This is pretty much me rewriting my old story, mostly because whenever I look at it I am not impressed by it. From what I've been doing lately it is pretty bad in my opinion xD
I am keeping the characters I've made, example, Shadepaw, Silverpaw, Mudpaw, ect.
Anyway, here is the beginning of the new version!
Bumblestripe growled loudly as he gripped the wet moss in his mouth, ears flat on his head as his green eyes glared ahead of him. His mate was kitting and he couldn't be there for her. His mate was kitting and he couldn't protect her from the pain.
He leaped over every branch as he hurried back to camp, already hearing Dovewing yowling in pain. StarClan, don't make me lose her... or our kits. He shuddered slightly, remembering Graystripe's former mate, Silverstream who had died during kitting.
He stopped quickly at the entrance of the camp, his claws digging into the ground. He stared through the thorn tunnel, ears flattening on his head for a moment. He let out a sigh before padding through the tunnel quickly, gray tabby pelt bristling slightly. He hurried down the slope, seeing Cloudtail sitting beside of his kits, Snowkit, Amberkit, Dewkit and Whitewing who was sitting tensed beside of Birchfall and Ivypool.
Graystripe was resting at the bough of the beech tree the elders den, Millie and Blossomfall sitting beside of him. The two she-cats looked awkward sitting beside of each other as they watched the nursery quietly, ears perked up.
Graystripe gave a faint nod to Bumblestripe, his yellow eyes closing for a moment. "Bumblestripe," A voice sighed, making the large tom turn around quickly, pelt bristling as he saw it was just Whitewing.
He padded over quickly to the she-cat, "Yes, Whitewing?" He asked quietly, ears perking up slightly, "I know you're worried, but you don't have to." The white she-cat sighed quietly, glancing over at Ivypool who just gave a faint nod. Bumblestripe hissed quietly, "Why should I?"
Cloudtail turned slightly staring at him with his blue eyes, "You shouldn't worry because every she-cat goes through this, Bumblestripe. Brightheart kitted twice and she is fine." He let out a grunt, shaking his head, "I wonder if I was like this when Whitewing was being kitted." He let out a loud sigh. Bumblestripe frowned at the white tom slightly, ears flattening.
Ever since the battle that took place two moons ago, the white tom had wised up more, but he kept his belief that StarClan wasn't real. Bumblestripe could not understand how he couldn't believe StarClan after he'd seen it. Snowkit let out a loud purr, "I can't wait to actually get some playmates! Ever since Seedpaw and Lilypaw became apprentices it's been boring!"
Dewkit nodded slightly, his gray fur bristling slightly, "I can't wait either, it'll be fun!" He grinned at Snowkit widely. Ivypool purred at the three, leaning down towards them, "You won't be able to play with them for a while, they'll be too small." She smirked at their frowns.
Amberkit purred loudly, "I'll watch them! Make sure they don't get into trouble." She smirked at her brothers, ears quivering as she listened to the hisses of Dovewing and the soothing voices of Leafpool and Briarlight. Bumblestripe felt his whole body tensing at hearing the hisses of pain from the she-cat, lowering his head. He felt the eyes of Birchfall, Graystripe, and Cloudtail.
Finally he heard Birchfall sigh, "Bumblestripe, come with me." He turned his head to see the light brown tabby behind him. Bumblestripe flinched standing up to follow the tom and making sure to leave the damp moss, Whitewing blinking in confusion as Cloudtail sighed to her, "He's taking him out, he's stressed out." Bumblestripe felt Graystripe pad up beside of him quickly.
"Bumblestripe, you have nothing to worry." Graystripe sighed quietly, his ears flattening. Bumblestripe frowned glancing over at his father, "You shouldn't be out of camp, Graystripe. You're too old." he sighed loudly. Graystripe frowned, "The day I get too old is the day I die." He shook his head.
Bumblestripe let out a loud sigh as he padded close to Graystripe, Birchfall mumbling, "Sorry I took you away from the nursery, but I could see you were stressing out, Bumblestripe." The brown tabby sighed, "Stress isn't good for any cat."
Bumblestripe snapped quickly at the tom, "How am I supposed to be calm when Dovewing is in pain?" He growled loudly at the smaller tom. Graystripe hissed softly at him, "Patience, Bumblestripe! He is trying to help you." Birchfall frowned at Bumblestripe, "My mother, Ferncloud had three litters of kits. She was fine with each litter."
Bumblestripe frowned slightly, "Every kitting is different, Birchfall." He looked down at the ground, "Graystripe should know that." He felt his father stiffen beside of him, but he didn't respond to Bumblestripe's comment. Bumblestripe glanced over to see the large gray tom's head lowered slightly, staring at the ground with wide yellow eyes.
