Chapter 1: Introduction
Like I said I would rewrite the story and here is Chapter 1. After my failed attempt at writing this story once it seemed like if I tried to rewrite it that same reviewer would curse me out yet again. But after a long hesitance here it is.
Deep in the heart of an ancient land where light was never known. Only candle-light, where terrifying creatures lurked in the shadows as they always found a foothold. A single ruler lived, one with a cold heart and one that was a being of the shadows. The ponies of the world would slowly become these shadow ponies and would forget their past and who they were. The emperor always insisted that he was respected and never to be looked upon by his underlings. So, none dared enter his castle. But, our story does not take place with this ruler but instead, with a young colt. He would change the course of our world today.
"Today I have learned how to create a flame with magic. While the flame isn't bright it is delightfully warm. Although I begin to fear for mother. As the days pass, I slowly hear her raspy coughs in fact I have only see her every so often. She enjoys blowing out candles in the house and when I relight them she hisses and hides in her room. I have begun to think that she slowly becoming a Nightmare Pony while I would hate for that to happen I am also fascinated by the transformation," the young colt wrote in his journal by candle light. He closed the book and sighed, picking up another book and reviewing his writings on fire and light. His horn lit up with flame and the warmth overtook him. Slowly he pushed further and further into the flame making it grow more and more and like a supernova it exploded off of his body. The city around him lit up for a second and the ponies of his village became curious as to what happened. The colt stood in his now fully lit bedroom and looked down, his dark coat before now was lit on fire. His mother walked in and looked at her son, "F-Fyre? What is this," she asked. Fyre looked at his mother and noticed that the sickness was receding off of her body. A surge of power overtook the unicorn and he was lifted into the air. The flames on his body swirled around him and his eyes whitened out taking the color from them, wings opened on his back, and every last regular pony aspect he owned disappeared from his body. Instead of being a young colt he grew to a full grown stallion, "Fyre! What have you done to yourself?"
"Mother don't you see that I have found a cure for the Nightmare disease? I can finally produce light!"
"But you are light now. How do expect to produce more it you are it."
"It doesn't matter. Now move aside." The mare stepped away and Fyre walked through the house outside into the village. "Finally after four years of trying, I finally found a way to make light," he thought. Ponies of all kinds watched as the stallion walked through the village, they squinted their eyes as he passed and blinked in shock as he passed them.
Walking through the rough terrain Nightmare Ponies avoided him at all costs in order to prevent purification. He walked for miles endlessly as he ventured to the castle that ruled them all. "No more living in the dark. I have to do this for mother, for all pony kind," he thought.
Finally the castle rose into his view and he gazed at the black mass in front of him. Nightmare Ponies roamed everywhere as if it was their home. They hissed at him and Fyre began to feel fear, "Wait, why am I afraid? I am fire! I burning light that pierces the darkness! All shall revel in my light!" He stormed into the castle with a burning blade at his side. This was created by his flame and the blade glowed blue with heat. Those few Nightmare Ponies that attacked him were sliced and turned to a smoke. He calmly walked up into the throne room. He allowed his flames to erupt and knock the guards into smoke and Fyre smiled at the king in his throne. Smoke billowed from his eyes creating and eerie effect. Black coat and a mane and tail that swirled like the smoke the Nightmare Ponies turned to. He stood and laughed as he opened his black hellish wings. "So stallion, you are made of flame," he said. Fyre viewed the sharp fangs he had and as he spoke his voice was doubled by that of another lower register. The black eyes glared at him and Fyre felt afraid, "You are afraid of me. I know because of your light. When you are afraid it dims. You are like those mere little candles. A candle that with the slightest breeze will blow out."
"I am a torch that will light the way for my kind. Now step aside or I'll make you." Fyre growled, "I am a Flare. A signal for those to see through the darkness now move."
