Finn and Rey

Hello i am new to writing fanfiction so be gentile please. but I would like criticisms and suggestions so feel free to give them

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POV: Finn

All i could feel was a searing hot pain in my back, flashing crimson and blue lights danced in front of my eyelids. I could not move, i felt so helpless only being able to lay in the cold ground not being able to help. One thing was for curtain, was Ray was in trouble, but something was wrong i felt empty like i lost something, something that left a hole in my heart. I couldn't quite place it something to do with sol-

BOOM. The world shook violently and all i cared about was of Rey was OK.

The shaking continued. Pain consumed me, my thoughts were cloudy. I could barely think straight. Something exploded, nothing made sense.

I was going to Die. I was dying. it was what i trained to do since i was young, get up, train, fight, follow orders and die for the first order like a good storm trooper. My only regret was not telling Rey how i felt, if only i wasn't a coward. I could feel the pull to give up and-

"FINN"

She found me. Then just as fast as a dream pain left and darkness consumed me.

POV:Rey

"Chewie. I've found him."

I cried out in pure relief. I could not believe it i thought i had lost him. I gently rolled him over. A lone tear rolled if my cheek. It fell onto his chest as the slow rise and fall determined that he was alive.

Chewie arrived.

"He's alive." that where the only words that i could say

"He's alive."

Quickly chewie lifted his body and we ran to the falcon my back was sore from where i hit the tree and my head keeps spinning. I could barely keep up to the wookie thinking nothing but Finns safety.

After take off I went to where Finn was hooked up to a dozen different machines i could barely see him. As i crouched down next to him I whispered in his ear. My heart beating a mile a minute. Tears started to flow silently down my face.

"you can't go." i let out a shaky sob "i won't let you"

She pressed her lips to his forehead tears falling on his face "i love you".

Immediately after she said that she could feel her cheeks burn, she knew perfectly well that he could not hear her, yet she didn't care, she loved him that was that.