Hey, it's SCE! I just discovered this fanfiction "Supper Smash Bros Mishonh From God", and I was just like "WTF?" when I read the first few lines.

I just thought I'd put my own commentary on it, like some other authors have since I just wanted to join in on the fun. Enjoy.

Hi my name is Sara (not Palin unfortanetly) and im a 13 yearold girl who loves America and God and the Constantution (…I think I know where this is going already.) so i librul soshalist who likes barrack obama than LEAVE NAO (So you're calling yourself a *liberal* and telling yourself to leave?) and go back too getting wefare for noting and trying to turn every1 into gay athists also I lik video games like supper smash bras (Supper Smashing Tittiecups. Lol.) and otters even thou im a gril (my mom sad id turn a les if I play video game but I put pics of jaykob from twilit and juston beber in my room so idont). (….Dude. Justin Bieber will just make the situation worse.)

I was in my seance class one dat when my librul (Did you mean liberal? Is that a grammar error or text language?) teacher mr jonson was talkin about evilusion. ('Evil'usion. The topic that makes you evil. I might take that class one day.)

"an tat is why humins came form monkees and their is no god" he said. (Just a few paragraphs in and I'm already whacking my head off this desk because of the pointless grammar errors.)

I razed my han.d (Guys, we have to lift that full stop and throw it over the d and onto the end of the sentence to make it correct. This is going to be hard.)

"yes Sara" he said.

"if humin came from monkees why r their still monks" (Did you mean 'monkeys' there? Because I'm not quite sure if this has anything to do with monks.)

my teacher had no anser for that so he give me a ditention and an f on my test. (What kind of science teacher do you have? That's not a good reason to penalize a student.)

"hahaha!" he sad "you Christens wil be defeet on day! (A science teacher wouldn't waffle on about things like that.) athests alreedy rule dis cuntry becuz of obama car and son all Christens will goto deaf panells!" (Obama's Christian, you know.)

just then the door toteh science room opened and God walked in. (If that happened it would be front page on the newspaper.) he was waring a rob and had a bread like he allways does. (I think you meant beard. Unless he carries bread in case he gets peckish.)

"mr jonson ur gong too HELL!" (Apparently gongs play on the elevator to hell.)

"no cuz u arnt reel" mr jonson said. (You wouldn't say that unless you haven't fainted from holy shit-ness.)

"lol ur a moran" (Not quite sure if God would speak so informally.) God said and he stroked mr jonson with lighting and mr jonson ded. (Still banging my head off my desk.)

"yay!" said all the Christens in the class.

"boo!" said the Heatrans so God stroked all them to. (God doesn't just kill innocent people like that. THINK OF THE PEOPLE!)

"ok now I nead too talk too Sara (insert speech mark here) God said. "so everbuddy else leave." (Everbuddy? REALLY?!)

"ok" my classmates left the room. (And none of them are in shock of seeing God right up in front of them?)

"Sara Osborne ive bean watching u for sum time," he sad, (I'm beginning to sense a Mary-Sue.) "this world isnt the only on I mad."

"for real" I ask.

"yea do u no about video games." (Who doesn't?)

"yea I play them with my bro and Lauren" (my bro is my brother (I kinda figured.) and Lauren is my BFF forever and shes a PCC (Pretty Consertative Christen) like me to) (Nobody cares about your little nicknames.)

"well they are real because when u play the nother unevirse I made" (So… you made the Smash Bros. Universe, but you also made worlds like Hyrule? Wow. Unrealistic.)

"cool God" I hi fived God. (That's quite a distance you'd have to jump to high-five God. Also, you may just bump into his hand and fall down injured.)

"ok but theres treble. Satan found out about this and now hes in Nentendo World. Only u (Apparently, only a 13-year-old girl with no fighting experience can stop Satan. Yep, this is a Mary-Sue we're seeing here.) can stop him b4 he dose evil stuff their."

"oh no." ("Oh no" is right. Especially when an annoying 13-year-old girl like her is about to go to Smash Mansion.)

"right this is the hardest thing u ever done even harder than ur math test last month. God thing i'm God and I can give u cool powers and stuff." (Oh yes, God's just giving a random girl powers and sending her on a very dangerous task. Mary-Sue.)

So God gave me some power and I fell to sleep. When I woke up I was outside of the Smosh Manshon! (Ian and Anthony have a mansion? HOW DID I NOT KNOW THIS?!)

And that's it. A trollfic all about God and liberals and how gay atheists are "the worst things ever" (no offense). But never mind that, the spelling errors were bad enough for me.

(may or may not do commentary on chapter 2~)