this is for that asshole chris something: Okay i get it but i can't get a beta reader because i've been here for less than a year you B***** and plus i'm new to writing stories and if you think you can do better then f-ing try i give you and any one else permission to try i would honestly love to see more of this kind of stories! also i worked through it but i think i missed some but no one is forcing you to read a newbie's work so F-off AMEN (So it shall be)
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The Bijuu Commander
Chapter 1: the only survivors are demons rewrite
Naruto only wanted to be a kid but due to circumstances that befell him on his birthday he was scorned beaten, tortured, and on occasion attempted rape by the villagers (the last goes to a pink banshee whore) this was one of those times (I will not do rape in any way maybe attempted rape but never full on force sex and I will kill and or castrate any fucker who does do rape literally.)
"Kill the demon! Justice! Make him suffer!" a mob formed around Naruto in a out of the way alley (NOTE: I will not bash most ninjas a especially not the clan heads except Sasuke's Father who I do not know the name of.) and started to beat him one man came again and unbuckled his pants "you will learn your place" as he… you know I'm too sicken to explain. The anbu who was watching smiled with glee teach that demon pain and misery behind him another appeared and saw what was happening she quickly called on her comlink "Quick Naruto is being RAPED! I'm calling in the fox angels repeat I need Hana, Anko, and Kurenai NOW!" no sooner were the said Kunoichi there and the amount of K.I. (Killer intent) washing over the area they nodded to each other and then looked over to the ANBU who was watching in glee they unleashed their combined KI on him he started to sweat and turned to see them four and to him it looked like staring at Shinigami's angels (and in a way he was right more on this later) he cleared his throat "Yugao, Anko, Kurenai, Hana What are you doing abandoning your post? I'm afraid I'll have to write you four up unless you can "make it up to me." No sooner then he said that was he simultaneously bitten by snakes, stabbed kunai and sword, and put in a Gay genjutsu with Gai in a Speedo needless to say he screamed.
5 minutes before:
Naruto had just been raped and crawled to a corner after losing his innocence. Most of the mob except one pink haired banshee were disgusted and pulled the man off of the poor kid even he didn't deserve that but it was to late they saw it in his eyes that devoid of life and innocence the ANBU up top finished beating on the man and found out they were too late cried in horror simultaneously "Naruto-kun!" Anko and Hana reached him and hugged his unresponsive body Anko yelled "Naruto-kun please you can't leave us… Naruto are you there?" she looked into his eyes those blue eyes that used to vibrate with life was now dull Anko just gave him to Hana who continued to try to get a response. Anko turned to see the man that had raped Naruto be put through the most intense beating not only by Kurenai and Yugao but also with most of the mob that were only there to throw insults at him were disgusted with the rapist then left after a sever warning those that had harmed Naruto were either slapped or kneed in the balls. Suddenly the pink haired bit… I mean banshee appeared with a new mob devoted to killing the demon child.
Meanwhile in Naruto's mind:
Naruto was staring in Kyuubi who turned out to be a girl she had orange hair that shined so much you'd think her hair was on fire, her body was like a goddess with massive breast (think Tsunade), and all the right curves.
And she was sorry crying about what was done to him. she saw his mind crack and shatter. She grabbed Naruto and pulled him into her embrace. Naruto just said it was okay she wasn't the one raping him after a while she burned the experience from his mind and continued to cry. As she calmed down and started to tell him her history and what she would give me.
(Flash back)
(Kyuubi's POV)
Mortars rained down as I and a company (around 50 men) of B.D.I. (Bijuu defense initiative) rifle men charged alongside a mammoth tank (imagine an m1 Abrams tank but with two 150mm cannons) division (around 30) towards the newly restored temple of Scrin. Suddenly the field in front of us shimmered I knew what that meant I yelled "shadow squads!" too late the mind controlled nod shadows opened fire cutting down most of us I dove to the ground blasting my rifle taking out three when I hear a beep on the tank next to me I turned to see C4 on it my eyes widened and I muttered "son of a…" BOOM! The blast destroyed the tank and sent me tumbling across the field my eyesight blurry I took cover when I noticed I dropped my rifle. Wiping my eyes clear a nod shadow attacked me we engaged in hand-to-hand ducking under a clothesline I rapped my arm around his neck and jumped up lifting him with me and bringing him down also breaking his neck (R.K.O. by Randy Orton) as I got up I saw a sight I'll never forget hundreds of M.K.(Mark of Kane (cybernetic humans) and B.D.I. soldiers and hundreds of human tanks fighting desperately against the damned aliens and we were losing… suddenly a mini sand storm appeared next to me and out came my sister "Shukaku…" she nodded she and me were dressed in B.D.I. advance tech armor (imagine G.D.I. zone trooper woman armor its like the trooper armor but instead of bulky it fit snuggly like a body suit) "Kyuubi they are breaking through the western flank Nibi is asking permission to fire the specters (I'm not going to describe these anymore to troublesome ;)" I growled "permission granted phone Hachibi (eight tails) and call in the humans Ion Cannon this battle is lost relocate to America and…" "Kyuubi America is no more it got destroyed when the Scrin used too many black holes it sunk Juubi is no more…" I closed my eyes and a lone tear fell on my cheek "sister" "what of Neko?" "She managed to get out." "That's good… what is the Situation Report (will now be called SITREP)?"
