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Synopsis: "Sometimes I think I'm dreaming. You changed my life!"
Fallen Angel
Prologue
Above our heads, well there on top, playing among the clouds, had a group of angels. They smiled, jumping from cloud to cloud like a trampoline. Among these magnificent creatures, one stood out, swirling lonely on a white cloud like your eyes. The other angels stopped to observe the grace of her gestures, similar to the delicate movements of ballet.
Dancing elegantly, yet oblivious the audience consisted of angels that had formed in a next cloud. Feeling the admired eyes of the angels in it, ceased the dance, embarrassed. The angels gone, disappointed with the end of the show, back to the Kingdom of Heaven, leaving her alone, lying in the cloud in which danced and falling asleep.
When saw the angel dancer slept, flying into the cloud approaching discreetly. Constantly asked as an angel, a being pure light and innocence, could have a negative feeling, especially one destructive as the envy. However no use to cry or to sorry. Since that allowed know envy, ended up being swallowed by it.
What would now put an end to the life of the sleeping angel and as punishment for the act, your soul would be corrupted for all eternity. And once corrupted, your soul becomes impure, perfect to be cultivated by the Lord of the Underworld, would try bring it to your side from now. Even putting your soul to lose, be prepared to pay any price to get rid of the angel that both hated.
Crouched quietly beside her, smiling contemptuously by finally putting an end to her life. Pulling the wings of the angel with a single movement, watched with pleasure the scenes would be forthcoming.
The angel woke up, eyes wide with pain, staring into the face of being who had eyes as white as their, like mirrors that reflected a delight in seeing the suffering of the angel without wings. Fell down from the cloud, like all others who tried in vain to reach. The clouds could no longer support the weight of the angel. Closing her eyes, a single tear trickled down for face while felt her body being thrown violently into the deepest abyss.
Hitting your back strongly against something solid and cold and rolled to the side and then fell on something rough.
— Hey, you're okay?
To be continued...
Hello everyone!
That was my first attempt at translation, so it may be full errors.
I have a question and if someone can enlighten I thank: in Portuguese, use many commas, but in some fanfics I read in English, I see the use of commas reduced. In this chapters there is much use of comma, as in the original version, but I want to know if, in English, it is necessary the use of many commas and when they're needed.
Well, now I say farewell. Until the next chapter and leave reviews!
Kisses, Pixie Cheryl.