Rikki: Hiya, herm, I'm not exactly sure what I'm doing write now…I just kinda felt like writing all of a sudden. 3
Just so you people know I'm totally new to as I am to writing…fiction. :cough: So, it would be appreciated that you helped me while I'm righting this stuff…:feels like an idiot: Anyway, from what I've seen from other fics I have an idea of what to do, but…not really. XP
Anyway, this is one of those daydreams I always get about Naruto, and I dunno, after getting into the story I really felt like writing it, you know I had it all in my mind "Tsunade glanced at Naruto curiously and..." Hahah, I found myself talking like that, kinda scared me, so you know, I felt like writing it down! . Sound freaky?
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Update: Feb 21, 2004: Hellosies! ; I was just rereading this story and well, I've decided to keep it going! 'I guess' So a quick edit to the prologue and first chapter…and perhaps a start on the second chapter. I finally know what OC means and OOC :laughs nervously: As do I have an idea to what a Mary sue is…and considering I wrote this based on my daydreams, I suppose I could have a few Mary Sue's in here, BUT I do NOT think they are Mary Sue's frankly. :shrugs: I will have a whole new village in here, with new characters and such. So yeah…The only thing I really need is a plot. A good one, but alas, I'm not very creative, else I woulda thought of one :sobs: Prepare for a REALLY REALLY LONG discussion from me, which you all probably could do without, but I feel that it would benefit you to read it…or maybe it would benefit me :scratches back: eheh
Anyways - This story is going to start from chapter 224, before Naruto and Sasuke fight, as that is when I originally wrote this. I have no clue on what I was trying to write…sadly, I don't really write my ideas down in a graphic organizer of any sort, so I'm just making this up as I go along. I already had the first chapter out, but decided to redo it as I said before. If anyone wants to give me tips for writing fanfics I would gladly accept it.
Now, this isn't going to be a SasuNaru fic, actually, apart from slight KakaIru I don't think there will be any yaoi. There will be a very short SasuNaru scene later on I know I just have to be it in there, but it wont be the main paring. I made up a whole village of my own, and I suppose I had originally planed it for some of the people in my village to, of course, fall in love with Konoha shinobi, but I probably won't do that. This might turn into some huge romance drama things, but I'm not sure I'm good at writing that, and as much as I love some fics here with all the drama, romance, and yaoi my mind would be against it. I always liked making up characters and making myself play along with the cast of Naruto, like I was actually there! It's fun, and I've never written it down before. :laughs nervously: As I stated before, I've never written a fic in-my-entire-15-years-of-existance- so, I of course, don't know much terms some of you use here. 'I bet you anything there is a help guide that I'm to blind to see! Kuso!' anyway, considering I am bringing an entire new shinobi village there will be a lot of my own characters. As for making Naruto, Sasuke OOC, I really don't think I'll do this, but there probably be some things that the character really wouldn't have done. :sweatdrop:
I know a lot of you hate the fact some writer's use Japanese language while writing, I will be doing this a lot, as I think it adds a certain…necessity to the story. I'm sorry that your mind isn't open minded enough to read it if you don't like it. Things like nii-chan and –sensei and –chan-san and such are needed, I mean I can't have people running around yelling "Teacher Kakashi" as I think it would be ridiculous. So pifft to all those who dun like it.
Yeah, I notice I haven't even told what this will be about yet…to tell the truth I'm not sure myself. Sasuke and Naruto fight, some people save them Sasuke is cured and is back to his old self- 'kinda sorta' –ditto to Naruto. Sasuke returns to Konoha without Naruto and yeah, the story goes on from there! …if that made sense ; BTW: This is an uber short chappy. Sorry, I didn't think it would go well in the first chapter…so yeah.
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Things to note:
Character talking – "Kuso!"
Character thinking – 'Kuso!'
If a flashback is coming you'll know as the Flashback will catch your eye
So yeah…:hopes she isn't missing anything:
Disclaimer:
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Prologue
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Clash!