Birchfall frowned, "Just because it's happened before doesn't mean it's going to happen now, Bumblestripe." Bumblestripe let out a sigh, pressing his muzzle against Graystripe's fur. His green eyes half-closed, as Graystripe sighed, "He has a reason to be worried, she's been kitting for a long time now." The old tom lifted up his head to stare at Birchfall, "Aren't you worried?" He asked.
Birchfall shook his head, "Dovewing is a strong she-cat and will be able to take care of herself." He nodded again a small smile on his face. Bumblestripe sighed closing his eyes tightly as he kept himself close to Graystripe.
Dovewing let out a yowl of pain, claws digging into her nest. Brightheart was out of the den, gone to get something she couldn't remember. Briarlight flinched, "It's okay, Dovewing! You're doing great." The crippled she-cat tried to soothe. Leafpool frowned at Briarlight, her ears flat on her head. She didn't say anything though. Jayfeather pushed a leaf towards her, "Swallow this, Dovewing."
Dovewing hissed, "What is that for?" She opened her eyes to glare at the blind gray tabby, the tom hissed back, "It will ease the pain, eat it, Dovewing." Dovewing frowned before weakly biting the leaf and chewing on it. With a soft sigh she swallowed it quickly, ears quivering.
She let out a growl as a ripple of pain ran through her body, Jayfeather meowed quickly, "First kit." Dovewing let out a yowl of pain. Jayfeather immediately rushed over to the kit, licking it roughly. Dovewing panted lowering her head onto her paws only to perk up quietly as a loud wail of a kit filled the air.
"It's a tom." She heard Jayfeather give a rough meow, she heard her kit give a loud mewl as Jayfeather licked its pelt. She turned her head to look at the small tom, her eyes widening quickly as she saw him.
He looked just like Bumblestripe, light gray pelt and black tabby stripes. She gave a small purr, "My little kit... Welcome to ThunderCla-" She was interrupted by another pain making her yowl quickly in pain. Leafpool meowed quickly, "Another one." As she said this Dovewing felt her other kit being kitted. Leafpool hurried over to the kit, licking the kit's fur quickly.
She heard Briarlight give a small gasp as she stared at the second kit, the second kit gave a loud mewl. Dovewing frowned, what was Briarlight giving a gasp about. Jayfeather grunted, "Congratulation, Dovewing you have two healthy toms. Briarlight and I shall bring borage leaves to make your milk better, and Leafpool shall go retrieve Bumblestripe." The gray tabby turned padding out of the bramble thicket quickly.
Briarlight followed whispering to Jayfeather, "Jayfeather, the second kit... It's not-" She was interrupted by a hiss from Jayfeather as they padded out of the nursery. Leafpool smiled at Dovewing, "It'll be fine, Dovewing. I will make sure of that." She turned quickly padding out of the nursery quickly.
Dovewing blinked in confusion, turning her head to look at her kits only to gasp loudly, her blue eyes going wide.
Bumblestripe was still speaking to Graystripe and Birchfall. "Remember the time when you, Blossomfall and Briarlight were kits? You three were so much trouble!" Birchfall now had a small smile on his face, "I remember you three had put ants in Graystripe's nest! He was up all night scratching at himself!"
Graystripe frowned slightly, narrowing his yellow eyes, "So that's what it was." Bumblestripe smirked, "You didn't know, Graystripe?" He purred loudly, ears flattening on his head.
Bumblestripe and Birchfall both laughed at the old tom quietly, but the three was soon interrupted by a tabby and white she-cat calling out, "Bumblestripe?" This caused the three to turn around quickly to stare at Leafpool.
The she-cat was watching them quietly, only sighing, "I wish to speak to Bumblestripe alone." Graystripe and Birchfall both tensed glancing at each other for a moment before padding back into camp, ears flat on their heads.
Bumblestripe blinked in confusion staring at Leafpool with confusion, "What's wrong? Is Dovewing okay?" The she-cat's tail gave a quick flick, "Dovewing is fine, along with her two kits." This made Bumblestripe perk up a smile on his face as he started to get up. Leafpool however gave a hiss, "Stay!" Making Bumblestripe jerk back.
"Wh-what's wrong?" Bumblestripe asked quietly, his green eyes wide. Leafpool frowned at him, "Know this, Dovewing made mistakes. Bad mistakes, but if I find out that you dare take your anger or your hurt out on her or that kit..." She trailed off growling loudly, "I will flay you myself, got that?" She growled in his face quietly. Bumblestripe flinched staring at her in confusion, "I would never hurt my mate or our kits, Leafpool. I don't know why you are acting like I would."
