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"Mummy don't go, please don't leave me. I love you."
Sobs racked the 5 year old girl. Her nanny begged her to leave her mother's side. The girl didn't hear her, all she heard was the sound of her mother's breathing getting fainter and fainter till she breathed no more. The girl they their in shock my her dead mother's side. Hoping against hope that by some chance she wouldn't be dead. When realization sunk in her sobs grew louder and louder, till she could cry no longer and collapsed from exhaustion.
That was 5 years ago, but seemed like a life time ago. What wouldn't Lily Evans give to be in the arms of her loving mother. Lily winced in pain as that thought popped into her head. Her back, now raw from the fresh whippings her "beloved" father had given her the other night.
Happy Birthday to me, she thought bitterly. She turned her head towards the window, and watched the beautiful snow fall. It all looked so magical, like a fairy tale with a happy ended- wishing this was the case. That she actually belonged to a family that cared about her. A normal family that gave you presents on your birthday, and above all that unconditionally loved you. Not a broken family from which she came from. A home where after her mother died had never know love. Her father a drunk, a sister who considered a rat a better living thing then herself. Both of them loving each other, but never her.
Lily got up from where she was sitting and as quietly as possible went up and tried to go to her room, unfortunately for her, her father heard. She had remind him of her existences. Angrily grabbed a hand a hand full of her red hair and dragging her from the stairs.
"I teach you a lesson you'll never forget."
"It will be the best birthday present you'll ever get from me."
He dragged her to the living room. With one swift movement punched her jaw. Making her scream in agony. With that he pushed her on the floor, got the beer bottles that he had just finished drinking and broke them on her ribs. Leaving her unconscious and laying in her own pool of blood.