Hello people out there. This is the first story I have ever made so I want you to tell me what i need to fix.

-E-grape

Daughter of Victory

Prologue

The monsters were closing in I needed a place to hide but where.

"Aha!" I thought "An abandoned building." I quickly looked around, threw open the doors and ran inside. I needed to find a room that had a reinforced door, so the monsters couldn't get in right away. I searched the entire building until I found the perfect room. "Boiler Room, of course," I mumbled "Why didn't I think of that sooner. Well at least I found it."

I ran inside and slammed the door. Then I started to form a plan. I started to get to work. "That door won't hold much longer" I thought. I started to work faster, this will take awhile, but I will succeed, I always do.