"Mcnally?!"
Sam's thoughts were racing as he enters the war torn evidence room, moving metal shelves, as sparks were flying everywhere.
"Mcnally?!" Sam shouts as he moves a shelf and sees Andy motionless on the ground. Sam shakes her with his hand. "Andy..." Shakes her again, then puts two fingers on her neck and finds a pulse. "Oh thank god..."
He then stands up and runs to the door of the evidence room "We need some help in here!" He then runs back to Andy and says "Help is on the way..." Knowing that she can't hear him, then paramedics come into the room, straighten her out, and then put her on a stretcher, down to the 1st floor and then outside into the ambulance.
"Can I come with her?" Sam asked the paramedic. The paramedic nods and Sam jumps into the Ambulance, the doors close and the Ambulance goes off to the hospital.
During the ride, getting texts saying if Mcnally was alright, responding to all of them saying 'I hope so'.
As they get to the hospital, the paramedics immediately race Andy into the emergency room and Sam sits down while thoughts are pouring down on him
-An hour and a half later-
A nurse comes into the waiting room and Sam immediately gets up and walks to her "Nurse, please tell me she's alright"
The Nurse looks at him no emotion "She's alright..."
"Oh thank g..." Sam the gets interrupted by the nurse
"Physically... Not mentally" The nurse said
Sam looks at her and says "Wait... What do you mean?"
"Andy has brain damage..." The nurse exclaims "...She won't remember how to walk, speak... Or know anyone... But luckily, she can open her eyes, move her head, her ears are working and we are seeing a little bit of arm movement, but that's going take awhile for her to learn"
Sam looks down "So, wait..." then looks back at the nurse ..."She won't remember anyone? She won't remember anybody's names?"
The nurse nods and says "Sadly she never will, same with the walking and the talking, the only talking she can do is doing the 'mmm' sound, unless if you're lucky enough to teach her, but it's highly impossible"
Sam stands there while a single tear goes down his cheek "She was my girlfriend... All those memories from her are gone now..."
"I'm sorry" the nurse apologizes "We tried our best but we can't fix her" the she goes back
As soon the nurse left, Shaw and the rest of the crew come storming in
"Sam, how's Andy?" Epstein asks
Sam looks blankly at Shaw all teary eyed
"Please don't tell me she's dead..." Chloe about to burst into tears
"Mentally she is, but not physically" Sam says "She's got brain damage, she can move her head, she can open her eyes, her ears, her heart... But, she won't remember anything, herself, and anyone... Including us..." Sam then sits down and cries.
Soon after everybody in the room heard the news, they all cried with him.
This is my first fanfic, I just want to know, how'd I do? Is their any changes I can make to my writing? And also, how'd you like this chapter?