This is my first attempt at a Beauty and the Beast fanfic. Please review.
Note: I do not own the story of Beauty and the Beast, but the characters are all mine.
Once upon a time, in a land now forgotten, there reign a selfless King and his beautiful Queen. Their lives were filled with great riches and wondrous feasts. One would think that they would be pleased with their life, but something was missing. There was a hole in their hearts that dances and gold would not fill. Then, one day, the Queen's belly swelled and they learned that she was with child. The whole kingdom erupted in joyous shouts and there was celebrating throughout the land.
As each month passed the Queen grew more and more, until the day had come. The King paced back and forth as he waited for his child to come into the world. And, just as he was giving up hope, he heard the sharp cry of his child, his daughter. Filled with excitement, the King threw a grand masquerade, and everyone in the kingdom was invited. As the guests poured in the King and Queen noticed that Astin, the great enchanter, was not present. They began to worry for him, for he was to give the child her name. But as the festivities drew on, the came to forget about anything but their precious girl.
Little did they know, that Astin was boarded up in his chambers, gazing into his sphère avenir. He was not pleased with what he saw.
Later that evening, as the party was slowing down, Astin finally made his appearance. Overjoyed that he had arrived, the King rose to greet him. The enchanter shook his head as the King stood, and Astin approached the child, laying in the bassinet. "Woe to you child, for I have seen what is to come." Astin placed his hands on the child's head an began to chant.
"Que les dieux pardonner
Qu'est-ce que je dois faire
Dans les temps à venir
Que les dieux pardonner"
"Astin," the King shouted, "what is the meaning of this?"
"In time you will understand, old friend." He turned toward the waiting crowd of people. "I name this child Guiliaine, for she is to be a prisoner within in herself. May all blessings rain down upon her." He then faced the terrified King and Queen. "And may the gods have mercy on her soul."
Again, please review