Castle of death and love disclosure

Maka the princess and Soul the knight ... no no no screw this that isn't happening today this pt 2 of my Soul Eater fan fiction and my second writing!

The castle of spears and disclosure

"Damn you just won't die will you! I hate men who do that, ah your all pigs!" Hey yeah it's me the narrator please understand my voice is Morgan Freeman's. "Soul resonance!" "Fu... bastards! Splat. You know the bitchy bitch Mido yeah she just got bhe eaten up! The gangsters shot her in the arm 2 times, stabbed her, and kicked her 7 times in the face before blacking out and being thrown into the river. "Hey Mido where are you dinner is ready, hey are you listening!?" "Hello you little dirty cow I, wait we beat Mido up and threw her in the river, hope the kishin don't get her!"

The castle of dead gangsters and disclosure

Maka, Soul, and Tsubaki were all hanging out one day when Tsubaki asked a big question; "Are you guys dating?"

Maka blushed and kinda looked depressed then finally stayed yes when guess who shows up Black Star, Kid Liz, and Patty start saying they knew it while Kid and Liz were talking and then bam mouth to mouth bitchs.

"Liz loves Kid Liz loves Kid" screamed Patty. A quick question to readers Mido x Sky would this work because if you think so put it in the review also please review.

The castle of dead gangsters and disclosure pt 2

"Mido I will save you!"screamed Alis. Waking up the wild zombie with no teeth thou it just goes back to sleep. This wakes up Sky and Aries. "Hey your Alis right?"asked Sky who happened to be a bit tired also he is running with Aries who has tied him to his belt.

When Alis sees Mido's body in the river Sky panics and calls the three digit number. Mido tells them that the gang is in the dump spot. Sky runs as fast as he can with Aries in weapon form. When he got the the first thing he did was chop down the door but to his surprise five people got their heads chopped off instead of no bodies getting sliced in half.

Skymax2 here and want some reviews tell me how to improve and anything else helpful not rude