Shukaku's face turned grave "not good our squad is the last of the Bijuu unit stationed here in Japan the Scrin are employing their finisher they're going to launch a beam of liquid T. (for Tiberium) it'll either kill us or mutate us." I looked down we both knew we had just lost "where are the rest of our sisters?" "They're back at the base… Kyuubi they want to use operation BNE on you." I took a deep breath knowing what they meant that operation was to infuse nanites used in the M.C.B. constructer to make base that make artificial robots for use in combat the disadvantage is that you need a lot of Tiberium for it they think that if they do it to you at least we would have a chance" I nodded "lets get this shit started."
End flash back
"So this world was destroyed and what happened next?" he asked in monotone. Kyuubi's fox ears fell flat Naruto had to admit one thing she was beautiful. "Me and my sisters were caught in the blast after my operation which was a success but the Scrin didn't count on the amount of liquid T on the earths surface it mutated us into giant animals with an infinite Tiberium energy and it gave the rest of you humans chakra which is blue Tiberium twice more dense thus yields more energy but recharges more slowly is what I'm giving you access to the B.D.I. robot troops and a light vehicle called A.P.C. (anti personal carrier) also in order to summon infantry which are the robots quickly you need to summon a small tunnel extension in order to summon the vehicle you need a vehicle depot building. Thanks to my nanites it'll take at least 2-3 seconds to construct the buildings and for it to roll out the vehicles and infantry. Now take your revenge." Naruto was stunned at the power he had he nodded and just as he was about to leave Kyuubi called out "wait Naruto!" "Yes" "your fox angels are in trouble save them because if anything happens to them I don't think your heart can't take it…" Naruto's eyes widened and nodded and he disappeared.
Naruto opened his eyes to see something that made him go into a blind rage, the mob the pink banshee came with captured his himes (angels) and were about to RAPE THEM.
Alay Haruno smiled at the sight before her four of the fox loving whores were captured and were about to be reeducated on who ruled Konoha. Until "ROAR!" a blast of red chakra came from behind the mob stopped and turned in horror "you pitiful ningens I will make you suffer" Naruto channeled his chakra to his face and time froze a menu appeared it said infantry, vehicles, aircraft, and ships he chose infantry it gave him a list that explained which infantry did what right now they had hostages and Naruto wanted to keep them safe so he chose...
Naruto slammed his hands down and called "B.D.I. Tunnel expansion" Naruto felt some of his nanites leave his body and begin construction in less than two seconds his tunnel was complete and Naruto queued up three sniper squads. The mob was so stunned and the construction was so fast they just stood there watching the spectacle the tunnel opened and they readied themselves "bring it demon when were done with you we'll enjoy your whores!" that was THE MOST STUPIDEST THING HE COULD HAVE SAID. Suddenly six men came out and said "snipers where did you need me" Naruto yelled "kill the mob spare the Kunoichi that are bound they raised their rifles one of the more braver villagers stepped up and said "die demons!" before he could even get a step a loud BANG! Rang out and the man's head exploded. the mob ran in fear "hold ground!" Naruto commanded and they stood their ground as they fired into the fleeing mob barely anyone survived sadly Alay Haruno managed to get away as well. That is when the hokage arrived and ANBU surrounded his soldiers "drop your weapons" the anbu commanded Naruto spoke up "that won't work they follow only my commands snipers hold fire and report back into the base" (Kyuubi downloaded the knowledge into his mind on how to command them properly) The snipers stood down and went back into the tunnel. The hokage questioned me and Naruto told him everything "so let me get this straight and in a nutshell Kyuubi gave you the power to summon whole armies of advance technology?" Naruto nodded. He and everyone one around me immediately fainted. Naruto just shook his head and called a rifle squad picked up his himes and headed home.
Chapter 2: establishing a base
As Naruto laid the girls on his bed Naruto took a look at his apartment and was disgusted around him were signs written in his blood, shit, or something else. Naruto went to the construction menu (will now be called C.M.) and called "B.D.I. tunnel expansion!" Naruto put his hands on the ground (think of Ed in F.M.A.) and his nanites began constructing the tunnel as soon as it was done Naruto queued another rifle squad. "Rifle squad you need something?" Naruto nodded and went into tactical command mode (which is now TCM) which meant Naruto linked up with a satellite that was in orbit that gave him an over eye view of his surroundings but only to where his soldiers could view. Naruto ordered his men to go hunt down the land lord and "persuade" him give them the deed, as that was happening Naruto queued an engineer "engineer here what you need?" Naruto ordered him to clean his apartment. He set his case down and opened it there were needles attached to long tube he injected them in to the ground and started typing. Suddenly what looked like liquid but was actually a flood of nanites emerged from the ground and started cleaning up erasing the writings and putting up sheet metal and setting up what looked like a computer console.
