So this is my first fan fiction so please give me an honest opinion on what you think about my story please!
Chapter 1- Any other day
It all started like any other boring day and no the expected it to turn out the way it did, not even 17 year-old Lucy Heartphilia. Like any other morning Lucy would get out of bed, take a 20 minute shower get dressed into her school uniform which was a blue blazer with a white dress shirt and dark blue bow a plaited skirt and blue knee length stockings, then head down to the dining hall for breakfast then head to her private school Mermaid Heel High School for girls . But it instead consisted of the normal routine until breakfast.
As Lucy headed into the dining hall she noticed the absence of her father Jude Heartphilia, also known as one of the richest men alive. 'He's probably hiding in his office like usual' Lucy thought as she sat down at the large dining table and waited for her maid Virgo to bring her breakfast.
When The pink haired maid Virgo finally emerged with a plate of bacon, eggs, toast and a glass of orange juice Lucy asked " Good morning Virgo... Do you know where my father is?" as Virgo set down the plate in front of Lucy she said
"morning Lucy- Sama and yes your father Jude- Sama is currently in his office and wishes not to be disturbed" brushing back a strand of blond hairLucy sighs and mutters "figures" before starting on her breakfast.
-Time Skip 5 minutes before school starts-
Lucy hopped out of the limo before thanking Capricorn and telling him what time to pick her up after school then headed into the school. As Lucy walked towards her locker she ran into her friend Milliana and smiled at the sight of her cat obsessed friend "Lucy! Good morning!" Milliana shouts happily at Lucy "morning Milli-chan, you seem cheerful this morning" stated Lucy while observing her friends uniform. Milliana has light brown hair with a cat ear hairband on her head and purple lines on her face like whiskers , her uniform was similar to Lucy's but with knee length white stockings and cat pins all over the uniform. Lucy sighed at her friend before going to her locker and getting her books for the day after she finished Lucy and Milliana headed to English as Lucy sighed and said "this is going to be a long day"
-Time Skip after school-
Lucy walked out of the school with a bored expression on her face when she sees her ride and Capricorn standing outside of the car waiting for her, as she approached Capricorn bowed to her and said " Lucy- Sama how was your day at school? Are there any problems?"
Lucy smiled warmly at the overprotective butler and said " it was fine just long and boring Capricorn and no there were no problems" Capricorn nodded once before turning around and opening to door for Lucy before going around the car to the drivers seat. Sighing as she sat back Lucy watched as the car started and drove away.
-Time Skip at Heartphilia mansion-
Lucy munched on a bag of chips as she leaned back and watched the constantly changing screen on the tv as she tried to find a suitable channel when Virgo walked into the room and said " Lucy-Sama your father wishes for you to see him in his office" Lucy looked at Virgo and thought 'yeah wishes for me to not asks me to', getting up from the seat she said " Thank you Virgo" before heading towards her fathers office. As she walked down the long hallway Lucy kept on wondering what he would want with his daughter he never seems to notice, when Lucy finally got the large office doors she sighed and mentally prepared herself before knocking then heard the acknowledgement "enter" before opening the door and walking in. The large study had the walls on both sides covered in bookshelf's which were all filled with different kinds of books and in front of the large windows at the end of the room was a large desk with paper spread over it and behind the desk sitting on a comfortable chair was a blond haired middle aged man. Lucy walked until she was near the front of the desk and studied her father who was to occupied on his work to even look up and acknowledge his own daughter, crossing her arms Lucy asks "you wanted to see me father?" without even looking up from his work he says "yes, we have guests coming over tonight who might be willing to let their son marry you" Lucy's eyes widen before she shouts "marry?! I don't want to marry some stranger! Plus I'm only 17!", at Lucy's outburst Jude stands up from his work and glares at her daughter before angrily saying "Do not yell at me! If I decide you are going to marry someone then you will!" Lucy glares back at her father before yelling "No! I'm not! You don't decide who I marry! You do not control me-" Lucy gets cutoff when something hard hits her face making her fall to the fall, putting a hand on her cheek and looking at her father she realized that he was standing in front of her and had slapped her "I am in control of you young lady and if I decide so you will marry this man! Now get out I have work to do" Jude snarled before hedging back to his desk, Shakily standing up Lucy ran out of the office to her room where she flopped down on the bed a cried herself to sleep
so what did you think? Please leave your opinion of my story so that I can make it better and more interesting.
love
Nynaeve