My first story. Please be nice. If you can, tell me my mistakes. This story will have the major gods and a little minor gods. Ares and Aphrodite's daughter comes in later. This chapter has Makaria as the main character. Please tell me how I can make my story better. It'll really mean a lot. R&R if you can.
Hera paced around, going back and forth. Today was a big day. Persephone was coming back, and she heard that Persephone will keep one of her daughters in the over world with her. Hera knew about this, and so did the other goddesses, but the gods have no idea what was going on. Aphrodite brushed her golden hair, while Athena waited patiently. Artemis was sharpening her arrows for the daily hunt, Hestia was very much excited, and Demeter was eager to see what her grandchild looked like.
Then, a shadow appeared and Hermes came from the shadow. Holding Persephone and the child. Hermes set down Persephone and the child. "Thank you Hermes." Persephone thanked him before he turned to tell Zeus that Persephone has arrived. "You're welcome, anytime Persephone." Hermes smiled, and then took off again.
Demeter ran up to her daughter and hugged her. "I missed you so much." Demeter cried softly. She backed away. "How was your trip?" Artemis asked. "A little rough, I believe Hermes had a poor breakfast this morning." Persephone replayed. "Learn anything new?" Athena asked. "Yes, I learned that men fight too much. Oh yeah, I did bring one of my daughters with me. Meet Makaria, my youngest. And the Goddess of Blessed Death, Trickery, and Torture." Persephone answered while pointing to the child who was hiding behind her legs.
The child, Makaria came out to meet the 6 goddesses. All were shocked. She was… adorable.
She has black long hair, her right eye covered up, like her father's. She was wearing a long black sleeve shirt with details of a sword and shield. Her pants are black with red on them symbolizing blood, they thought. She has a tattoo on her right arm that resembles a flower that is purple. In her hair are a flute and a snake hair-clip made of gold and has small rubies for eyes. She was wearing long boots that are tight on her and that they are black.
"Say hi Maka!" Said an excited Persephone. "Hi." Said Makaria. Her voice was soft, but yet, very frighten. "It's okay, they won't bite. See, that's my mother, also your grandmother, Demeter, Goddess of the Harvest." Persephone described. Demeter came closer to the child, who surprisingly stood still in one place.
"Hi Makaria. I see you have your mother's eyes, with a tint of blue." Demeter said.
"This is Athena, Goddess of Wisdom and War. She teaches me archery and skills in battle." Persephone said.
Now, Makaria has been taking steps toward the other goddesses.
"I like War." Makaria said.
"So do I." Said an unknown voice. Ares came out from hiding.
"And I also told Zeus about this little girl." Ares said getting into Makaria's face.
"Don't you have a wife to go to or something, maybe a War of some sort, cause last time I checked, the Romans are attacking Greece as we speak." Makaria said.
With that said, Ares had left to go into 'War'.
"The Romans aren't attacking." Athena said.
"I know, I tricked him. Do you know how easy it is to trick men? Not very hard." Makaria stated.
"I told you that she was Goddess of Trickery." Persephone said.
"You weren't kidding." Artemis said, "How do you feel about hunting Maka?"
"I love hunting; I usually hunt deer and bears." Maka replayed.
"How 'bout Persephone, do you mind if I take Maka hunting with me?" Artemis asked.
"Not at all, you two can bond during that time, I need you home before dark, but with Artemis, I bet you'll be fine." Persephone agreed.
"Yes, we'll have so much fun." Artemis said.
"You two be careful, and Persephone, you must be tired." Hera stated.
"A little thanks." Persephone thanked.
Meanwhile
"You have a perfect aim." Artemis said surprised.
"My dad taught me. He said I never missed once, and he also said you can help me improve." Maka replayed.
"I can, but you already know all the basics. Athena might become jealous." Artemis said still shocked at the target that Maka had perfectly shot on her first try.
"Tell me something, how can you be so good at aiming and have some really good trickery skills?" Artemis asked.
"I'm good at aiming since I'm used to moving targets, and that I'm good at trickery since Men care about some things: Wars to be won, battles to be lost, and to come home, get laid, and start all over, with a different woman every time. Ugh, it makes me sick. If only Men can see the pain inside beauty, which can give woman an edge." Maka replayed.
"Huh, you are wise." Artemis said, "Best explanation I have for you is that men don't take us seriously. But when a man has an affair, trust me, you don't want to be Zeus. Otherwise you'll deal with Hera. And you're right. Men should she the pain inside beauty." Artemis stated when she lined her arrow on her bow.
"That's why you're a virgin?" Maka asked.
"Yes, for many reasons." Artemis replayed.
Makaria turned back to her target. Once she lined up her arrow onto her bow, she heard something. She turned quickly to see what it is. Nothing stood, and nothing was there. It was only her and Artemis.
Artemis took a look at her and started to get worried.
"Something got your attention?" She asked.
"Huh, ugh no, every things fine." Maka said.
When about to line her arrow up again, the noise came back, this time louder and clearer. The noise turned into a scream. 'Help', it yelled, 'Help'.
Maka but her arrow down and sense something wrong.
"Artemis." She said.
Artemis looked at her. "What's up?" She asked.
"Some things wrong here, way wrong." She said.
"Like how?" Artemis asked.
"It just stopped," she said, "that cry, for help."
Artemis looked at her. 'Help'? What was going on?
"I think we should head back?" Artemis suggested.
"Yeah, me too." Maka agreed.
When they returned, they were greeted by the gods and goddesses. All but one, the unhappy one. Ares.
"He found his way back?" Artemis said in surprised.
"Huh, no surprise, my tricks never last long." Maka said.
Artemis looked at her.
'Back in the woods, she had perfect aim, and good theory about men having affairs, and she heard a cry of help from who knows how far. It's surprising she is still young and already found a better way on how to stop Zeus, Ares, and Poseidon of having so many affairs and to stop coming home with an angry wife.'
Artemis looked at Ares. He had that evil smirk on his face. 'Oh boy.' Thought Artemis. 'What's he gonna do this time?'
Ares got up and walked over to them.
Maka was backing away, little step after little step.
Ares was about to speak until Zeus called out to him.
Ares growled, but went over to his father.
Hera came over to the two.
"Did you enjoy your hunt?" She asked.
"Yes very, and Maka found out a way to get men to stop having affairs, or something like that." Artemis said.
"Oh," Hera could only say.
"Yes, she said that men should see the pain inside beauty." Artemis replayed.
Maka looked up toward Artemis.
Suddenly, Artemis was tackled by someone.
"Ouch, watch it Apollo." Artemis yelled at her brother.
"Sorry, sorry." Is all he can say to his raging sister.
Maka turned and headed outside.
Artemis followed, curiously.
"Artemis, there was that cry again." She said.
"Oh." Artemis whispered.
"Its saying, 'Help! I'm trapped. Anyone, help!" She added.
Artemis was surprised. She can only think of where it was coming from.
"Never mind, it must be my brother torturing the souls that are yelling for mercy." Maka recalled.
"One of your brothers torture souls?" Artemis asked.
"Yes, he is the God of Torture, slaughtering, and killing." Maka answered.
Artemis shriveled at the thought. A blood-thirsty child, someone that must've came from Hades side.
"Well, before I left to follow you outside, Athena was about to tell a story, do you want to hear it?" Artemis asked.
"Sure, it can take my mind off of me brother torturing the souls. He's mostly by our father's side, but he goes to the deepest pits of Tartarus to torture souls that were evil when they were alive." Maka replayed.
They went inside, to hear Athena's story, which was just starting.