This is my try at a Gone Fan-fic I want you to tell me what I can work on and what I can make more of. I wish that you tell me if it's something that might be a good idea. This is my first fan-fic so this is the one that tells me what I should except from readers.
If you haven't read Hunger then go read it now and I you haven't read Lies don't worry I am only going to say one thing from the story.
I don't own Gone but Michael Grant does
I actually got the idea from someone else and I hope they read this one because of them this story is born
May 9th Wednesday
It has been many months since the FAYZ went up and since then it has been absolute chaos inside the domes. I am kinda of happy that I died in the first week but I've been slowly going into depression since my James has been there for the entire time. It has was a month ago that his birthday passed and I waited for him at the walls FAYZ. I didn't leave for five days strait and then nothing. It was passed his possible birthday since the doctors didn't know when it was. I knew it in my heart that he would stay there till he died and I knew I was never going to see him again. He was always like that since I met him at the Orphanage. He didn't leave a place until he wanted he was always a devoted like that. We once were at a park and it was already passed are bedtime and we were told to go back inside the house. He wouldn't leave even after his dinner and T.V time was taken away from him but he wouldn't go. At first I thought he was being a brat but it wasn't until he finally left when I realized what he was doing. Outside he had made a little house for these baby kittens we had seen earlier. It turns out that they were outside with the dead mother who had starved to death.
Just then my train of thought was ruined when my mother called in my room. "You better be ready because we don't need some dirty pig in are picture. Your brother is coming out of the FAYZ tomorrow so you better get down here or no good dinner for you when he comes to us." I jumped away from my computer and ran down stairs with my laptop. The secret to my laptop is that it could work anywhere a satellite was located.
I still couldn't believe she was my mother by blood. She hated me and she treated me like dirt all because I was the mistake she had that ruined her 'true love' from becoming a famous baseball player. The only reason she toke me back was the fact that I was a genius. My IQ is 150 and everyone that I know thought I should be in the best job when I graduated. I wanted a way to get away from these monsters but I knew that at the orphanage there could be worse people.
I knew that they were going to make have to pay for my own room like they did that long month ago. It was going to be a long drive anyway so I got a coffee and got into my broken down car. I knew I could buy better but if I did they would take it away a give it to the star son. It was going to be a weird day tomorrow and I could just tell.
At first this was a miracle a blessing some said but that ended as fast as it came. The dome appeared during a normal school day that happened such a long time ago on such a normal day. We were all strange and we knew something weird was happening of course we got even weirder even faster when the dome came up. There were so many theories that people had came up with since the powers developed. The three main theories that are most followed were that, A. We adapted them because of the problems we were in, B. God the all mighty was deciding who was holy enough to be his followers, C. The 'demon' in the underground lake gave it to them and was deciding who gets to live. I didn't really care about that though I am was just making sure that the children live through this. I already lost her and I am not about to let that happen again.
The poof happens when you reach 15 years of age and when it happens you end up talking to your motherly figure. To me it was her telling me to come across begging me not to leave her all alone. But I told her no and walked away but before I get out of the misty area she changed into a monster and said I will have your power one day. Then it was over and I was back in the town people around me excepting me to disappear but it didn't happen and they all asked me questions on what it was like. I told them all but still some left but other stayed thinking outside would be are death.
It still will be death here but I will stay until I know that the children are safe even if that means I must grow old and die here alone or with company. I don't care if I lose something from myself to do so. But as long as I keep up this phony dome no one will find the children. I die a little every day but it will be this way until I find us a new home. That is if we get there before the alchemist gets us.
Hope you like it please review I need to know how to make a better piece of literature. Tell me how to make a better Fan-fic if you want and I know I didn't put much Gone into it but I will add more about that next one. I'm making a new one if you like it or not though so tough luck if you hate it.
