Hi guys...
How are you all doing? I am re-writing my story again, and please hope this will be the last time I do that. I just had some ideas in mind and thought that it would be better if I placed.
This story may be like other stories I read so I am really sorry, but I really liked this idea of story and thought about putting it...
Please I beg you to review and I hope you really like it ...
Thanks a lot...
I heard the sounds of a sweet melody outside my chamber as I smiled remembering the sound that I hear everyday when I wake up , I rolled on my side and opened my eyes to see if my husband was there , I already knew he wasn't but wanted to make sure . I looked at the space that was next to me and sighed. His job made him wake up early, as always...
I groaned when I felt all my body numb 'Hyne...how many hours have I slept?' I asked myself aloud and sat up, I turned and saw the clock and gasped... eleven o'clock in the morning, no wonder I feel so lazy. my eyes turned to the picture that was laid next to the clock , it was a picture of me and my husband on our wedding day , I smiled dreamily remembering that day like it was only yesterday .
I gripped my father's hand nervously as we walked down the ale 'Rinoa...Darling , relax' my father whispered in my ear . I smiled at him weakly , it was amazing how the relationship turned out between me and my father , before years we couldn't even talk with each other without fighting and now look at us . He was comforting me , when he heard the news about me and Squall getting married he welcomed him with open arms , saying that it was the best decision I ever made in my entire life . and I knew why , because my to be husband is the leader of the heroes that defeated the sorceress Ultimecia and is the commander of Balamb Garden , that's what my father cared about only , he's never change and I was pretty sure of that ...
I breathed in deeply when I looked at all the faces that were looking at me as the bells started ringing, echoing their sound throughout the whole hall . I thought about leaving my father and running out of the temples door but then I stopped thinking when I noticed another nervous person standing at the end of the hall staring at his feet. I giggled when I stared at him, Squall Leonhart. the one that feared nothing , fought the most powerful enemy there was and lead the largest battles was leaning back and forth remembering what he has to say to get married , as if he noticed my stare his cold blue eyes turned from where he was looking to me.
I felt my heart skip a beat when I saw him, he never misses to make me uncomfortable yet in the same time he never, not once made me feel angry or upset. Like my problems would go away when I just look at him . I reached the end of the ale as my father smiled and left my side , Squall walked down to reach my hand , I noticed he was wearing a Tux... and he actually looked handsome in it , his warm hand took mine and grabbed it tightly , more then I was gripping my father's . I turned my head and smiled at him warmly, to reassure him that everything was alright. he smiled back , a flash back of the first time he smiled at me came back suddenly , as if it was only yesterday when we kissed for the first time , and as days go quickly when he proposed .. Many years were between them yet I never noticed. We went up the stairs as I took a look at the priest, he was wearing a long white robe and the others that surrounded him were wearing a navy colored robe. They were waiting for us to reach them ..
Did I make the right choice? A sudden voice asked in my mind, of course I did... I love Squall and he loves me, Are you sure Squall deserves you? I shook my head.. stop it!! I said to myself , I took another glance at my love and all the voices in my head vanished; his blue eyes had a sudden twinkle in them.
I smiled at the priest; he was a kind looking old man, the ones who can touch your heart immediately before you even talk with them. 'Witness the power of love, how it conquers all matters ... Witness the bond between these two souls, who will be united ...forever' the priest said and I held my breath, since I was a little girl, I used to go with my parents to weddings, I never noticed how these words would effect the bride or the broom, I would see the bride crying or both of them smiling. But now I knew how it used effect them , because everyone would know that their lives would change ..forever
I saw two of the others who were standing with the priest take out two golden bowls that were filled with Pilka, a special kind of sand that is used in magic, it was also said that it is used in uniting souls. the old man took a bowl from the other on his right and turned to Squall 'Do you , Squall Leonhart... vow to Hyne to be loyal to your soul mate , to love her , to respect her , to make her happy as much as you can...' I took a glance at Squall and saw the smile still placed on his face. '..I vow to Hyne' the commander said with confident and extended his hands as the priest smiled and putted some Pilka on the palm of his hands , suddenly the color of the sand turned white . I felt pain in my stomach as he turned to me 'Do you, Rinoa Heartilly... vow to Hyne to be loyal to your soul mate, to love him, to respect him, to make him happy as much as you can' my throat was dry when I wanted to say the words, but a sudden rush of our moments together made me say the words fluently '.. I vow to Hyne' I said and saw the priest take another bowl and put the cold sand on the palm of my hands, I did what I remembered to do in wedding ceremony as I faced Squall and placed my hands on his, I didn't dare to look at Squall until I saw the sand that was in our hands mixed together, I rose my face up and saw a warm look on my husband's face, and from that moment I knew ... I would always be happy with him
I woke up from my daydreaming at the sound of a phone ringing; I went out of bed feeling my body still cracked and slipped my slippers on and ran to the phone. I quickly pushed the button as a wide screen came in front of me then I heard a laughter 'man...if I ever see a chick wake up with that hair, I'll kill myself' Irvine Kinneas laughed, the old cowboy never changed a bit since the first time I ever saw him, his hair was shorter but still was tied by a ponytail. The day Selphie cutted his hair when he was sleeping was the day the great shooter died in soul as I remembered him say.
