So this is my first WoW story. It is an AU story with later yaoi content. Disclaimer: i do not own any of the trademarks or properties of Blizzard . All my Characters are made up for personal enjoyment.
Can people please give me review on my story. I want to know what I can do better. Thanks
Smack!!!! Crash!!
There was loud thud behind me, and I suddenly whipped around, to face behind myself. I found myself staring at the hulking face (if you could even call it that) of an elemental stone behemoth. It had just broken off a branch and threw it at me. I quickly threw up a strong shield around myself, and flung my hand out shouting, "Djaviir!" A ball of luminescent sapphire energy erupted crackling from my palm and soared in a straight line towards the elemental. It connected with a satisfying flash and hissing snap. When the light from of the blast had subsided I gently eased my eyes open to see a molten mass of stone. I turned around and came face to face with a group of 6 more elementals. I found myself encircled by them and a momentary lapse of panic crossed my mind, 'what if I don't make it out alive?!' I quickly snapped myself together and realized that one of them was saying something, "RRrraochh daarrr gehct aourocht jaaarr….gjhhhrra….djaarch" You are trespassing foolish boy…now…die. The one who had spoken suddenly started towards me, and the others soon followed. I silently laughed at them. They thing they can take me on? Ha, well, bring it on! I reached inside myself and rapidly cast out a series of white bursts that slammed into the center of each figure and made them double over onto the ground; I finished them off with another flash of light and smiled as I watched their remains bubble on the hard earth.
I stepped away from the guardians' remains and proceed onwards to what I was really looking for. Within the centre of the glade was an amber podium with lavender and jade diffused around it. A small pool of crystal clear water bubbled over rocks and the scents of honey, and jasmine, and rose petals could be smelt. I shielded myself with invisibility and edged closer. I saw no more elementals protecting it, but there were about 6 elves standing around with their armor loose and swords hanging pitifully from their scabbards. This was going to be easy. I waltzed out into the open air and threw a heavy shield around myself and then fired a blast of flaming energy at the pool. Scalding water sprayed out of it hitting two soldiers and they fell down, clutching at their faces. They other four soldiers whipped around in time to see four more blasts of fire streaking towards them. They screamed in terror as one by one they were incapacitated. I sent a huge wave of fire out of myself and watched it consume to corpses. I walked over to the podium and picked up the goal of my mission. A single, cylindrical diamond, about a foot long and 4 inches around. It was emanating a soft purple glow and a sweet humming sound. My hand closed around it and I placed it into a padded pocket on my jacket. I was about to walk out of the glade, when I heard a strained groan. I looked back in shock to find that one of the soldiers, a young elf of about 19 looking at me with pleading eyes. I threw back my head and laughed at him. He reached out a hand towards my foot and I kicked out a him connecting with his ribs. I felt them crack and he grimaced silently. "Disgusting night elf!" He gasped slowly then asked, "Why are you doing this? Who are you?" I laughed again and said in a dark voice, "you have no idea who you're messing with young elf. You got in way over your head." With that I conjured up a circle of energy and stepped into it on my way to sunrise city, but not before throwing a death curse back at the elf. I heard him cry out, smiled, and entered the blackness of the portal.