Hi!
This is my first story, and i really need feedback from readers so i can improve and make my stories worth reading, so please review.
Disclaimer- I do not own Halo, all OCs are mine
PROLOUGE-
"Jiralhanae ships, standard line. Shipmaster, they outnumber us, three-to-one!" the Sangheili manning the sensors station exclaimed. "Good, then it is an even fight." Rtas 'Vadum, Shipmaster of the Assault Carrier Shadow of Intent stated. "All ships, fire at will. Burn their mongrel hides."
"Truth's Ship isn't taking part in the attack; he must have gone to ground." Commander Miranda Keyes assumed over the D77H-TCI Pelican's radio. Sergeant Major Avery Johnson sat in the copilot seat of the pelican, "Roger that ma am." He turned to the pilot, "hit the door." The Pilot acknowledged the order with a nod. A total of four pelicans exited the hanger of the United Nations Space Command frigate Forward Unto Dawn, and began to descend into the atmosphere of the alien structure below. Almost immediately after exiting the frigate, three of the four pelicans containing the initial strike force got shot down by a Covenant Seraph formation. The Pelican's hull glowed red as it entered the structures atmosphere, violently shaking along the way. I sat in the pelican's troop and cargo bay along with six other Orbital Drop Shock Troopers. Pacing back and forth within the troop bay was Master Chief Petty Officer Spartan-117, a living legend. I looked down at my SR99D-S2 .50 Caliber Sniper Rifle, making sure everything was securely in place. Next to me was my best friend and squad mate, Staff Sergeant Hana Kitsune. She had dark red hair, barely regulation length hair. Her name had an ancient Japanese background. I am 1st Lieutenant Kyu Tsumald, Executive Officer of the ODST 41st Special Operations Battalion. Our objective was to find a landing zone for the Forward Unto Dawn and clear it of any and all hostile forces. We didn t have any Intel of what to expect when we landed, so some of the others were nervous. The radio crackled in my helmet, "Hey Kyu, you ok?" Hana asked over our private channel, You seem kinda tense. I glanced at her, "Yeah, I m ok. How about you?" She looked down at her MA5C Assault Rifle, "Kyu, we need to talk" she said. Before I could respond, the SquadCom Channel overrode our private one.