'Good thing you're calling me a chick, I am 38 years old you know....'... 'And you're happy with that? when Sefiy celebrates my birthday in front of all the Garden I get embarrassed' the Head master of Trabia said and I laughed , 'so where is lover boy?' .. 'Work...'... 'As always, so how is everything going?'... 'Great. Everything is same as it is'... 'How is Raine doing with the coming exam?' I smiled as he asked about my daughter, ''she is working hard, I made her go with the others to the beach'... 'With Len and Kevin' those twins were Irvine's and Selphie's children.
I nodded my head 'good...they should have some time off, but you'll make Kevin go with them on the exam'... ''Yeah, Squall placed him as a helping seed with the other four'... 'Good, good... I just wanted to tell you that me and Selphie may visit you this weekend' I smiled with happiness , I missed them both so much ''of course , me and Squall will be very happy!!' the cowboy nodded his head 'great , let me tell Sefiy , she'll start packing from now' .. 'The same Sefiy as always, actually you better be here for Len's sake... it is her seed field exam'... 'Yeah, I guess...I'll see ya then, Rin... say Hi to Squall and Zell for me'... 'Sure thing' Irvine winked and closed his screen , I sighed... I felt happy already, it will be wonderful to see those two. I hummed to myself as I went over to the bathroom but stopped when I saw a picture of my daughter...
I couldn't believe what was happening, Dr.Kadowaki made it clear that I was... I gulped as I stopped walking towards my husband's office. Pregnant... he'll understand? Right, what if he doesn't... I continued to walk gathering my courage; I stood in front of his door and looked at my side 'Hey Rin, why don't you enter?' Xu asked, I blushed ' is Squall in a good mood?' she stood up holding a pile of papers 'Galbadia called awhile ago, things aren't good' the secretary said and I fell silent for a while 'but I guess he'll be glad to see you..' she pressed the button and opened the doors of his office, I looked and saw him buried in his work, maybe I should be here another time. No... I walked in the large office and stopped in front of him. The commander of Balamb Garden looked up at who came and stared for a while .
'Hey....' I said in a whisper and went over to him , sometimes when he was so dispersed like this I couldn't talk with him but I knew that he wanted someone to talk with , he opened his arms as I sat on his lap , Squall hugged me tightly and placed a quick kiss on my lips ''Is something wrong?' I asked , he shook his head ' Sefier told me that some formed groups in Galbadia are fighting against the government, and now they blame us for it ... but then he told me that he is taking everything under control' .. 'Sefier? taking everything under his control' who would have thought that the ex-knight of Ultimecia would be the Head Master of Galbadia , in the progress of years he became one after dealing with lots of troubles , he deserved it .but Squall didn't really trust him .
'By threatening' I giggled and saw him smile 'you know that you can rely on your rival, besides I know he'll deal with the problem' Squall sighed and nodded his head, he looked at me 'so what brings you here? I thought we would meet after two hours'... 'Can't I come and see my beloved husband?'... 'No, it's not that...it's just, oh yeah did you go to Dr.Kadowaki to see what's wrong? You weren't feeling so well' like he could read my mind ,Squall did notice how ill I was the past two days and demanded that I go see the doctor .
I moved my legs and lowered my gaze to the ground , I am going to tell him , I thought for it for awhile and sighed deeply 'Squall , how many years have we been married?' my husband laughed ' four wonderful years.... I can't believe you forgot' he kissed me deeply , I broke it by biting my lip 'I didn't , and guess what after nine months we'll have another member in our family' I said almost cracking the words , the family that contains me , Squall and Angelo .
