Hello! This is my first Destiny fanfiction so please have mercy. It is based on the killing of Thalor by Dredgen Yor and his Thorn. Constructive Criticism only please!
Thalor ran through the Pantheon, tiring with each step. He held his shoulder, as it was bleeding and burning. It was not a flame-like burn, but rather a cold one. Cold and sharp. Like a knife. More of these filthy, dark bullets flew threw the air around him. He quickly took cover, his breath quick. "How could this happen?" He thought. "I am invincible. I am king! Yet, this... this... vile rebel is beating me! Killing me!" He stood. A thick, sharp bullet whizzed by his head. He looked to his sides, trying to find a teammate, a light. He saw something, a young warlock, one that did not belong in the Crucible. The Crucible was ruled by gods of guardians, such as himself. But, he saw light in this young one. Light. Hope. Then the warlock fell, surrounded in green and black smoke and fumes. Thalor readied his auto rifle, and looked toward the direction of the bullet. He would avenge that poor warlock, that happened to be in the wrong match. However, the bullet came from his left, and he fell to the ground, As he looked at his killer, his vision became blurred with green and black. He now saw the Crucible for what it really was, a killing ground, not the competitive sport he thought it was. The Hunter walked away, clearly satisfied. Thalor looked up at him. The rebel. The traitor. The murderer. His murder.