Leafpool snarled, "I've seen cats do horrible things when no cat ever thought they would. I've seen cats hurt others just because they were hurt." Bumblestripe blinked, seeing her pelt bristling violently, "I know that you had to give your own kits up, Leafpool and that many were hurt in the progress, but I will never hurt anybody. I know no cat should ever mess with a mother and her love for her kits. I know if those kits aren't mine, I will be hurt. But, I will never take my anger or pain out on Dovewing or those kits."
Leafpool frowned, her pelt starting to lie flat, "I trust you, Bumblestripe. Don't break that trust." She let out a sigh before nodding, "Come on, let's go see your kits." She forced a small smile turning around quickly. Bumblestripe hurried after the small she-cat his ears perking up. He hurried around the cats, towards the bramble thicket. Briarlight standing at the entrance.
"Ah, Bumblestripe, would you like to see... your kits?" Briarlight asked awkwardly, Bumblestripe blinked watching as Briarlight dragged herself back into the nursery, Bumblestripe following quickly behind her. Dovewing lying down with her tail curled herself. Bumblestripe perked up, listening to a loud mewl.
Bumblestripe purred loudly smiling widely as he padded over to the soft furred smoky gray she-cat looking down at the kits only to freeze. Now he knew why Leafpool had came to talk to him. Why Briarlight sounded so awkward.
One of the kits, looked exactly like him. His stripes were just like his, same color, everything was the same. But the other one was the reason why he froze. It was a small thick-furred, dark brown tiger-striped tabby tom. Just like, Tigerheart.
He gasped stepping back, lowering his head to stare wide eyed at the ground. One was clearly his and the other was the kit of that ShadowClan cat. He glanced over quietly, his green eyes wide only to be met by Dovewing's blue eyes. Her ears were flat on her head as she had her head low on the ground, "I'm sorry. I didn't think... this could happen." She sighed quietly.
Bumblestripe shook his head, "It's okay, Dovewing. It's fine." He sighed quietly padding back to the small she-cat, his ears quivering, "They're beautiful kits." He purred quietly, lying down beside of Dovewing, "Shall we name our kits, Dovewing?" He asked quietly. Dovewing perked up, her blue eyes wide before smiling softly, "Of course, I'd love to name our kits."
Bumblestripe nosed the gray tabby, "How about Silverkit for this little tom?" He asked smiling softly up at Dovewing who smiled softly, "That's a lovely name for him." She purred loudly before nosing the dark brown tabby, "Him..." She trailed off quietly, before purring, "Shadekit."
Bumblestripe perked up, "Shadekit?" He glanced down at Shadekit for a moment, his ears twitching, "It's perfect." He smiled softly, giving Shadekit a lick. The kit gave a loud mewl moving his paws slightly. Bumblestripe smiled softly, chuckling at the tom. Dovewing smiled softly, resting her head. Bumblestripe turned to see Briarlight standing at the entrance of the nursery, who gave a faint nod to the cats standing out of the den.
Whitewing was the first in, and as soon as she was in she gasped, "Oh Dovewing! They are beautiful." She curled up beside of her daughter, staring down at the two squirming kits quietly, smiling softly. Bumblestripe felt Birchfall and Graystripe come up beside of him, "See we told you, Bumblestripe. She's fine." The two toms smirked at Bumblestripe.
Blossomfall crept close to Dovewing, "They are beautiful, Dovewing! You both should be proud." She smiled softly at Bumblestripe. Millie padded in slowly, "Yes, they are strong kits, will make strong warriors." She smiled at Bumblestripe widely. Cloudtail chuckled as he padded into the nursery, "Brightheart is finally here!" He glanced back at Brightheart who eyed everybody quietly, her ears perked up as Snowkit, Amberkit and Dewkit ran around her legs towards Dovewing.
Snowkit glanced down at Shadekit and Silverkit, his amber eyes wide as his brother and sister crept up beside of him, "So what their names?" Dewkit asked quietly, glancing up at Dovewing. "Yeah! What's their names?" Amberkit turned her head to stare at Bumblestripe.
Dovewing smiled softly, "We have decided to name this one." She nosed the gray tabby who let out a loud mewl, its body shaking, "Silverkit and this small little tom over here," She nosed Shadekit quietly who shook slightly but kept nursing, "Shadekit." She smiled softly glancing over at the three kits who watched her quietly.
