A/N: So I've read some of the other commentaries on My Immortal, so I decided to do one myself with Kanigye. I'm going to be in italics and my friend is going to be in bold.

Chapter 1. I'm regretting this already

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) No. Goffik? I have so much regret for starting this. 2 my gf (ew not in that way) You're the one that said it Way to already sound homophobic. raven, bloodytearz666 What's with that username? 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling She didn't help you enough. Is she as illiterate as you? U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! Run while you can, Justin. I'm so sorry you talk to this person, Justin. MCR ROX!

Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness What's with the apostrophe? Dementia Dementia? Like the disease? Raven Way and I have long ebony black Ebony black? That's a tautology hair (that's how I got my name You had long ebony hair as a baby? More importantly why did your parents name you after your hair?) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears Wrong adjective and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee No you don't. Probably not. (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here! Gladly. I don't, so...). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie That disturbs me greatly. Who's that? Who mentioned him?. I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white As opposed to? Oh yet another vampire without fangs. So different. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch A vampire and a witch? SO DIVERSE., and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England Scotland where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen You sound more like you're twelve.). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell We could tell.) and I wear mostly black Shocking. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there Yes because all wizards go shopping in muggle stores. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow I don't care. Could you not?. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining You mean sleet? I'm not convinced this is a real thing that happens. so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them Someone needs to turn that frown upside down. You should really stop worrying about everyone staring at you.

"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was….SUSPENCE Draco Malfoy No. Please no.!

"What's up Draco?" I asked.

"Nothing." he said shyly Draco Malfoy is not SHY you stupid muggle. In what case would Draco say anything shyly..

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. Without saying goodbye I might add. Such an interesting conversation. I was captivated.

AN: IS it good? No. PLZ tell me fangz! Stop using fangz as a pun, it's stupid. Just like your mom.

Chapter 2.

AN: Fangz Stop 2 bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da chapta She's trolling you ! BTW preps stop flaming ma story ok! No.

The next day I woke up in my bedroom You mean dormitory. As opposed to what? Do you often wake up elsewhere? You really need to stop getting blackout drunk Ebony. It was snowing and raining Sleeting again You're causing this weather. I opened the door of my coffin You mean lid and drank some blood from a bottle I had Where did you get the blood? Are there donors? Do you just keep bottles of blood handy at all times?. My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink Fail velvet with black lace on the ends Shocking. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt Why would wizards like muggle bands? which I used for pajamas I would think someone so concerned about clothing would be more dressed up for bed and not just use a giant t-shirt.. but whatever. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun. What happened to the uniforms? Almost half of this story has been clothing description.

My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u! No one cares Self-inserts. Lovely.) woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair I WHIP MY HAIR BACK AND FORTH I WHIP MY HAIR BACK AND FORTH with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes So she woke up, flipped her hair, and then opened her eyes? Sounds confusing. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots Pointy?. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner.) No one cares Shocking..

"OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!" she said excitedly. So you dressed in complete silence? Sounds awkward... Yes I saw that three second conversation you had with him.

"Yeah? So?" I said, blushing. Such nonchalant

"Do you like Draco?" she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room I thought you were in your dorms? and into the Great Hall Since when is the Great hall next to the Common room. Since when does a short conversation mean you like someone?

"No I so fucking don't!" I shouted Yes because shouting is so believable You're totally making your case right now .

"Yeah right!" she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me How convienant .

"Hi." he said.

"Hi." I replied flirtily I thought you didn't like him? We all know you like him Ebony.

"Guess what." he said.

"What?" I asked.

"Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade." he told me. Why is a muggle band playing in Hogsmeade. Since when does Hogsmeade hold concerts at all?

"Oh. My. Fucking. God!" Holy. Fucking. Shit. I'm. So. Shocked. I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR.

"Well…DRAMATIC PAUSE. do you want to go with me?" he asked.

I gasped. Such a cliffhanger DUN DUN DUN