Prince of Thieves

This is a variation of the story of Hermes (it's a little more detailed).

"Where the heck is my cattle?!" Apollo shouted in anger. Two of his cattle were missing.

"Never mind—I still have to visit my little brother," he sighed. Then he saw little Hermes, eating off his cattle.

"That brat! Only a few hours old and he's a thief!" He gritted his teeth.

Without hesitation, Apollo took Hermes by the hand and dragged him over.

Artemis, who saw her angry twin furiously dragging Hermes, told him "Relax, Apollo! Little brother is only hours old and…"

"Shut up! He's a god! He can do anything minutes after being born! And of all the things he could first do he chose to steal!" Apollo snapped.

Meanwhile on Mt. Olympus,

"Father! This son of yours is a thief! He stole my cattle!" Apollo told Zeus.

His father stroked his lightning bolt. Hermes, seeing the terrifying bolt, shivered in fear and locked himself in a room. There, a tortoise swam peacefully with a dying one. Hermes got the shell of the old tortoise and formed a lyre.

It must have been a long time—Apollo had been convincing Zeus to strike Hermes with lightning.

"No, your brother is already doing his second act," Zeus interfered.

"What second act? Stealing the keys to remain locked?" Apollo rolled his eyes.

"What's the matter now?" Athena asked as she stomped in. "Seriously, Apollo, you can't understand infants—especially your brother,"

Apollo explained "But he—"

But he was cut off by Athena, who quipped "…stole your cattle? Right, I heard it. But, honestly, you know infant gods can already do stuff human adults can,"

Before long, Poseidon came and said "Apollo, did I not tell you to slaughter the old tortoise to let the young one roam more?"

Then it struck Apollo. "Perhaps Hermes is now doing me a favor…the tortoises are there!" he thought.

Then Hermes came with a lyre made of the old tortoise shell.

"Looks like Hermes has done you a favor…" Poseidon commented. This time Apollo had to agree.

But the prince of thieves still isn't done.

So, tell me, is it too rushed or OOC or what?

-PLJ