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The crowds cheered joyfully and wildly at the performance of their virtual diva, Hatsune Miku. Waving their glow-sticks to the beat as she was finishing the last few lines, the masses filled the area with their zest. The final sounds of the drum concluded the exciting concert followed by the shouting of countless VOCALOID fans. The 16- year-old exited as the lights faded and went backstage. "What did you guys think?!" the teal-haired teen asked with much happiness in her. "You looked great out there!" The Kagamine twins said in unison.
How funny, the ones who labeled Miku as "World's Virtual Chipmunk" are congratulating her. The young elementary student VOCALOID thought. Many of the VOCALOIDs were extremely jealous of Miku, especially the Kagamines and older VOCALOIDs, at her almost unexplainable popularity. She sometimes used the expression "yellow crayons turned green" to describe Rin and Len, for they hated being in Miku's shadow. At least the two of you get concerts. Miki, Hiyama-sensei, and so many others will probably never know what it's like to be in stage. She was drawing a picture of herself with crayons; the picture showed what appeared to be flashing lights, the same one used in Miku's performance: a work of art that reflected the dreams of the young VOCALOID. "Yuki-Chan, Yuki-Chan!" someone had called out. Kaai Yuki looked up to see SF-A2 Miki at the exit; the other VOCALOIDs nowhere in sight. She didn't have to look up to know who called her, for Miki had the robotic twinge similar to an UTAU in her voice, making it easy to distinguish in the grade school kid's ears.
"I'm coming!" Yuki shouted back to her friend. Putting her crayons back in the box and the picture in her book-bag, she ran off to catch up with her fellow AHS-Loid. Hiyama Kiyoteru was the designated driver for the three, plus Piko, to the VOCALOID house. As they drove, Miki kept trying to approach Yuki, but failed to receive attention every time. Noticing the Social neglect his crush was experiencing, Piko attempted talking to her. "So what'd you think of Miku's performance?" He asked, making Miki practically explode into a rant. Virtually no person in the vehicle liked Miku, yet Piko still asked that question. What Kiyoteru thought of her was questionable, but he was still likely to understand how the others felt. Yuki managed to catch a few words like "WHY IS SHE THE FRIKKIN' MASCOT" and "we're practically left in the dark as far as the world's concerned! Can we even get a chance?!" How Miku is so oblivious to our envy, I don't get. That's one very dull crayon. A dull crayon loved by 'everyone', thought Yuki starting her own inner rant, face turning pink in the process.
Why does Miku get to be so popular? All the interviews, devoted fans, how she pops up in every search related to VOCALOID, all her original songs, why can't we have any of that? It's not like we're a pile of rotten apples are we? On top of that, I have one of the smallest chances to be on stage due to my age...even the wiki says that 'Yuki cannot sing like a professional singer as she is intended to sound like an amateur.'
The words stung her artificial heart. Despite her constant efforts to sing well enough to be popular, they were fruitless in quite a few cases: her incessant checking on Googleand Vocaloid wiki confirmed this.
Feeling more depressed, she snapped out of her pessimistic thoughts to hear the conclusion of Miki's rant: "AND SHE'S STILL TOO DUMB TO BE CONSIDERATE OF HOW WE FEEL!"
"Well, none of us act the way we feel around her" Kiyoteru stated.
"You're defendingthe 'World's Virtual Chipmunk'?" Piko asked, quoting the Kagamines.
"I'm not on her side, nor do I dislike her for her success. Let's face it: If she weren't the most popular, the Kagamines would be; thus our jealousy would be directed towards two VOCALOIDs and not one. Miku makes it easier in a way."
"So true..." Miki thought aloud.
A few minutes later, Kiyoteru spoke again. "Anyone need a pit stop?"
"Sure" the three passengers said in unison. Before Kiyoteru even finished parking, the young VOCALOIDs walked right out of the car. Judging by the lack of drivein their walking, they didn't really have to use the bathroom. The building was white with spotless clear windows, it easily reflected the blue sky in beautiful quality. Miki and Piko walked ahead, but Yuki walked slowly. Suddenly, a chill went through her spine, and ended in her ears. What was that? She thought as she felt a hand on her shoulder. "Anything wrong?" Kiyoteru asked his student.
"No! I'm fine! Thanks for worrying about me Sensei, but please don't do it!" she beamed, feigning for her teacher.
In the building, Miki, Piko, and Kiyoteru were all lined up, with many others, in front of a stand that was giving off a new flavor of 'mochi Ice Cream'. Yuki waited, coloring in the picture she had started. "Finished!" she said holding up her newest 'masterpiece'. How nice it would be if it ever became reality...
A sudden gust of wind occurred with the opening of a door, and Yuki's picture taken with it. "Eh?!" she rushed quickly after it. Along with her luck, the picture went right through an open window. "Aw, Man!" She took a quick look, and two more. She found a back door to go through and find her picture. Another gust of wind and her picture swept right past her face. Her reaction time was poor, thus she only managed to grab thin air. "Darn it!" she shouted.
Her moment of stupidity ended quickly, now she felt like she was hallucinating. An American Goldfinch was on the sidewalk a mere two feet in front of her. She blinked and rubbed her eyes multiple times before looking down again. How is a Wild Canary in this part of Japan? Does it have an owner? She speculated. The out-of-place bird flew until it was at the top of the small sign that advertised the 'Mochi Ice Cream' that her friends were purchasing. Upon landing and adjusting itself, the finch turned its head so it instantly faced Yuki. Her facial expression showed how peculiar she thought the scenario was. Another odd observation was mentally noted in Yuki's memory log mind, or rather 'mind'. The bird appeared to...illuminatein a pale green type mist that was barely noticeable. She nearly jumped as a small, calm, yet ominous voice echoed in her ears.
"Is that you...Ainsley?"
