I have rewritten chapter one I will start on chapter two soon. Hopefully, you will enjoy.

So let me tell you a story of how forty-nine teens were put into a school and, they were told by a robotic metal build-a-bear reject, to kill one another until only two remain. Then let me tell you that this was a true story. Then let me tell that this bear was being controlled by a psychopath who loves despair so much they would marry it and, then some. Would you believe all of that? Probably not but, me and, two others are about to tell the story of how we survived this killing game with everything intact. My name is Cole Johnston but in this game, I am known as Ichiro Aiko The Ultimate American Football Star.

So I'll start it off from when I got my letter to go and, attend the prestigious school known as Hopes Peak. It was a nice winter day in Oregon, it was around fifty degrees out with the sun high in the sky. I was on my way home from football practice when I opened my mailbox and, found a letter with a red wax seal on it. It was addressed to me, so I got the rest of the mail and, went inside to open it.

I lived with my mother at the time, my father had died from cancer a few years earlier. I don't like to talk about it much but that's not what I was focused on right now I'm focused on the letter in my hand. I walked into the kitchen to open the letter where my mom came and, joined me and asked,

"What do you have there honey?" My mom questioned.

"It's a letter and, it's addressed from a place called Hope's Peak Academy," I answered.

"Well open it," My mom insisted.

I agreed and, opened the letter and inside was a handwritten letter that read,

Dear Cole Johnston,
You have been selected to go to the prestigious Hope's Peak Academy as the Ultimate American Football Star. You as well as your fellow classmate Becky Mayfield have been selected to come to our school. We are now trying to scout for talent outside of Japan and, we found you as well as Ms. Mayfield to be the best possible candidates. We have already prepared you two a plane ride on January twenty-second, at ten A.M. We hope you accel and, join us for the second semester of our school year.
Signed
Principle Jin Kirigiri

"Wow Cole that is wonderful, you should start packing right away," My mom advised.

"Wait what do you mean by you don't you mean we," I asked.

"No son it's time you branched out, I know that you are only sixteen but, you are getting fabulous opportunities, it's time I need to let go and, let you go off on your own" My mom lectured.

"Ok but, I will call every chance I get," I vocalized.

I began packing for the trip, I luckily had a giant Can-am bag so I could literally my whole closet in there. I packed most of my clothes and hygiene necessities, as well as obviously a football. I also packed an iPod that contained a ton of music as well as my computer that had multiple football and sports-related pictures on it. After I had finished packing I sat on my bed to mull over the letter.

3 Days Later

"Well mom I'm heading off, I'm picking up Becky and, then we will head to the airport!" I called.

"Ok let me know how your flight goes," My mom replied.

"Ok," I said.

I went and, got into my Ford Ranger and, began to drive to Becky's house which was about a mile or so away. I drove my Ford truck to Becky's house to go pick her up to leave for the airport. I found her waiting for me in her driveway, I stopped and, open the door for her and, let her put her stuff in the truck and, she got into the car and, remarks,

"You're late," She stated.

"Pleasant as usual and, no I was right on time, we agreed eight thirty," I replied.

"Yeah yeah, whatever," She shook off the comment as if I never said it.

Some backstory between Becky and, I. We have known each other since the fifth grade when I moved from the countryside to the city. We became friends through sports and, we have always been close but, never anything more even though other people think otherwise.

"So you excited or what," I smiled.

"Well the plane ride is going to suck but I think overall this could be fun," She replied. "What about you?" she asked.

"Well I have my music and, phone so the plane ride won't be all bad but, getting to the terminal now that's going to be hell"

"Definitely, I don't understand why it takes so long to get through the TSA," Becky wondered.

"I don't know, I remember reading about how the TSA doesn't really do much except give everyone a fake sense of security," I informed.

"Uh huh, I feel like you have too much time to learn useless facts," Becky mused.

"Yeah yeah, whatever,"

1 Hour Later

"We're here," I announced.

"About time," Becky sighed.

We got out of the truck and, called up my mom to tell her that we arrived and if she could get my truck. Then we walked into the airport where we gave our bags to an airport worker to put our bags on the plane. We then walked through the TSA area and finally reached the terminal. Then we got onto the plane after a half an hour of waiting,

"Finally we are on the plane and, we will soon be up in the air," Becky remarked.

"Yep, and we will finally land in Japan. Hopefully, all goes well and, no one hates us." I replied.

"Yeah, I hope everyone there likes us. I mean we are from outside of Japan and, we don't even speak Japanese," Becky worried.

The plane begins its takeoff and, we begin to find things to preoccupy ourselves for the flight but, everything began to go black for some reason and, then all of a sudden a loud screechy voice was yelling through what sounded like an intercom.

"Ichiro its nine o'clock get to the gym right now or else suffer the consequences,"

That is it for the rewritten chapter hoped you enjoyed.