Hello everybody
it is my first fanfiction. I have already writed in french and I try to traduce it in english.
My english is very bad I think, so I am looking for a beta-reada who could correct my text and, if possible, show me my mistakes (so I could learn to write in english)
I expect that you will like it ^.^
prologue
Arrival of the mugiwaras on an island is always messy.
In short, we start from this situation :
The say in the thousand sunny was peaceful. I mean, peaceful for us. The weather was spring, the girls use it to take a sunbath. Around they, Sanji flits, the eyes in heart, with a lot of delicacies for offer to his beautiful girls. Luffy, who was fishing with Ussop, stopped his activity for drool behind the food made by Sanji. His persuasiveness was so powerful that he needed just 3 minutes so that the cook was tired to hear Luffy whines and he went to the kitchen to prepare brownies for all the crew. Chopper was doing a check-up of Franky's back (he needs it times to times). Brook was drinking his tea and reading a Robin's book. Finally, Zoro was sleeping in his corner.
After an instant, Nami decides to announce the new …
- We are going to arrive in a spring island in one or two hours...
to arrive to this one :
- AN ISLAND ! AN ISLAND ! AN ISLAND !
Luffy had jumped on the bow and started to dancing, yelling this word for everybody who can hear him. It was a moment that they was on the sea and all the crew cannot wait to see the earth. But the reactions of luffy was always a little bit exaggerated. Everybody prepare to get ready. When the boat moor in the island, Luffy went like a rocket to … somewhere. Nami sighed about his recklessness. And she started to give charges.
- Chopper and Ussop, go find him !
- It suffice to follow the noise anyway … interferes Ussop
- Sanji and Franky, go to the market and make it sure that we miss nothing
- YEEEESSS NAAAMIIIIII-CCCHHHHWWWAAANNNN
- *sigh* Zoro you … stay on the boat, we don't wait to lose you...
- What do you mean by "lose" ? My sense of direction is very good !
Laughs in the room please...
- Euh yes … but no … you don't want that your debt increase ?
- Groumph
- well done ! So, I was to who … Ah yes, Brook, you can do what you want but I counselor you DEEPLY to check if there is a treasure in the island !
- Euh … fine miss Nami
- Robin and me, we go shopping !
- That don't look very equitable... dare to say Zoro but he shut up when he was pierce by the angry look of the redhead.
And therefore, the band leaves in a noisy procession across the island