Hey, this is my first story...ever, so I hope I write good enough to satisfy my audience. If not, I'll probably take this story off and rewrite a new one...just to keep things clear, Kurama and Shuuichi are separate, and Kuronue's alive. They live at Kurama'shideout in Makai.
flashback
'thoughts'
1st Movement:Prelude
If I said I wasn't who you thought I was...if you could see into my past...would you still accept me...?
He sat, leaning against the tree for support.He had been running from...'No...I don't run...never back down. Weak. They must think me weak now...NO!' His beautiful wine eyes defiant and hard. "I won't have them think me a weakling!" He said fiercly. "Shuuichi and Kuronue..."His eyes softened slightly. "Especially not Kurama. But..."
flashback
Hiei ran. He had felt he could trust them enough with some of his secrets. He had just finishedrelating tothem, one of his more hurtful stories. Why he chose that one even he didn't know...but that look in their eyes. Pity? Sympathy? These had been too much for him. He felt an overwhelming..sadness? Hn, what was he thinking! He didn't need their pity. Especially if...it came from Kurama. Even he couldn't bear this. So he left, and once he was out of sight, he ran.
He was so entranced in his own thoughts, he didn't hear a thing...
Change POV
He looked so forlorn. A slight twitch of the hand...widening of the eyes...so many emotions flashing through them. I looked on for a moment, then decided to confront him, my dear friend.
"Hiei...Hiei?" I whispered. He didn't hear me..."Hiei?" A little louder. He shook himself out, and turned his head slowly to stare at me blankly. Oh, Hiei...I wish I could just hold you now, but I couldn't bear to be rejected. Yet you need to be comforted. The painin your eyes hurts me, Hiei. "Talk to me, Hiei?"
His eyes suddenly looked hard. His next wordsalmost brokeme.
Normal POV
"I don't need your pity, kitsune. I don't need any of you! Why do you constantly ask me to talk to you! I finally do and all I get is looks of pity, kitsune. Pity! I don't want nor need that!" Hiei raged. "I never asked for any of this! I thought to trust you, but I should have known better. YOU of all people, Youko Kurama! I!"
Wincing from the volume, Kurama clamped a hand over Hiei's mouth. "Hiei, please calm down, and talk to me. I only want to see what upset you. You just took off running!" Hiei was struggling to get his mouth uncovered, finally succeeding, hescoffed "What upset me? You only did one of the things I hate most: pitying me!" Getting free of Kurama's grasp, he tried to leave, but was tackled by Kurama.
Kurama's POV
'Might as well be now or never...here goes!'
Normal POV
and hefell right on top of Hiei, and said to him "Hiei love, shut up." following this up quickly before he could protest with a kiss full on his lips.
IMPORTANT: Okay, this is the end of the prologue. I personally think it's a bit fast paced, but I tend to drag things out a bit I think. I can't believe this is what came out of my mind. Wow. Now, I NEED A BETA READER to help me with the story and manage the plot. It would be preferable if I could get someone who actually writes fics, but all I'm really looking for is someone with an open mind, and basic spell/grammar skills. If you want to apply, just leave a message at the reviewing place, and I'll contact you.Also, HELP ME GET IDEAS FOR FUTURE CHAPTERS PLZ! I'm just writing whatI think up, and it's kinda hard, so helpfulness is appreciated! Thanks!
Kaen