Chapter 1: The mistake
Hello my readers! This is my first fanfic ever so please go easy on me but also PLEASE help me. I need to know how to improve my writing. ok so in this chapter Leo has pure black hair and Raph has dark brown. they're human princes two years apart. in age. So enjoy!
An 8 year old Leo was curled up peacefully in his bed. He was smiling in his sleep because he was dreaming about his brothers. Only one he could stand to play with. Michelangelo was only two years old and Donatello was four so that left Raphael who was six. Even though Leonardo didn't know his other two brothers very well, he still loved them with all of his heart.
"Leo? Leo you awake yet? Wake up!" Leo's dream was interrupted by; speak of the devil, Raphael who stood right by his brother's bed.
"What do you need Raph?" Leo mumbled tiredly still half-asleep.
"Leo can we play? I'm bored." Raph whined.
"Just go back to sleep" The young said as he shooed him of and tried to regain his dreams. But Raph couldn't be shut down that easily. He climbed on top of Leo's bed and laid down face up on Leo himself. "I can't. The sky's awake, so I'm awake. And I wanna' play!" Leo then pushed Raph off of him and his bed and said while failing to suppress a laugh, "Go play by yourself." Raph fell with a dull thud as he hit the ground. He pouted for a few seconds contemplating what he should do to hang out with his immediate older brother. Finally Raph had a light bulb moment and got up and peaked over the bed. He then said mischievously, "Do you wanna' do ninjitsu?" That one question intrigued Leo enough to get up and entertain his little brother.
As they quickly scampered through the halls, Raph could barely contain his excitement. Leo had to constantly keep shushing him when Raphael's squeals got too loud. After what felt like an eternity, the 2 boys finally entered a large empty room that was perfect for what Leo was about to do.
They came into the room and shut the doors. They didn't want to wake up their two brothers and sensei & wife. (His wife not theirs) "Do the magic! Do the magic!" Raph repeated excitedly. Leo then began to move his hands in a way that resembled a sorcerer. Then a small but very bright blue orb of light began to form at his fingertips. He asked his brother, "You ready?" Raph just nodded eagerly because he was entranced by the small orb. Once Leo thought it was ready, he flung his hands in the air releasing the orb. Raph's green eyes were reflecting the light making them a gentle blue. The orb floated in the air for a few more seconds then exploded. It was very loud but Raph was loving it. The explosion caused the room t rumble a bit. Leo stomped the ground and the tiles split and made a huge ball made from the broken tiles. Leo walked over to it and put his hand on the top. As he did that the ball began to take form and made a ceramic giant turtle that stands on to legs. He got behind it and introduced him to Raphael. "Hello! I'm Metalhead and I like warm hugs" Leo said in a high pitched funny voice. Raph ran up to Metalhead and hugged him. "I love you Metalhead!"
Leo decided to do something more extreme. He said to Raph, "Hey Raph, go stand by the door. I wanna' try something." Raph immediately obeyed and scuttled over to the door. When he turned around, he saw Leo point on the Kantana blades he strapped to back before they left his room, over to the window. Dark clouds began to form. Leo started to float a few inches off the ground. Lightning began to crack across the sky. As one very large one zapped down to the ground near the castle, an almost deafening thunder clap boomed over the small town. Electricity began to from along his outstretched blade. Leo couldn't hear anything. He just felt full of rage for some reason. But he turned quickly towards Raph. Raph gasped at what Leo looked like. Leo landed on the ground and looked really peeved off at something. Raph prayed desperately that it wasn't him. But Leo just looked scary altogether. His eyes had gone completely into light. There was nothing there except almost blinding ghostly blue light. His hair was spiked because of the electricity coursing through his veins. The lightning also convulsed all over his body to give him a frightening appearance.
After Leo finally gathered enough electricity, he stabbed his sword into the ground. The lightning that was inside was released in a large ring that expanded all over the room. Raph had no time to protect himself. He had only enough time to cover his head. He screamed in pain and that seemed to shock (get it? 'Shock'? Because you know, electricity. Yeah, I'll shut up now.) Him out of his trance. When he looked up, he was horrified by what he had done.
So what ya think? Cliff hanger! So please if you have any questions ask me in review or pm and just tell me what i need to work on. So have a great day and ill update ASAP!