Author Notes: This is commentary for My Immortal, because how else would you make it passed the second chapter.

TUF: I feel like posting this in my word document might give my computer some sort o disease. *looks over at sister* What do you what your name to be for this?

TUF's Sister: That person's kid.

TUF: Not Ebony's I hope.

TUF's Sister: No! No I do not approve of that, that would not be good. Just call me crazy cat lady - No, Unicorn-person - *laughs* Sassy Mango!

TUF: … Be serious. I'm giving putting you down as Pons. 'Kay? And to all those whom have stumbled upon it, besides name before comment I shall put my comments in bold and my sister's comments in italics. My Immortal will be in normal non-fancy formatting.

Pons: *in a pirate hat* (because they are so fashionable) Let's go!

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik)

Pons: What is goffik?

TUF: I think it is some sort of sickness.

2 my gf (ew not in that way) [Pons: She at least thought of it in that way] raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling.

TUF: Did she give up on you half way through?

Pons: She obviously didn't help with the spelling

TUF: Thankfully I have you to help with mine. *fixes minor spelling issues of mine* .

U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!

Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name)

Pons: Which one?

TUF: It be a hard guess to say, probably involving a dart board… And parents whom were big on middle names or just really really weird…

Pons: *suddenly notes Ebony has Dementia in her name* *laughs so hard she has to leave room to use the bathroom*

TUF: *Waits patiently, noticing she popped her shoulder from laughed again*

Pons: *comes back* What I miss *reads over everything, laughs again* Okay lets move on.

with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears [TUF: Really? Impressive since tears are see through.] and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!).[Pons: Well I guess I'm out] I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. [TUF: And you want to be related to him because he is a 'hottie' why? Eww incest much][Pons: If I find a guy hot, I hope that I'm not related to him, just saying.]I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and whiteI have pale white skin..[TUF: No way *sarcastic* vampires are so not pale!] [Pons: What you going to do now, sparkle in the sunlight?] I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, [TUF: The over use of white since you have pale skin is to make you sparkle then?] black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, [TUF: I hope there is no sun if it is snowing and raining.] which I was very happy about. [Pons: Because you're a sparkling fairy princess?] A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. [TUF: Lovely way to make friends.]

"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was... Draco Malfoy!

"What's up Draco?" I asked.

"Nothing." he said shyly. [Pons: Interesting conversation.] [TUF: *sarcastically* Because Draco is known for being shy.]

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. [TUF: You have friends? Run Draco Run!] [Pons: Run while you have the chance!]

AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! [TUF: Well we did make a commentary, don't cha' know.] [Pons: She is asking 'fangz' and not addressing our opinions of the matter] [TUF: Clearly.]