by the toy chest, which read that today was Monday.
"WHHHHYYYY?!" He cried, since Monday was such horror every time for him.
Darwin woke up from the noise, with an annoyed, yet confused look on his face.
His little sister Anais woke up from this as well, with mostly an annoyed expression.
"Gumball what are you whining about?!"
"It's... Monday..." Gumball stuttered, dropping onto the floor dramatically.
Nicole stood at the doorway, with her hands on her hips.
"Oh stop being dramatic.. The school bus is coming in twenty minutes, so hurry up or you'll be late for school." She said, leaving the room.
Doing what they were told, the Watterson children got ready for school.
Darwin and Anais went down the stairs casually, while Gumball trudged behind them with misery.
"I feel like something's today..." Darwin said, as he thought to himself.
"Me too... It seems we're forgetting something.." Anais said as well, deep in thought.
"Is it bad?.. I'm scared.."
Everyone looked at Richard with a questioning look.
"What? Is it bad or not?"
They sighed, and continued to think, wondering what that thing was.
Suddenly, the answer popped into their heads, and all except Gumball raced out of the room, a look of panic on their faces.
"Huh? Eh."
Gumball raised an eyebrow confused, before shrugging and going back to eating breakfast.
"Darn it! I can't believe we forgot about Gumball's birthday!" Anais said, as she face palmed.
"Even I forgot about it.." Darwin added, with sorrow in his voice.
"It's okay everyone, don't panic. We'll just make sure that he doesn't find out." Nicole tried to reassure her family about this, which seemed to work.
"Any ideas?" She asked.
Everyone thought, before an idea came to Darwin's mind.
"Ooh I know! Let's make a cake for him!"
"Cake? Does that mean CAKE?! CAKE!" Richard had an excited look on his face, reenacting his 'cake face'.
"Uh yeah, because it's cake." Anais replied, rolling her eyes at her father's response.
"I'll make the cake after school, of course when he's not around. Then we'll give it to him after dinner."
The family nodded in agreement to Nicole's plan.
They all left the downstairs bedroom, and went back to eating breakfast.
"Uh.. What were you guys doing in there?" Gumball asked, still a bit confused by the family's behavior.
"Nothing.." Darwin responded, trying his hardest not to look to the right.
"O... Kay then?..."
Gumball got up from the table, and carried his bag over to the bus, which arrived just in time.
Darwin sighed in relief, grateful that Gumball didn't get suspicious.
"Come on, we should get going too." Anais said, as they both ran to the bus with their things.
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And there is the reworking of chapter one! Let me know what you think! Is it a good rewrite?
With that said, see you in the next chapter that will possibly get reworked too.
Quick side note, this story took time and effort to make. So if you're leaving a review, please don't be harsh on me..
With that said, see you in the next chapter! (Sorry if this one was a bit short)