Sounds of the kunai hit each other and fell the floor with a loud Clang!
The fox looked up from his blood red eyes into the man he hated. Hated for hurting his kit as much as he did. He couldn't forgive him, how could he? But the voice from the back of his head differed.
'He still wants Sasuke as his riva—friend…my poor kit, I will not harm him seriously, but he has caused you and the people you care for enough pain. Besides, I think I'm much better suited for knocking some much needed sense into the boy' He smirked, but it soon turned into disgust as he looked into the red eyes that watched him back. His opposite had black marks all over his body and his chakra was unstable. 'What a fool' the fox thought 'that damn seal needs to be removed…'
But how? How would he do that? He knew he was strong, but he was no shinobi, he was a demon, why the hell would he know how to remove seals? He smirked 'if I did this world would be long gone.' The boy charged not caring he was letting out an enormous amount of chakra. His eyes flashed in fury. His fist connected with the fox who flew backwards until a tree stopped him. Continuing his attack, again and again. His punches were successful and they burned into the skin, but the fox didn't do anything…yet. With a flash the fox appeared behind the boy and kicked his back hard. Tumbling the boy's chakra flew around even more uncontrollably the marks spreading around his body.
The boy smirked and laughed. But this laugh is not something the fox or his kit were expecting. It was cold, dark and hateful.
"Meheheheahahaaaaa," the boy continued to laugh until he regained himself, "You know your such a fool. Do you really think you can beat me Naruto? Cut the crap, I've got more power than you ever will, and with it Itachi will die!" He laughed even more.
The fox smirked, "I wonder what Naruto would say, I can hear him now, but you can't, if you heard him I wonder what you would say."
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The fox's smirk widened even more, "Yes, but I Uchiha Sasuke—" the fox said his name like he could easily rip Sasuke's heart out. "—I am different, you have hurt my kit and for that you shall pay!" The fox ran to Sasuke and stabbed his kunai in his stomach, the boy snapped back to reality and coughed up blood, taking a few steps back. The fox realized, and took the weapon out of Sasuke's stomach. Sasuke just stood there, no expression on his face, the marks still dancing around it. Just then the fox was blown away by a force that slammed into him, he couldn't block in time so it was fatal. He looked up at his attacker ready to kick Sasuke's - when he saw it wasn't Sasuke. Instead it was a girl protecting him. She had bright violet hair tied into ponytail while her long bangs rested somewhat over her eyes and fell to her chin. She was determined but also, just a tad fearful. 'She knows' he thought grimly, but more importantly, 'What is she doing here…?'
Thud. Sasuke fell to the ground. The fox looked at the boy and then the girl whose gaze never left his and quickly realized what happened. He covered his mouth but it was to late he felt his eyes blur and soon he too fell to the ground unconsciously swearing, 'If that girl even thinks about hurting my kit or the Uchiha boy I'll rip her apart myself.'
Rikki: O.O;; Uh, yeah that fighting scene as messed up…I don't think I'm very good at those ; Tips would be appreciated. But yeah, the girl is one of my made up characters….I dunno how I made the kyuubi look…heh motherly or fatherly I wonder? It was sorta confusing, but the Kyuubi took over Naruto's body, and was basically controlling it n' stuff. So it was Kyuubi in Naruto's body that was fighting Sasuke.
Anyway, I've already got the first chapter ready in my head. Heck I think if got the whole story in my head…except maybe the plot. No clue what it is really…or maybe I do and I'm to stupid to realize it…:shrugs: The first chapter will be all about Sasuke, lots of flashbacks about my version of his past. And you'll learn more about the girl. Heh, I'm not really a good writer, I don't think so anyway. ;
Anyway comments/suggestions would be appreciated, but this was only the prologue and the next chapter will only be about Sasuke's past. So it wont really get to the main story line…but I think it'll be a good fic non-the-less.