The king growled at Fyre and a wave of shadows hit him. Fyre was knocked back and as he struggled to get up he saw what his future would be like if he had lost. With heavy breath he rose up, inside of the stallion something snapped again and a wave of light fought the shadows back. Every one of the Nightmare Ponies turned to smoke and Fyre drew his sword. Light filled the throne room and the king winced at the stallion's light. "Since you are strong enough I shall tell you my name. It is quite simple. My name is Nightmare."
"It's Flare. And I'm done talking." Flare leaped forward and his sword clashed with Nightmare's finally the shadow gave out and Flare's sword sliced through Nightmare's neck and the shadow stallion screamed. He erupted into smoke and it was unlike the others', dark purple with small little lights in it. Flare pulled a gem from the throne and trapped the king in it. He held it close and smiled, "I finally have won. I have finally brought light to the world. Flare stepped out onto the balcony and created something from his imagination. A bright, large, planet like ball of flame that lit the Earth. And it appeared. It slowly rose over the horizon and he watched its beautiful colors, "Sunrise," he thought.
Ponies all rose from their homes at the bright light outside. They all looked up to the castle that was once black and wondered at how this immense light was created. Up upon the mountain Flare stood and his voice carried, "You have been vanquished from the Shadow King's rule! Now the time of the Sun has arrived!" The crowds of ponies cheered at their new king's arrival.
So here is the first/ introduction chapter of Return of the Fire Queen. Yay! So let's go ahead and keep going yeah? Anyway please Rate, Review, and Favorite.
-Sarakotsei
Chapter 3: Chapter 2
Hi guys it's been a while I know…depression. It gets the best of you sometimes. All I can say is that writing and love is what keeps me going. So without further ado let's get on with the story.
Hundreds of years had passed and through many trials of strength Flare triumphed to become the strongest ruler in ponydom. But as time progressed, he began to fall ill under his strength and power. Not a physical fitness, but one where he became addicted to his power and began to become a tyrant.
Ponies not dare speak or look at him because of his literal explosive temper. He knew that one day the people would rise above him and so he thought in his throne one bright morning, "I need an heir. Surely, one day I will be taken over but it is my heir that shall endure. A strapping young stallion…now to find a suitable mother."
"KNIGHT," he bellowed, a white unicorn walked in past the fire guards that the King trusted deeply, he did create them after all, "You called my Lord," he said calmly while bowing, "Find me a suitable wife…it is time I had an heir."
"As you wish my Lord, would there be any preferences?"
"White, unicorn or Pegasus I do not care. Tall, blue hair preferably. Now GO!" The unicorn dashed out of the castle into the village of unicorn, he found every white mare easily. Knight was the only unicorn in the kingdom with a horn possessing enough magic to match King Flare in his young days, Knight also had the longest horn in the kingdom. After finding the white mares none were suitable for his majesty so Knight left to the village of the pegasi not a single soul matched or even appealed to Knight himself much less Flare. He was beginning to think that he could not find a wife for his majesty until he accidentally wandered to the far north where it was cold, and in the cold he found the village of the legendary Crystal Ponies, seeking a suitable wife and revitalized with energy he found one in specific. A mare with a long straight blue mane and tail, a coat made with pure white fur, eyes that sparkled, she was not a crystal pony, in fact she was not even a Pegasus or unicorn, she was both, a breed like Flare's like none had ever seen. With the utmost respect Knight conversed with the mare, "I hate to bother you but my Lord Flare has given me the task of finding a wife. And your beauty compares to none. Would you please travel with me to the main land and see if you would like to marry the King?" Her voice was angelic, so crisp and unforgettable, "Go and see the King? That tyrant who almost melted my homeland? I will come with you yes, but not to seek his hoof in marriage! In fact, I might have to teach him a lesson!"
Knight bowed and used his magic to bring them to the village of the unicorn, "I understand that our King has lost his sense of pride but he is just paranoid that is all," Knight said, "No! He was traveling and attempted to conquer my village and almost burned it to the ground and rid of our natural wonder. I had to create a special guard to protect our village from heat users! I can't wait to see him!" Entering the castle, guards eyed the mare in great wonder. "Don't look them in the eye," Knight whispered. She avoided eye contact and carried her head high. Stopping in a grand hallway decorated with stained glass murals of Flare and his vanquish over the darkness, Knight looked at her, "Please wait here as I alert him of your arrival."