Suddenly Kyuubi contacted Naruto saying "alert! Unidentified humans are trying to detain our forces in front of the apartment" Naruto nodded he queued a sniper squad and ordered them to cover him from the window. Naruto disengaged from TCM channeled Kyuubi's chakra (because of the nanites I didn't lose control) and combined it with the nanites to make two one handed SMG's and holstered them. Naruto went outside as the snipers set up. He saw the hokage and his anbu ready to fight my two rifle squads He said "rifle squads stand down!" they immediately stood down. Naruto turned to the hokage "I suspect this is about the incident Jiji?" he nodded and said "so what are you going to do now?" Naruto thought about it and said "I guess I'll become a shinobi but instead of being a normal one I'll go for the heavy assault positions like bandit camps and if we're at war my men will lead the forefront of the assault as for my safety my technology allows me to be able to construct watch towers which can detect and destroy any intruders and make things such as shredder turrets to literally shred apart the mobs trying to attack me." The hokage grew pale at the mere thought of such powerful technology. Seeing Jiji like that Naruto elevated his fears "don't worry about the enemy capturing my tech Jiji the nanites inside them will destroy the remains before anyone can capture it." Sarutobi sighed in relief he then asked "Naruto what is your personal skill level." "With the Kyuubi changing my body to god-like levels, giving me her knowledge, and the infinite chakra my nanites provide me beyond kage level" (because let's face it Kyuubi has to be more bad ass than in the Conan Kyuubi and if you disagree then get out cause this is fan-MY-fiction amen) Sarutobi for his part just got a major headache he groaned "Naruto your trying to drive me into a early grave aren't you." Naruto smiled foxily "no that's the council. Oh speaking of which lets just call this my bloodline okay?" he nodded "that'll make things a little easier." Naruto turned and glared at the hokage "by the way I just realized were you ever going to tell me that my father was the Yondaime?" Sarutobi cursed "I was instructed to tell you about that when you were at least Jonin but now I guess you know…" "What of my mother?" Sarutobi sweated cursing even more.
(You would just hate me if I stopped it here)
Naruto narrowed his eyes "so she thinks I'm a demon!" the hokage shook his head "no! Naruto but she is on a long term mission to Iwa she's coming back any time- whatever he was going to say was interrupted when the door slammed open and in came a red blur "SARUTOBI! You said he'd be well cared for! Where is my sochi?" Naruto finally saw a woman with beautiful red hair and could pass off as the sister of Kyuubi, and by the sound of her voice she went into something that not even Orochimaru, Madara, or Itachi would fight against together, the one thing that all men fear even worse then the pervert beating the C.I.D. (child in danger mode) "I'll ask one more time." She sheathed (I think that means pull out) a crimson katana "WHERE IS MY SON NARUTO!" Naruto was shocked he whispered "kaa-san?" apparently she heard and turned to him her eyes widened she let go of Sarutobi and slowly approached him "N-Naruto?" his eyes grew teary as he nodded we just stood there for a second then we appeared in each others arms. Mother and son were finally reunited but Naruto had to blush feeling her well developed assets he muttered "dad was a lucky bastard." Apparently kaa-san heard and as we parted she said "why sochi loving your mother like that." She said pretending to be surprised. He blushed "well kaa-san your so beautiful and well." Naruto looked away embarrassed beyond possibility. Naruto felt a hand on his cheek and turn him to his kaa-san and then to his immense surprise he felt her kiss him on his lips for what seemed like an eternity.
"Sochi I fell out of love with your father after what he did to you. That man is worse then trash!" the old hokage jumped up "now hold on he did what he had to, to save the village!" Kushina shot him a look "yeah damn my child! If he had used the banishment seal on Kyuubi, since she was newly released! She was in her… ah well… um in her time of the month…" Naruto sweat-dropped "you serious?" she just blushed and nodded. Then Naruto frowned "wait so there was a way to prevent her from going crazy?" she looked down and nodded "yes but Minato wanted her to be sealed so she couldn't get captured by Iwa or Kumo…" Naruto was incense "that is it if I ever see Minato if he is even alive or comes back I'll make sure to send him packing! Now though what's with all these strange powers?" Naruto explained everything leaving out the rape." And she still wanted to destroy the hokage and village so he knocked her out and nodded to the hokage who nodded we both thought the same thought "this conversation is not over."