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I get a date to the dance

The bell rang a shrill long sound. Zatanna Zatara sighed tiredly, school had been long and tedious and this was not helped by the fact that she had stayed up late last night. The hallways pulsed with noise and energy from students basking in the joy of it being Friday.

"Well, well, well isn't it Zaloser Zadorka?" a snide cold haughty voice said loudly. Zatanna nearly screamed, it was the end of school and she had to deal with these ponytail swinging Gucci and Prada perfume infested Barbies.

"Hello Rachel, how nice of you to appear when you're not wanted" Zatanna said her voice dripping with sarcasm. Rachel and the Rachettes or the dream team as Zatanna liked to called them was made up of: Rachel sanders, a tall 14 yrs. old Latino beauty, Josephine "Jo-Jo" cumberbatch, an athletic black girl, Tiffany "tiff" dots , a Rachel copycat straight down to the hair, Suzie "suze" Port- Carmichael and Arimina :"Mimi" griffin , a tiny, little , doll- like girl who was as sweet as the Grinch.

"At least important people want us around Dorkie" said Mimi sweetly.

"At least I'm not 5ft straight"

"At least boys like us enough to actually want to; I don't know, be around us, kiss us and pleasure us with their every credit card." This had come from Rachel who was smiling. " Nice to see you've got a date to the dance this Saturday Zalolo, oh wait you don't" Blood rushed to Zatanna's head at their annoying laughing voices and smirking faces. Something about those girls made her want to do reckless things. She couldn't use her magic so she tried a bluff instead.

"I do have a date, he's my boyfriend btw and we're going to the dance on Saturday"

"Really? We'll be looking forward to seeing him, what's he like"

"He's smart, really tech smart too and he's sweet and funny and witty"

"What's his name?"

"It's- "Zatanna's watch began to beep. The alarm was set to 3:10. She was supposed to be at the bus stop! "None of your business'' she said grabbing things hurriedly out of her locker. "Bye girls" she said in a fake singsong voice running for the bus.

Behind her, the fake smiles and fake friendly attitude vanished. Where five smiling girls stood just minutes ago now stood 5 girls ready for revenge. After all after what Zatanna had done to them on the first day deserved vengeance, that and the fact she dared to oppose their reign.

"Come girls, the little princess's daddy is really overprotective of her right? Well let's make sure day dearest know what his little princess is up to"