I felt doubt flick me when I saw no emotion on my lover's face then suddenly I saw a wide smile on his face, the glitter in his eyes appeared, and it happened very rarely but I was glad . My husband placed his hand on my stomach and looked down 'you...mean....a baby!!' he whispered and I nodded my head, Squall laughed 'Hyne... I can't believe it , I am going to be a father' he yelled and kissed me passionately , I relaxed myself in his embrace as I kissed him back feeling all my emotions rise , and here I was afraid of how he will react . He broke the kiss and looked at me with his soft blue eyes that lost all it's coldness in just a moment, people would tell me how his stare makes them scared, even students... but never was he like this with me 'I love you..' I felt myself melt , even if he said it every night I would still feel like it was the first time he said it 'I love you too..'
What is it with me and day dreaming? Guess I drank some weird potion yesterday , I picked up the picture and smiled as I saw myself , Squall and our four years old daughter , Raine ..
I opened my eyes slowly and blinked twice before my vision got clearer , I felt myself very weak, I guessed the time would be very early in the morning because of the birds that were singing outside and the sun light that entered the room. I heard a humming sound, a song of which I knew. I turned in pain to my other side, I wanted to remember how it was giving birth but I couldn't remember, it was an incredible pain but it was like a quick flash.
I smiled when I felt my heart full with warmth at the sight that was in front of me, my husband was holding our daughter in his arms . She was only one day old as I could remember and yet every time I wake up and look I see him holding her, some nurses came to take her away but he refused . I didn't have the chance to talk to him since the day I gave birth to her because of the drugs they gave me .
Squall was humming a song as a soft look was placed on his face 'what are we going to call her?' I heard my voice and almost vomited, it was a mix of a sickness and weakness that almost sounded like a whisper, he lifted his face from her and smiled . He walked over to me, I moved a bit so he could sit on the edge of the bed. 'Hey... I thought you would never wake up , I was worried' he said and placed a soft kiss on my forehead and putted my small daughter next to me , I looked at her for the second time and smiled . My first time was when she was still covered with blood and crying, I remember fainting afterwards . But now here she was, something that was living inside of me that came out '...I can't believe you're the one that made me suffer' I whispered and stared at her sleeping figure , everything was tiny in her . her tiny eyes were closed , I could barely hear her soft breathing . She had some black hair on her head; I turned to Squall 'how many hours did I sleep?'... 'A day and a half ... but you wake up and sleep again'... 'I feel so tired' I said and pulled my baby closer to me, I am a mother...how wonderful can that be?
'go back to sleep , I'll be right here' I smiled as he laid next to me , I missed his arms being around . My husband covered us both with his arms 'pick a name....' I whispered feeling my eye lids heavy leaning on his chest '....Raine' Squall said his mother's name and I sighed deeply and looked at my daughter 'then Raine it is....' I agreed on the name and cuddled closer to Squall, while drifting to sleep I could still hear his humming ...
I placed the picture back on the table and shook my head, no wonder how years pass so quickly, she was a baby then a four year old girl. I can still remember how she first called us , how she crawled , then walked , then talked...the first day of her being in school , then junior high , then high school and now she was sixteen years old , I looked at the picture beside it , it was a picture taken of Rained recently .. She had her father's blue cold grey eyes, my black straight long hair that she tied in a pony tail. Her features were a mixture of mine and his. As her friends said once... when she wants to be sweet and cute, she can make her features change into an angel but when a battle comes, or even when she gets angry... she turns to the exact opposite and they were true , but she took over her father's personality more .She was girl with only few words, thinks to herself most of the time . But she isn't as closed as her father was,
I sighed knowing that in a blink of an eye she would soon get married, then have her first baby like I did. Suddenly I felt my chest tighten, what if? I imagined an image of her sleeping in a freezer in one of Esther's labs, I shook my head violently, it will never happen... even if sometimes some of the sorceresses power effect her , it can't take her away so that she would be a threat grainiest the world , Ultimecia is died .. and nothing can hurt me or my daughter , even if ... I turned to the picture and stared for it for a while , even if .. She was a daughter of a sorceress...
So...what do you think? Is it better then the first? Please review and tell me if I have mistakes now..