"Understood." She stood waiting as the stallion went through the large decorated doors. Once he reappeared he signaled for her to enter. Bravely stepping through the doors, she saw the King, immediately she felt the urge to freeze him on the spot. She stopped in front of his throne and did not bow, "King Flare, it is a pleasure to meet you once again. Hopefully, this time won't be as violent as the last."
"You've quite the little mouth mare. What shall I call you?"
"Crystal Bearer. You remember me know?"
"Ah yes, the young mare that fought against me when I was younger. I hope that my squire has told you of the situation at hand."
"I have been informed and I strongly decline you are just as bad as the monster before you." Flare shot forward with his sword at her neck, "Do not compare me to him. I gave you ungrateful brats light and I can take it away just as easily as I brought it." She became encrusted with crystal and with white eyes she glared at the King, drawing a sword as well she charged, "This is for almost burning my village to the ground! For the three lives you stole from me, for endangering our natural wonder!"
"Stop blabbering!" Flare shot a wave of fire at her and she fell. He created a fire vortex and began to encircle her in it, "Marry me or I'll kill you and burn your precious village," he ordered. Moments passed and the fire grew hotter and thicker, "I…accept…your…proposal," she said through gritted teeth. He smiled in victory and grabbed her, "You are my wife now and you will bear an heir of mine." She simply could not think of having a pony with this stallion, he was…evil."
The wedding was a grand one and before the wedding Flare walked up to her, "You will smile. After all you are being engaged to the strongest stallion know in ponydom. You kindly accepted my proposal understand?"
"Yes my Lord, I understand." And after that she did what she was told because if she didn't every one of her friends would be gone and there was nothing she could do about it. The wedding came and went and one day while out in her garden Knight walked up to her, "My Lady I am truly sorry for putting you in this position."
"Please Knight don't call me that. I am but a slave to bear a child with this stallion and he will surely kill me afterwards. After all I am bearing one of his children now, hopefully this will be the only one."
"I had not known! This is news indeed I am truly happy that you are going to have a child! Pity it is my Lord's." Knight walked away and left her in peace. She tended to the few flowers she had as Flare would burn them all. That night, she snuck out of the castle and started to run she did not know the area well enough and fell into a large crevice. Finding a large cave, she laid to rest until the sounds of hissing could be heard. Turning around she met a pair of large green eyes and green scales. She did not dare scream, backing away slowly, the large serpent exited his cave and roared at her. The cracking noise of fire could be heard from its throat and she just barely dodged it, "If I go into crystal form he'll keep me as a treasure. I can't escape I am more agile but he's faster," she thought while running away. She began to panic as she found that there was no escape from this serpent. A huge rush of fire erupted and hit the dragon, it was still focused on the pregnant mare, the cracking noise could be heard and Crystal Bearer tripped and fell. The dragon's fire rushed over her body and she screamed in terror. Once the dragon breathed in for air it was surprised to find that the mare was still alive.
A large thud sounded behind the dragon and shook the earth beneath its feet. The light was blinding and the King stomped his hoof, "You dare hurt my child!? You shall perish for your crime." His sword fired and the dragon was gone. Flare turned to the mare on the ground, "You will not put my child's safety in danger again." He turned and left. Knight ran up to the mare to help her back to the castle, "It is almost impossible for a pony to survive dragon fire," he said. "I do not know why I have survived, I wish I hadn't. Such a selfish ruler, that stallion was raised very poorly," Crystal Bearer answered.
After the dragon incident, Flare dared not let Crystal Bearer out again and he posted guards at her chamber door. During the day the poor child burdened mare had to find new ways of entertainment. She found that the library Flare owned was quite entertaining. Since all of her magic was being consumed in developing the child, she had Knight help her find books. One day she found a very interesting one on Flare's past, Knight walked up to her after she had read the first bit and his jaw dropped, "That is King Flare's diary my Lady! I would advise you not to read it."
