Naruto fan-fiction – chakra enlightenment
I don't own Naruto
AN:1A
I'm an aspiring author so constructive criticism is much appreciated, especially on any leaps of logic I hate those and I don't want to be a hypocrite so I'll go back and try to smooth things out.
This fanfic by the way is going to be a xianxia story, so beware.
Oohhh the responsibility of writing a xianxia story I'm feeling it even now, I really hope I can finish it. Well I'll stop if everyone hates it I'm only doing this because I want to be an author of a bestseller fantasy novel.
Well I now feel like someone who is only in it for the money, but seriously I like this story premise and will take great joy in good feedback.
As for pairings I guess canon for the most part at least in the beginning everyone will like who they like except for Naruto, he will be the centre of change after all in this fanfic.
The leaves twirl in an ever-descending dance toward a young boy with a mop of yellow hair, the leaves drift past his deep blue eyes and nick past the strange whiskers that adorn his cheeks.
The young boys name is Naruto Uzumaki he is four years old today and currently a thick killing intent swirls toward him from all directions, regardless Naruto continues to sit on a tree branch he found comfortable and the ANBU that unbeknownst to him were his guards also showed no movement.
This was due to the nature of the killing intent, it was thick but not intense and any true ninja would know the difference. Killing intent is generated when a desire to kill is in a person's heart and the thicker the intent the stronger the desire, intensity however correlates to the actual intent of the kill.
The killing intent that swirled toward Naruto though thick due to it stemming from all over the village hidden in the leaves lacked the intensity that could cause alarm.
Any person from outside the village would be shocked at this scene where a four year old child could generate the hate that feeds the killing intent of even the kindest seeming members of the village.
What goes above and beyond shocking is this child's utter lack of care toward the alarming fog of killing intent that threatens to consume his small frame.
Some of the more scholarly members among the konoha ninja's have, even deeply into the night and onto the next day, argued and debated vehemently whether the child is dense and doesn't notice the killing intent that even a hamster would notice or is used to it and finds it normal.
These debates have of course annoyed a few people, among them obviously are the Sandaime and few people who have strong loyalty to the Yondaime and are in the know.
Naruto gazes across the village streets and finds a constant stream of hate flowing towards him, within which undulates a pulse of fear.
A hobby, most people have one, Naruto in contrast to popular belief doesn't have a hobby for mischief and pranking instead he has a hobby of analysing and understanding.
'It's the 10th of October year 62 of ninja village era, the hate has reached the highest point of the year with the kyuubi festival, which happens to coincide with my birthday, from these points I can infer that the villagers believe me to be the kyuubi… however in contrast there is no change in the emotions of the ninja's in my immediate vicinity, nor in the hokage from this I conclude that there is an opposing belief that I'm not the kyuubi prevalent in at least the higher echelons of the ninja ranks.' Naruto's thoughts confer.
'The question for why I am hated is now solved however now there are two questions that must be answered 1. Am I or am I not the kyuubi? , 2. What so clearly associates me with the kyuubi?' concludes Naruto's thoughts as he jumps off his comfortable branch onto another and then to the ground.
"It seems I was wrong, there is a third question which is how to answer these questions?" he musses while walking down the street, only to be brought to swift end through an epiphany gleamed from the hokage monument.
"Ahhh, the hokage, I just have to ask him. Hahaha this will scare him down to the bones either way" Naruto inadvertently speaks in a loud voice, startling the villagers a good few ninja and even some of the anbu.
Naruto picks up his pace and runs to the hokage residence/konoha administration building and speeds up the stairs to the receptionist proclaiming he is here to see the hokage.
4 minutes ago-
"Hokage-sama" an anbu respectively calls from behind the door to Sarutobi Hiruzen the Sandaime Hokage.
"Enter" the hokage orders curtly, followed by a "Report" to the anbu member with a tori mask.
"Hokage-sama, Naruto Uzumaki will be here soon" the tori anbu reports.
"Good, let him through," orders Hiruzen.