How are you all doing? I am re-writing my story again, and please hope this will be the last time I do that. I just had some ideas in mind and thought that it would be better if I placed.
This story may be like other stories I read so I am really sorry, but I really liked this idea of story and thought about putting it...
Please I beg you to review and I hope you really like it ...
Thanks a lot...
I heard the sounds of a sweet melody outside my chamber as I smiled remembering the sound that I hear everyday when I wake up , I rolled on my side and opened my eyes to see if my husband was there , I already knew he wasn't but wanted to make sure . I looked at the space that was next to me and sighed. His job made him wake up early, as always...
I groaned when I felt all my body numb 'Hyne...how many hours have I slept?' I asked myself aloud and sat up, I turned and saw the clock and gasped... eleven o'clock in the morning, no wonder I feel so lazy. my eyes turned to the picture that was laid next to the clock , it was a picture of me and my husband on our wedding day , I smiled dreamily remembering that day like it was only yesterday .
I gripped my father's hand nervously as we walked down the ale 'Rinoa...Darling , relax' my father whispered in my ear . I smiled at him weakly , it was amazing how the relationship turned out between me and my father , before years we couldn't even talk with each other without fighting and now look at us . He was comforting me , when he heard the news about me and Squall getting married he welcomed him with open arms , saying that it was the best decision I ever made in my entire life . and I knew why , because my to be husband is the leader of the heroes that defeated the sorceress Ultimecia and is the commander of Balamb Garden , that's what my father cared about only , he's never change and I was pretty sure of that ...
I breathed in deeply when I looked at all the faces that were looking at me as the bells started ringing, echoing their sound throughout the whole hall . I thought about leaving my father and running out of the temples door but then I stopped thinking when I noticed another nervous person standing at the end of the hall staring at his feet. I giggled when I stared at him, Squall Leonhart. the one that feared nothing , fought the most powerful enemy there was and lead the largest battles was leaning back and forth remembering what he has to say to get married , as if he noticed my stare his cold blue eyes turned from where he was looking to me.
I felt my heart skip a beat when I saw him, he never misses to make me uncomfortable yet in the same time he never, not once made me feel angry or upset. Like my problems would go away when I just look at him . I reached the end of the ale as my father smiled and left my side , Squall walked down to reach my hand , I noticed he was wearing a Tux... and he actually looked handsome in it , his warm hand took mine and grabbed it tightly , more then I was gripping my father's . I turned my head and smiled at him warmly, to reassure him that everything was alright. he smiled back , a flash back of the first time he smiled at me came back suddenly , as if it was only yesterday when we kissed for the first time , and as days go quickly when he proposed .. Many years were between them yet I never noticed. We went up the stairs as I took a look at the priest, he was wearing a long white robe and the others that surrounded him were wearing a navy colored robe. They were waiting for us to reach them ..
Did I make the right choice? A sudden voice asked in my mind, of course I did... I love Squall and he loves me, Are you sure Squall deserves you? I shook my head.. stop it!! I said to myself , I took another glance at my love and all the voices in my head vanished; his blue eyes had a sudden twinkle in them.
I smiled at the priest; he was a kind looking old man, the ones who can touch your heart immediately before you even talk with them. 'Witness the power of love, how it conquers all matters ... Witness the bond between these two souls, who will be united ...forever' the priest said and I held my breath, since I was a little girl, I used to go with my parents to weddings, I never noticed how these words would effect the bride or the broom, I would see the bride crying or both of them smiling. But now I knew how it used effect them , because everyone would know that their lives would change ..forever
I saw two of the others who were standing with the priest take out two golden bowls that were filled with Pilka, a special kind of sand that is used in magic, it was also said that it is used in uniting souls. the old man took a bowl from the other on his right and turned to Squall 'Do you , Squall Leonhart... vow to Hyne to be loyal to your soul mate , to love her , to respect her , to make her happy as much as you can...' I took a glance at Squall and saw the smile still placed on his face. '..I vow to Hyne' the commander said with confident and extended his hands as the priest smiled and putted some Pilka on the palm of his hands , suddenly the color of the sand turned white . I felt pain in my stomach as he turned to me 'Do you, Rinoa Heartilly... vow to Hyne to be loyal to your soul mate, to love him, to respect him, to make him happy as much as you can' my throat was dry when I wanted to say the words, but a sudden rush of our moments together made me say the words fluently '.. I vow to Hyne' I said and saw the priest take another bowl and put the cold sand on the palm of my hands, I did what I remembered to do in wedding ceremony as I faced Squall and placed my hands on his, I didn't dare to look at Squall until I saw the sand that was in our hands mixed together, I rose my face up and saw a warm look on my husband's face, and from that moment I knew ... I would always be happy with him
I woke up from my daydreaming at the sound of a phone ringing; I went out of bed feeling my body still cracked and slipped my slippers on and ran to the phone. I quickly pushed the button as a wide screen came in front of me then I heard a laughter 'man...if I ever see a chick wake up with that hair, I'll kill myself' Irvine Kinneas laughed, the old cowboy never changed a bit since the first time I ever saw him, his hair was shorter but still was tied by a ponytail. The day Selphie cutted his hair when he was sleeping was the day the great shooter died in soul as I remembered him say.
