The Adventure of the Missing Cavailer

by Tealxfire

The Adventure of the Missing Cavalier is a detective short story I wrote in high school. And I really want some chapter by chapter feed back. I'm posting it all at once and then the last chapter is an analysis I was required to write. I really hope you like it, please leave all comments: good, bad, grammatically corrections, whatever! (":

1. Chapter 1

The Adventure of the Missing Cavalier

1

Nothing has been happening. Not a single crime. No thefts, murders, ransoms, or any notable mysteries. Since when has 1881 London become so ordinary? And ordinary meant boring for the Inspector. And when he became bored, he got antsy. And these never mixed well with the Inspector; he becomes so very desperate for a mystery that he'd look high and low for any crime. I just recently began tagging along with the Inspector, barely a month ago. He owned a little detective office off Baker Street and got work from time to time. He was always alone and usually carried on his detective work as so with the exceptions of passing comrades. But then one day, he introduced himself to me and ever since I've gone along with him and his adventures.

It was an early Saturday and the Inspector and I treaded across a moderately crowded street. Passing us by were business men off to work, children rushing to school, and the paperboys handing out morning newspapers like hotcakes, obviously containing some breaking news that I knew without a doubt the Inspector would get us involved. I looked over at the Inspector and already his gloomy expression of boredom was lighting up and becoming more alive.

"I wonder what is causing all this shambolic commotion," I questioned as we picked up a loose newspaper off a bench.

The Inspector turned it over to the front page and a smirk spread wide across his face, "How exciting, indeed! The Annual Battersea Show has certainly snuck up on me!"

He began to chuckle and smoke his pipe as I took the paper away from him and read the headline.

BATTERSEA'S PRIZED PUP STOLEN

"Battersea? The dog show competition?"

"Precisely so! The famous Cavalier King Charles Spaniel has won the past four challenges and has entered in for his fifth and final performance, but apparently he has gone missing. And it seems the contestants were much more eager to participate this year than any other."

"Why's that?"

"Well, you see, originally the prize at the end is a mere £3.000, but this year has risen to a smacking £30.000! How fascinating!"

"Inspector, since when have you known so much about dog shows?"

"It is my business to know what other people don't know," said he with one last puff from his pipe and started off, "Come on, let's go see a man about a dog."