This is my first fanfiction so tell me what you think about the idea, then the story itself.

(thoughts)
I guess the first thing you should know about me is that my father was a time-traveler, and he went by the name Paradox. Before he went back in time to change history, he gave each of his children a copy of his signature malefic monsters. The only ones he kept were his malefic tuner, his synchro and i believe the name of the other one was " Malefic Truth Dragon". He gave each card to the one he thought could still use it in their deck. For example my deck, a similar copy of Zane Truesdale, after who i am named, he gave a Malefic Cyber-End Dragon. I'm 14 years old and my brothers are 20, they're twins, and my sister is 17. My older brother, the older twin, was pretty lucky though, he got 2 monsters, malefic blue-eyes, and malefic red-eyes. His name is Seo. And right now i'm having a really tough duel against him.
Seo had Chaos Zone and Malefic Red-Eyes B. Dragon on the field with one card face-down. I had no monsters and one trap face-down.
LP Seo(8000) Zane (3200)
Seo says,"Come on little Bro, don't tell me that's all you have!" "Attack me and you'll see what i still have!", i reply angrily," You may have countered some of my moves but i'm about to turn this around!"
"Fine then! Red-eyes attack him! Show him who's the stronger brother!" Seo says.
LP Seo (8000) Zane(800)
"I activate my trap!" I scream. "(I can't believe he fell for that) Damage Gate! Now i can bring back a monster from my grave that has less attack then the damage i just took! I choose Cyber Dragon!"
And with that a metallic armless and wingless dragon appeared on my side of the field. In all honesty, i think if it was named Cyber Serpent, it would have made more sense, but i'm getting side tracked.
"So," i yell at Seo, "is that your turn?"
"Yup" was his only response
"Fine, i draw"
"(Yes!) I activate power bond to fuse the Cyber Dragon in my had with the one on my field! Come out! Cyber Twin Dragon!"
The monster that came out looked exactly like Cyber Dragon, only it had 2 heads.
"And thanks to power bond his attack is doubled!" (Atk=5600) Seo just looked unimpressed.
"Now Cyber Twin Dragon attack his Red-Eyes!"
LP Seo(4800) Zane(800)
"Cyber Twin! Finish this!" And with that both heads started charging pure white energy. When they fired, a huge explosion fired.
"Finally! I beat you!" I was extatic
"You're ahead of yourself little brother" Seo smirked, "I activate Defense Draw!" Now I take no damage and get to draw a card."
"Guess there's nothing more to do but end my turn."
"Then Power Bonds effect activates and you take 2800 points of damage. That's what happens when you put all your effort in one move and leave no back-up-"
"Who said i don't have a back-up?
I'm activating the effect of damage eater in my graveyard! By removing him from play i gain the points i would've lost!"
LP Seo(4800) Zane(3600)
"Looks like we're almost tied now." I told him.
"Please, in a duel where one mistake can cost you the duel, fro the moment the first card is drawn, there is no time the duelists are tied!" Was Seo's response. "It's my turn if your done now. And first i remove the Blue-Eyes White Dragon in my deck to summon Malefic Blue-Eyes White Dragon! And with that a giant white dragon, in the usual sense not made from metal, looked toward the sky and roared ferociously. Now i activate Burial from the Different Dimension! With this spell i can select up to 3 removed from play monsters and return them to my graveyard. I choose my Blue-Eyes, ad my Red-Eyes. But now i remove them from play again to summon Black Luster Soldier, Envoy of the Beginning. Now i attack your Dragon with my Soldier!"
"Huh?!" Was all i could muster.
"(Why would he...), Oh no!"
"Oh yes, i activate the effect of Honest! Now my soldier gains the attack of your Dragon!" (Atk=8600)
LP Seo(4800) Zane(200)
"Now his effect activates, allowing me to attack again"
LP Seo(4800) Zane(0)
"Zane your improving you managed to take out a decent amount of my Life Points this time." Seo stated
"Yeah but you still whooped me. And you didn't even bring out your ace." I argued
"You didn't either so what are you getting at?"
"I don't want you to go easy on me, how am i supposed to improve if you never push me? That's what i'm getting at."
"You may be the youngest between us, but at your age-"
"Don't tell me what you couldn't do at my age! At your age you didn't have half the cards you use today! Leave alone the Malefic cards! So i have to get better, i have to at least stand a chance!" I screamed hoping he would understand for the first time, but knowing he wouldn't. I'm not sure if my father knew when he gave me the card that it affects me, not physically ,but mentally. Every time i summon the card, i hear a voice, a chanting, that constantly tells me to destroy, to become something dark. And it's getting harder to resist so i try not to summon it very often, if at all. I just hope i can keep resisting before something happens.