This is the preface to my Harry Potter novel… I'm having it published and I just wanted to try it out on the public… Please be truthful, review, and tell me if I have any grammatical errors!!!
Disclaimer: No, I don't own Harry Potter, J. K. Rowling does. I would like to meet J. K. Rowling; nevertheless, the chance to meet her is very slim. However, if she does browse these fanfictions I would greatly appreciate her valued wisdom…
Prologue
The rain falls like bullets. A woman, soaked to the bone, runs up to an elegant manor with numerous lights on. In her arms is a baby, barely a few days old, tucked in a blue blanket. After the woman sets the baby on the porch, she pulls a letter out from her jacket and sets it in the baby's blanket. It says, "To Benjamin A. Jones." The woman, her wet brown hair dripping water on the blanket, tells the baby softly, "Be good my little girl."
She kisses the baby's cheek tenderly and rings the doorbell. Quickly, the woman runs and hides in some shrubs that have a clear view of the front door. A young man opens the door. Looking around for someone, the baby cries. Surprised, he picks her up. The letter falls onto the porch. The man reaches down and grabs the letter, looks out into the front yard, and walks into the house with the blue eyed baby in his arms. The woman, whose eyes are brimming with tears, says out loud, "Goodbye, Lillian." She then runs into the darkness, and the rain falls even harder.