Snowkit frowned slightly, cocking his head to the side, "Shadekit? That's a stupid name." This made Brightheart gasp, "Snowkit! Don't be rude." The ginger and white she-cat cuffed him around the ears making the white tom mewl, "But it is!" Cloudtail frowned, "Snowkit, just because a name is different and that you don't like it doesn't mean you have to insult them."
Snowkit frowned slightly before mumbling, "I'm sorry." Amberkit her eyes at Snowkit before purring to the two small kits, "Don't worry you two, I think you both have nice names." Brightheart mumbled, "Come on you three, straight to the nest." Dewkit mewled in protest, "But Brightheart!" Brightheart huffed pushing Dewkit forward towards the nest across the den.
Snowkit and Amberkit quickly followed after the two, giggling quietly. Soon enough Cloudtail left, along with Birchfall, Whitewing, Millie, Blossomfall and Graystripe. Bumblestripe stayed for a moment giving each kit a soft lick, "You two, I will love you until the end." He whispered to the two before turning quickly, "Sleep well, Dovewing." He whispered to the she-cat who gave a slightly nod as she closed her eyes tightly.
As he padded out of the den, he spotted the other cats of the clan sitting out watching him quietly. Berrynose had his head lowered staring at him warily. Molepelt and Cherryfern were sitting close to each other, staring at the nursery, Poppyfrost was sitting near them. Lionblaze sat beside of Cinderheart, giving Bumblestripe a weird look and Bramblestar and Squirrelflight was standing close together watching Bumblestripe.
Bramblestar let out a sigh, padding towards Bumblestripe, "Briarlight has told us that... the second one wasn't... Yours." He blinked watching him quietly, his tail twitching slightly. Bumblestripe growled quietly, glancing over where his sister was giving her chest a nervous lick, "The kits are mine, Bramblestar." He hissed quietly to him, "And I would like to see any cat try to challenge me on it!"
Berrynose grumbled, "I would!" He stood up quickly, ignoring Poppyfrost trying to get him to sit back down. Bumblestripe hissed at the cream colored tom, his hackles raising. Lionblaze hissed, "Calm it, both of you!" He stepped in the large space in between Berrynose and Bumblestripe, "What the clan is worried about is if it is true, Bumblestripe. The clan has always accepted every cat, kittypet, loner, rogue and half-clan, Bumblestripe." Lionblaze mumbled to him, "It isn't unheard of that a kit is born half-clan, but the clan just wants to make sure."
Bumblestripe hissed at the large golden-brown tabby, "He is mine! No matter what you say, he might have a different blood father, but I will always be there for him. I will be there to make sure he is alive. Do you think that crowfood eater is going to do that?" He hissed in Lionblaze's face who just frowned, "He might," Cinderheart spoke up, "I've heard of stories where a tom wanted his kits to live in his clan rather than the mothers. And there has been wars over it." She padded up beside of Lionblaze.
Bumblestripe grumbled, "Dovewing broke off all contact with that cat, I doubt he'll know he's even a father." He turned to Bramblestar who was frowning, "You raised Lionblaze, Jayfeather and Hollyleaf even though they weren't yours. But in the end the secret was told, w-will you make sure that no clan knows that Shadekit is half...half-clan?" He asked the large leader quietly.
Bramblestar let out a sigh, glancing over at the cats, "No cat shall tell any cat outside of this clan about Shadekit's true father." He sat down, his tail twitching, "If any cat does, then they will be... punished." He growled narrowing his eyes. Seedpaw flinched before asking, "Should we tell, Shadekit who his true father is?" She called out loudly, Lilypaw beside of her watching carefully.
Bramblestar looked shocked for a moment before sighing loudly, "Sometimes letting the kit will do one of two things. He will accept it and embrace it or it will shatter his world and possibly make him believe he isn't as loved as his brother." He sighed quietly. The dark brown tabby thought quietly before nodding for a moment, "We shall not tell Shadekit of his true father, until he is mature and old enough to understand." He nodded to the clan, "But we shall not ever tell any cat out of ThunderClan." He frowned. "Ever."
The clan muttered to each other, but every cat was nodding slowly in agreement. Bumblestripe let out a soft sigh of relief. He started to pad to the warrior den only to have Brackenfur pad up beside of him, "You'll be a great father, Bumblestripe." The old tom mumbled to the gray tabby. Bumblestripe gave a faint nod as he curled up in his nest, watching as Brackenfur padded back farther, curling up in his own nest.
Bumblestripe sighed softly, watching the entrance quietly before closing his eyes and falling asleep immediately.
This is the first chapter of the remake~
What do you guys think of it? :D
Review and tell me what you think of the remaking of it~
