This is the sonnet I wrote for my Creative writing class and I chose Fai for my subject and I really like this sonnet. So please review.
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For Fai
Under false smiles and haunted memories
That pass like a dark cloud over the sun
His smile shines brightly as an emery
As he laughs with his favorite manjuu bun
His sapphire irises now turn gold
And a thirst for his "E" dwells in his heart
His knowledge that he shows comes from the old
His mystic powers are a work of art
Drained by a companion whom he thought friend
As the sakura blossoms start to fall
He thought that he was able to transcend
He wished he could fall away from it all
Though he wishes to cry a single tear
His "E" wishes he could help face his fear
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So tell me if you liked it or any help you want to give me. And everyone knows who Fai's "E" is.