"Oh stop worrying I just want to figure out what exactly happened to make our king like this." She began to read aloud:
Several weeks have passed and mother seems to be getting worse. She blows out candles in the house and locks herself in her room. I fear that she is falling under the plague as well. When the Shadow King arrived he came with an army, an army of creatures made of pure shadow. They carried a disease that caused other ponies to become like they are. We have not seen these creatures, we do not know what the look like. All that I know is that ponies who stray from the light are never seen again. My magic is growing stronger every day and I have learned now to at least produce a small amount of light, just enough to roam the house. Someday I will overthrow the Shadow King and his fortress and bring light to this world.
She giggled, "Who knew that our tyrant was righteous at one point. Let's keep going!" She continued reading, "Oh this one is good written from a different perspective." She read:
The past was dark and ye shall see, what exactly happened to me.
Crystal Bearer and Knight were taken into the book. Crystal Bearer woke to darkness just complete shadow, "Knight where are you?"
"Right here my Lady you need not worry I have-"Someone walked past as a flame, he held his head high and kept his eyes narrowed. A sword was held at his side as he cut down strange black and green creatures when he sliced them they turned to a smoke and disappeared. "Is that? King Flare?"
"I believe it is. We should follow and see," Crystal Bearer answered. They followed the flaming stallion into a black castle that caused shivers up their spines. The stallion stood there for a second and with a new stance he stormed into the castle. The two modern ponies followed behind him and watched the young King blow the doors down into the throne room. The strange shadow ponies were knocked back and turned to smoke. Flare smiled at the black being in the throne. He was the picture of eeriness with smoke spilling from his eyes, a black coat to match it and a mane that swirled and colored the same purple as the shadow ponies. He rose from the throne and cackled like a crow, "So stallion made of flame," the shadow king. Flare studied him and Crystal Bearer stood to the side, "You are afraid of me. I know because of your light. When you are afraid it dims. You are like those mere little candles. A candle that with the slightest breeze will blow out."
"I am a torch that will light the way for my kind. Now step aside or I'll make you," Flare answered, "I am a Flare. A signal for those to see through the darkness now move."
The Shadow King narrowed his eyes and a wave of shadows hit him. Flare fell back and struggled to get up, he was standing there breathing heavily. Crystal Bearer and Knight could not believe what was happening right before their eyes they were seeing Flare rise to kingship. She looked at Knight and whispered, "This is insane, I didn't know that he fought like this."
"Since you are strong enough I shall tell you my name. It is quite simple. My name is Nightmare."
"It's Flare. And I'm done talking." Crystal Bearer watched as the sword fight continued watching every one of his moves, he was sloppy of course but his blows were powerful. And in a flash the Light King's sword sliced through the Shadow King's neck and he turned to smoke. He grabbed a gem and the shadow was sucked into it. A bright light appeared and the two were sucked out of the memory.
Crystal Bearer found herself back in the castle library with two flaming hooves before her eyes. Looking up she smiled innocently. "Did you have fun pilfering through my belongings," he asked rudely, "No I was just curious to see what you were like before," Crystal Bearer answered
"I have changed and become stronger. That is all you need to know. Do not infiltrate my personal business again."
"I apologize I didn't mean to."
"Of course you didn't." He hissed and left the library. Knight walked to the white mare and helped her out of her pillow bed. Heading to her quarters she turned to Knight, "I have a favor to ask."
"Yes my Lady what are your wishes?"
"Could you find me an empty book? Something discreet easy to hide."
"As you wish my lady." The white unicorn left in a huff quickly trying to find a book for the Queen. Knight knew what her plan was and it was partially good but partially bad. It could lead to the fall of the Kingdom…
Whew! So it's all done I can't believe it! Anyway thank you for the support PLZ R&R&F
-Sarakotsei