I decided I am redoing Revenge story. I may delete the original version I haven't decided yet. All I know is I want to redo it.
I am starting it off with how Tim got hurt instead of that prologue. I already know it was given a fan base. Now I just want to redo it, make it better. I think as an author you should always be proud of any story you make. If your not, something is wrong. I am not used to a story getting that much attention so I think I ended up rushing it. I will not do that this time.
"Doesn't look like anyone's used that home for years…why would Gibbs have us check it out?" Mossad officer Ziva David remarked from the driver's seat.
Her partner, special agent Tony DiNozzo shrugged. "No clue my crazy little Ninja, all I know is when LJ Gibbs barks a command, you obey him" he said.
Ziva nodded. "So I noticed…shall we see if Mr. Gemcity is still breathing to help?" she asked.
Tony smirked. "After you my crazy ninja" he said. She got out and Tony followed.
"Sup probie…ready to help us check out the abandoned house?" Tony asked as he pulled open the van doors.
Tim sat up and scowled at him. "It's been two days, am I ever going to get a break?" he asked.
"What do you think Lisa? Are we being to mean to little McGregor McGee?" he asked.
Ziva smirked. "I think McGregor should be counting his blessings, since the only thing we've done is make him ride in the back, Tommy" she answered.
"Guess that's your answer Timmy…now come on, grab the gear and meet us inside" Tony instructed.
Tim scowled but it was ignored. He gathered up all the stuff and trudged after his partners.
The trio covered the entire home top to bottom. It was abandoned as Ziva proclaimed and hadn't been used in years.
The three first made sure it was empty then separated to check it out thoroughly
Tim was finishing up the kitchen when Ziva pulled Tony to the front door.
"All that's left is the cellar Tony but this house is clearly abandoned" she said.
"Are you saying we should be evil and leave our partner to check out the cellar alone Ziva David?" Tony asked.
Ziva smirked in response. "Why not? Timothy believes he can write a book and use us as characters…he deserves to inspect the dirty cellar alone.." she said defiantly.
"I like the way you think…come on before Timmy notices" Tony said. He grabbed her hand and led her to the truck.
Tim heard the engine start and groaned as he watched them leave/
"Great…I get to check out the cellar alone" he muttered.
Tim grabbed the stuff and made his way to the cellar. He opened the door and climbed down.
What he expected was squirrels, spiders, even rats. He didn't expect five men playing cars around an old poker table.
They all turned to him and Tim grabbed for his badge. Which of course was next to his gun.
His hand brushed the gun and the men thought he was planning an attack.
Which of course, none of them took well. The five jumped up and the one closest to Tim slammed a fist into his stomach.
Another took Tim's gun and pocketed it before adding his own fist. The fight lasted about five minutes. It didn't take long to knock Tim out with five huge men taking turns hurting him brutally.
The five then ran off with McGee's gun and a few of his equipment,.
Tim sagged to the floor unconscious. Tony and Ziva waited another five minutes before deciding they should check on Tim.
"Come on, we better see how probie is doing alone…bet he is scared of the insects" Tony said.
He drove back up a few feet and led Ziva back to McGee. When they got inside he gasped.
"Oh my god!" He yelled and ran to Tim. He pulled him up and tested for a pulse.
"Shit…he's not breathing…Ziva get an ambulance" Tony yelled.
He went into CPR mode and thankfully Tim stirred after a minute.
"Tim? Can you hear me buddy?"
Tim groaned and coughed up blood in response. Tony wiped it away.
"Your okay buddy, just hang on kid" Tony pleaded.
Tim only groaned in response. He was too weak too speak but he didn't even have to. His eyes spoke volumes of the betrayal and hurt he felt.
Tony felt sick as he stroked Tim's hair. "I am so sorry Tim…just hang in kid, your safe now"
Tim nodded but Tony could tell he didn't believe him. "I…be…safer…if you…sta….stay…ed" he slurred before passing out again.
"What the hell did we do Ziva?" Tony cried as he hugged Tim sobbing.
"Please don't die Tim…stay alive…I am so sorry kid…don't die on me" he cried.
