Witch's House Act 3
In the very corner of a small town, there lies a bar that goes by the name of " Hell's hottest". There's nothing particularly interesting about the bar. It's floors where wooden and dusty, the walls were littered with holes as if a shootout happened recently, and the support beams looked as if they would give out suddenly at any given moment. like i said before nothing special. The bartender was hard at work cleaning used glasses, it was at that moment a hooded figure entered the bar. The bartender quickly put the used dishes to the side and welcomed the figure by boringly swaying his hand back and forth. The hooded figure sat in the closest stool to door he entered from, the bartender simply walked closer, though he was a bit cautious. Something about this person seemed "off".
Bartender: What will it be?
The figure sat silent for a few seconds. Then he finally spoke.
?: The red sundae surprise.
The bartender nodded his head and began to mix the ingredients of the drink together. All the while keeping his eye on the hooded figure. His voice confirmed he was a male. But he couldn't determine his age or what he looked like. After the drink was prepared and served the figure stood and spoke once again.
?: So have you heard?
The bartender looked at the the figure bewildered.
Bartender: Heard what?
?: They say that there's a shady pub around here, and that when people go in... they don't come out.
The bartender continued to stare at the speaking individual. Though this time with a far more serious look.
?: When it comes to searching for clues the local law enforcement are pretty incompetent. So that's when i decided to do my own little search, and based off the evidence i've come to the conclusion the murderer's not human.
The bartender serious face quickly turned to an amused grin.
Bartender: So what is he?
?: A LIGER!
A long silence fills the room. Then it erupts into laughter.
Bartender: Funny story kid, Here take this as my appreciation for that good laugh.
The bartender passes a golden locket to the stranger. When he opens it, instead of a clock there's a carved inscription merely stating "DIE"
In about a fraction of the second the old bartender lunges at hooded figure... but his attack misses and he is given an elbow to the back of the skull. He begins to moan in severe pain.
?: Come on demon, did honestly believe i was that naive.
Demon: HOW DARE YOU MAKE LIGHT OF ME.
Now in a berserk state of mind the demon once again charges the hooded boy. He slashes at him... but his attacks are either blocked or dodged by the youth. Enraged he foolishly charges the boy head first, but he is effortlessly repelled by a powerful kick to the temple which sends him flying across the bar. The youth laugh's at it's despair.
?: Come on don't tell me that's all you got.
The demon now realizes that he is severely outclassed he composes himself and attempts to flee out of the front door. Just when escape seems to be in his grasp he is violently pushed back by what seems to be a magical barrier. Confused beyond comprehension the demon is taken by complete surprise when two young girls step in front of the barrier. One has blonde hair rapped in braids and green eye's, the other has violet hair and golden eye's.
Demon: WITCH'S
With his attention focused else where the demon is easy prey for the hooded individual who impales through the chest.
?: If you were smart you would've gotten out of that piece o sh*t body.
The boy removes his bloodied hand from the demon's chest. As the monster collapses he takes one more look at the two girls, they're waving him goodbye with smiles on their faces. The demon finally falls face first to the ground.
Demon: (dying) how... how did you figure out...
?: I never mentioned the gender of the said murderer, and you said he. So in short, you told me.
Demon: Clever bastard
The demon takes one last gasp for air before spewing blood from his mouth and dying. With his job done the young man removes his hooded jacket. revealing his dark skinned average teenage appearance... except for one small detail, One of his eye's are brown and human looking the other is red, and demon like. (i'll stop with the question marks and just show you his name)
Renin: Viola, Ellen were done here let's go. This place reeks
Ellen: Yea i'm tired that was a lot of work.
Viola: Stop being lazy Ellen. All you did was make a force field.
Ellen: That took a lot of magic energy.
Viola: I HELPED YOU!
Ellen: (boredly) whatever.
Viola: (comical anger) WHY YOU!
Renin: (Annoyed) shut up Shorty, and Naive.
Viola and Ellen turn their head towards an aloof Renin. They look at each other once again and nod to each other. They both rear their legs and kick Renin... Lets just stay where the sun doesn't shine, below the belt. The sky fills with Renin's wails of pain.
And thus act 3 of the witch's house begins.
So how was it? anything i can do to make this better? What do you think of Renin's character? Is this worthy of being a sequel to the Witch's house if not what can i do to make it better? Ill read all comment's.