Me: Someone left a review recently (in chapter 5) that said they didn't like how many OC's I was using, but they liked the story. I explained that my OC's were simply to bring out qualities in the main character that the cannon characters couldn't without being OOC.
Then, I reread my first chapter…and ate my own words. In this chapter, I had used the characters I created when I was SEVEN. They consisted of six hedgehogs and two echidnas. *facepalm* HOW REDUNDANT CAN YOU GET? And not only that, I was totally OBSESSED with them, and focused entirely on them, almost COMPLEATELY leaving out the main character! AND I gave away parts of the story! *dies*
I've never been so embarrassed…
Anywho, tis fixed now. Here is a much shorter chapter with completely different characters. Enjoy!
It was gone.
The concept was mind-numbing, surreal even. After all these years, after all that had transpired there, it was just…gone. She'd broken down before, after it'd happened. They all had. So many had died…There was not a dry eye on the entire station.
But she was okay now. She shouldn't be, she knew. She should be in shambles after witnessing…she didn't want to think about it. The event had shaken everyone, even the strongest of them.
But he would save them. Sonic would fix everything. He always did.
After it'd happened, he quietly pulled himself together and stood and faced the shattered remnants of what was once their home with an air of quiet resolve, emerald eyes burning with defiance. The defiance that had saved them, all those years ago…
That stubborn refusal to accept the way things were had set him apart from them. He never quit fighting. That hedgehog would challenge the very laws of nature for them, so great was his rebellion. This, she knew as fact.
She, like the rest, had been overjoyed when he'd proclaimed that he could change circumstance, go back and erase this catastrophe from the folds of time.
There was something else though, in his eyes. An emotion she knew quite well. And, frankly, it scared her. It was his trapped look, mixed with a steadfast determination.
There was a catch.
This devastation was rooted too deep in their history…there was no way of stopping it. Fate would just carry their footsteps down the same worn path, over and over.
It was them. They were the key. This mixture of souls were never meant to meet, their paths should never have crossed. He had to end before it began, to unweave the very threads of destiny that bound them together. He had to keep them from ever meeting.
The thought of it tore her apart. She'd rather die, then never meet him. She told him so. She knew she was being selfish; she couldn't help it. They were the most unlikely of friends, all of them. They had formed an inseparable bond over the years that had held through whatever torments life had thrown at them. She'd watch the legend form, watched triumph and disaster shape him into what he was now, that inflexible barrier between them and the horrors that followed.
She was scared for him. They would forget, but he would remember. What would it be like for him, to walk through the paths of life alongside those who were closer than family, and they wouldn't even know it? He would be a stranger to them.
Time changes people. Their lives are shaped be occurrence. The friends he once knew would be forever lost, the representations of who they once were walking different paths. They would die today, giving their former selves a second chance at life. A chance that was torn from them…A chance that Sonic gave everything for, and they would never even know.
She watch as they made the preparations for his departure. It would require a great amount of energy, to tear a whole through the fabric of time. It shouldn't be possible, but Sonic was an anomaly himself.
Before he left, he turned toward them, his eyes sweeping over his friends one last time. And when their eyes met, she knew.
She would not forget. It was an impossibility, but his unreasonable defiance had worn off on her. She would remember, whatever it took. She would remember him. Remember the one who gave everything for them. The impossible legend.
Their guardian.
Their salvation.
Their closest friend.
She would remember.
Then everything went black.
Me: Soooooo…how did I do? Better? Good. REVIEW!