Hello, all.
This is my very first story to ever even consider publishing. I know this is rather short, but it's just a mini preview of the story to come. So please, helpful criticism, and I would love reviews.
The Orchid's Keeper will be very loosely based off of the Greek myth of Hades and Persephone. Warning, their WILL most likely be some slight Out Of Characterness. I'm sorry, that's just the way it is. I will do my very best to keep them in some semblance of their original characters.
Main Pairing: Sasuke/Hinata
Side Pairings: Undetermined
Rating: M, just in case I decide to get a little heavy. ;)
Summary: A dark young man spots a beautiful girl in a field alone, and decides that she will be his. However, he soon finds that force may not have been the way to go about things...
"It's b-beautiful! What is it?" Hinata asked, reaching to touch the smooth, blushing globe he held in his pale finger tips.
"It's called a pomegranate. It's a fruit, very sweet, very beautiful." His spoke flatly, his words describing the ruby orb, though his thoughts lingered on his enchanting captive. Sasuke sat the pomegranate on the counter top, and with the nearest knife, cleaved the fruit cleanly in half. He peeled the waxy, white skin off one half, and held it out to her.
"Oh!" she gasped. "It's even p-prettier on the inside! Like little j-jewels." She reached out to touch the glittering seeds. The look on her face was…
Breath taking. Awe inspiring. Beauty in it its most simple, yet most complex form. His eyes slid downward along the slender, creamy expanse of throat, and with some strained self control, he brought them back up to her perfectly formed lips, velvety and rosebud pink. Finally, his eyes came to rest upon hers, and a pleasant, crimson blush swept over her porcelain cheeks. She looked away quickly, afraid to hold his gaze too long.
"Would you like to taste it?" He asked.
His voice was low, sultry, and seductive. Something foreign slid through her being, and came to rest thickly in her belly. She felt…heavy. She dared to glance up at him quickly, and noticed how brightly his deep, dark eyes were shining. She retracted her hand, as if burned, and the strange feeling in her stomach dissipated rapidly, replaced by a snake of fear. When she spoke, her voice was strangled, and she stuttered badly.
"N-no t-thank you, Sasuke-sama. I-I-I, am n-n-not very h-hungry. P-please excuse m-me." She bowed quickly, and scurried from the room like a frightened mouse.
Sasuke's anger roared to life. He would have shouted in frustration, but did not want her to hear him. He flung the offending fruit across the room, where it hit the wall with a wet thunk, red juice splattering across the walls like thin blood.
She had deflected him for the last time, that was most assured.
So, there's that. Again, this isn't a chapter, just a preview. Please review!
Thanks!
Avid.