'Good thing you're calling me a chick, I am 38 years old you know....'... 'And you're happy with that? when Sefiy celebrates my birthday in front of all the Garden I get embarrassed' the Head master of Trabia said and I laughed , 'so where is lover boy?' .. 'Work...'... 'As always, so how is everything going?'... 'Great. Everything is same as it is'... 'How is Raine doing with the coming exam?' I smiled as he asked about my daughter, ''she is working hard, I made her go with the others to the beach'... 'With Len and Kevin' those twins were Irvine's and Selphie's children.
I nodded my head 'good...they should have some time off, but you'll make Kevin go with them on the exam'... ''Yeah, Squall placed him as a helping seed with the other four'... 'Good, good... I just wanted to tell you that me and Selphie may visit you this weekend' I smiled with happiness , I missed them both so much ''of course , me and Squall will be very happy!!' the cowboy nodded his head 'great , let me tell Sefiy , she'll start packing from now' .. 'The same Sefiy as always, actually you better be here for Len's sake... it is her seed field exam'... 'Yeah, I guess...I'll see ya then, Rin... say Hi to Squall and Zell for me'... 'Sure thing' Irvine winked and closed his screen , I sighed... I felt happy already, it will be wonderful to see those two. I hummed to myself as I went over to the bathroom but stopped when I saw a picture of my daughter...
I couldn't believe what was happening, Dr.Kadowaki made it clear that I was... I gulped as I stopped walking towards my husband's office. Pregnant... he'll understand? Right, what if he doesn't... I continued to walk gathering my courage; I stood in front of his door and looked at my side 'Hey Rin, why don't you enter?' Xu asked, I blushed ' is Squall in a good mood?' she stood up holding a pile of papers 'Galbadia called awhile ago, things aren't good' the secretary said and I fell silent for a while 'but I guess he'll be glad to see you..' she pressed the button and opened the doors of his office, I looked and saw him buried in his work, maybe I should be here another time. No... I walked in the large office and stopped in front of him. The commander of Balamb Garden looked up at who came and stared for a while .
'Hey....' I said in a whisper and went over to him , sometimes when he was so dispersed like this I couldn't talk with him but I knew that he wanted someone to talk with , he opened his arms as I sat on his lap , Squall hugged me tightly and placed a quick kiss on my lips ''Is something wrong?' I asked , he shook his head ' Sefier told me that some formed groups in Galbadia are fighting against the government, and now they blame us for it ... but then he told me that he is taking everything under control' .. 'Sefier? taking everything under his control' who would have thought that the ex-knight of Ultimecia would be the Head Master of Galbadia , in the progress of years he became one after dealing with lots of troubles , he deserved it .but Squall didn't really trust him .
'By threatening' I giggled and saw him smile 'you know that you can rely on your rival, besides I know he'll deal with the problem' Squall sighed and nodded his head, he looked at me 'so what brings you here? I thought we would meet after two hours'... 'Can't I come and see my beloved husband?'... 'No, it's not that...it's just, oh yeah did you go to Dr.Kadowaki to see what's wrong? You weren't feeling so well' like he could read my mind ,Squall did notice how ill I was the past two days and demanded that I go see the doctor .
I moved my legs and lowered my gaze to the ground , I am going to tell him , I thought for it for awhile and sighed deeply 'Squall , how many years have we been married?' my husband laughed ' four wonderful years.... I can't believe you forgot' he kissed me deeply , I broke it by biting my lip 'I didn't , and guess what after nine months we'll have another member in our family' I said almost cracking the words , the family that contains me , Squall and Angelo .
