okay, this is my first story I'm publishing. I hope you guys like it. I would love any reviews!
Chapter One
"Welcome to IceClan, little one."
The voice is soothing and deep. I squirm around a little before lifting my head and forcing my eyes open.
I'm in a den made of brambles, the thorns all stripped away. A large tom stands before me.
"Dawnfrost, look."
Dawnfrost looks at me with loving eyes. "Your eyes are open!"
The tom leans forward, his black-and-white-spotted pelt shining. "Hello, Swiftkit. I am Shadowtail, your father."
I slide of my mother's pelt and land on his foot. I look up from on my back.
"Do I look like you?"
He purrs and nudges me onto my feet.
"Yes, Swiftkit. Very much. But you have your mother's eyes. A beautiful golden color."
I turn to peer into Dawnfrost's eyes. She turns her head and Shadowtail licks her ears.
"I'll be back tonight."
He leaves and I jump on the ground, trying to follow. A flash of orange knocks me over and pins me to the ground.
"Hey! Get off!"
The other kit steps off. "I'm Foxkit," she announces. "I'm a whole moon old."
"Me too. I just opened my eyes."
"I opened mine yesterday!" She boasts.
"Why'd you tackle me?"
"I was bored. It was easy, too!"
I wave my tail and crouch, jumping on her and bowling her over. "I'll show you easy!"
"Foxkit! Swiftkit! Why don't you go outside to play?"
Dawnfrost looks at the white cat. "Are you sure they're ready, Lightfoot?"
"Dawnfrost, I'm a medicine cat. You'd think that after the time I've been training, cats would trust my instincts." Lightfoot looks at us. "Run along now, you two."
We dash out of the den and I whack Foxkit's tail. "Come catch me!" I crow.
I hide between two dens and wait. Then i feel a breath on my ear. I turn my head and shriek. A giant creature follows me into the clearing. Warriors jump onto it, but it it grabs me and shakes me hard. I fly from it's mouth and black is all I see.
Okay. I didn't think it was that bad. You guys like it? Criticism is absolutely welcome. I'm gonna make a bet with you guys. Ten reviews I post the next chapter. And, in the future, I'm hoping for a lot longer chapters.