I felt doubt flick me when I saw no emotion on my lover's face then suddenly I saw a wide smile on his face, the glitter in his eyes appeared, and it happened very rarely but I was glad . My husband placed his hand on my stomach and looked down 'you...mean....a baby!!' he whispered and I nodded my head, Squall laughed 'Hyne... I can't believe it , I am going to be a father' he yelled and kissed me passionately , I relaxed myself in his embrace as I kissed him back feeling all my emotions rise , and here I was afraid of how he will react . He broke the kiss and looked at me with his soft blue eyes that lost all it's coldness in just a moment, people would tell me how his stare makes them scared, even students... but never was he like this with me 'I love you..' I felt myself melt , even if he said it every night I would still feel like it was the first time he said it 'I love you too..'
What is it with me and day dreaming? Guess I drank some weird potion yesterday , I picked up the picture and smiled as I saw myself , Squall and our four years old daughter , Raine ..
I opened my eyes slowly and blinked twice before my vision got clearer , I felt myself very weak, I guessed the time would be very early in the morning because of the birds that were singing outside and the sun light that entered the room. I heard a humming sound, a song of which I knew. I turned in pain to my other side, I wanted to remember how it was giving birth but I couldn't remember, it was an incredible pain but it was like a quick flash.
I smiled when I felt my heart full with warmth at the sight that was in front of me, my husband was holding our daughter in his arms . She was only one day old as I could remember and yet every time I wake up and look I see him holding her, some nurses came to take her away but he refused . I didn't have the chance to talk to him since the day I gave birth to her because of the drugs they gave me .
Squall was humming a song as a soft look was placed on his face 'what are we going to call her?' I heard my voice and almost vomited, it was a mix of a sickness and weakness that almost sounded like a whisper, he lifted his face from her and smiled . He walked over to me, I moved a bit so he could sit on the edge of the bed. 'Hey... I thought you would never wake up , I was worried' he said and placed a soft kiss on my forehead and putted my small daughter next to me , I looked at her for the second time and smiled . My first time was when she was still covered with blood and crying, I remember fainting afterwards . But now here she was, something that was living inside of me that came out '...I can't believe you're the one that made me suffer' I whispered and stared at her sleeping figure , everything was tiny in her . her tiny eyes were closed , I could barely hear her soft breathing . She had some black hair on her head; I turned to Squall 'how many hours did I sleep?'... 'A day and a half ... but you wake up and sleep again'... 'I feel so tired' I said and pulled my baby closer to me, I am a mother...how wonderful can that be?
'go back to sleep , I'll be right here' I smiled as he laid next to me , I missed his arms being around . My husband covered us both with his arms 'pick a name....' I whispered feeling my eye lids heavy leaning on his chest '....Raine' Squall said his mother's name and I sighed deeply and looked at my daughter 'then Raine it is....' I agreed on the name and cuddled closer to Squall, while drifting to sleep I could still hear his humming ...
I placed the picture back on the table and shook my head, no wonder how years pass so quickly, she was a baby then a four year old girl. I can still remember how she first called us , how she crawled , then walked , then talked...the first day of her being in school , then junior high , then high school and now she was sixteen years old , I looked at the picture beside it , it was a picture taken of Rained recently .. She had her father's blue cold grey eyes, my black straight long hair that she tied in a pony tail. Her features were a mixture of mine and his. As her friends said once... when she wants to be sweet and cute, she can make her features change into an angel but when a battle comes, or even when she gets angry... she turns to the exact opposite and they were true , but she took over her father's personality more .She was girl with only few words, thinks to herself most of the time . But she isn't as closed as her father was,
I sighed knowing that in a blink of an eye she would soon get married, then have her first baby like I did. Suddenly I felt my chest tighten, what if? I imagined an image of her sleeping in a freezer in one of Esther's labs, I shook my head violently, it will never happen... even if sometimes some of the sorceresses power effect her , it can't take her away so that she would be a threat grainiest the world , Ultimecia is died .. and nothing can hurt me or my daughter , even if ... I turned to the picture and stared for it for a while , even if .. She was a daughter of a sorceress...
So...what do you think? Is it better then the first? Please review and tell me if I have mistakes now..