3 minutes later-
Before the receptionist has a chance to reject, the sandaime calls for Naruto "come in Naruto-kun".
Naruto heads to the door and quickly slips inside with the door closing behind him, following up by rushing to the hokage with a look of curiosity and loudly asking "hokage-jii I have two questions that I'm certain you have the answer to"
'This isn't about his parents is it, it hurts to refuse him of his parentage' he sends an inquisitive gaze toward an anbu hidden in a dark corner who simply shrugs in response.
"Ask away child, however even if I know the answer I might not necessarily be able to answer you, so you can't get upset if I don't answer you" Hiruzen gently warns the blonde.
"Well I think I should know this sense everyone else seems to" Naruto confidently remarks.
"Hmm" sounds a confused sandaime.
"Anyway am I or am I not the kyuubi? And if I'm not the kyuubi what so clearly associates me with it?" Naruto questions.
In response to this absolutely alarming question everyone in the room slips up, the hokage is kneeling on the floor coughing up his pipe, 10 anbu fall from the ceiling and shocked gasps resound around him from the anbu who have more stable footing.
Nevertheless it's quite alarming when you realise that there is actually 15 other people in the room no matter how funny a response they gave, the alarming aspect of course doesn't stop young Naruto from laughing at his surroundings, breaking everyone out of their befuddlement enough to realise the hokage is dying.
The anbu rush to the hokage's side to quickly perform the Heimlich manoeuvre and finish off with some medical ninjutsu though this is cut short by a bedraggled Sarutobi Hiruzen who is more intent on finding out what Naruto knows and how he knows it.
"Ho-!" the hokage so anxious for answers almost blunders; hoping that his mistake goes unnoticed he continues in a soft and kind voice, "Now why would you think that, what could possible give you the idea that you are in anyway related to the kyuubi".
Giving an immediate answer Naruto replies " well my birthday coincides with the kyuubi festival, people hate me more during the kyuubi festival and I have been referred to as a demon more than once, so from this I gather that the people believe me to be the kyuubi, though in contrast the higher level ninja are apathetic toward me insinuating they don't think I'm the kyuubi. Not to mention the vague presence of fear that I see in peoples eyes, why would they fear a 3- no sense it's my birthday today a 4 year old child".
A silence brought by shock permeates the room and surprise is instilled on Hiruzen's face and all the anbu's faces though unseen all have the same expression as their hokage, absolute surprise.
Being the most experienced in life Hiruzen breaks out of the stupor first and while taking in Naruto's gaze remarks "you are quite the intelligent child".
"Naruto you aren't the kyuubi, the bijuu is sealed inside you through advanced fuinjutsu of which we lead in among the five other villages sense the fall of Uzushiogakure, this by the way is not unique as there are many others who have tailed beasts sealed inside both in the past and even now." Explains Hiruzen.
"You are what is called a jinchuriki, Naruto, you are in no way the kyuubi" states the hokage.
"Hmm, so that's the reason for why I'm hated by the village yet not by the upper levels of the shinobi ranks. So I house the kyuubi." Muses Naruto to himself, which is affirmed again by the hokage though through a short "fumu".
"Being hated by your own home is a really big negative, so with that hokage-jii are there any positives to housing the kyuubi?" Naruto asks while sending an inquisitive gaze full with an unyielding spirit, he wants a positive out of this situation and he'll be damned if he is given the whole 'sorry but we won't tell you due to things you can't understand' routine.
Seeing Naruto's gaze dashed all hopes of keeping him in the dark and having a normal childhood, reluctantly Hiruzen starts to explain the aspects of the kyuubi jinchuriki "firstly as a jinchuriki you have access to the vast amount of chakra that makes up the bijuu, chakra by the way is what shinobi use for there jutsu, now as the kyuubi jinchuriki you have two defining features, being high speed regeneration and sensing negative emotions additionally you gain a sub affinity in fire and wind chakra"
"That's all I know, there are probably a few unimportant abilities that you'll also be able to do when you gain access to the kyuubi's chakra, there I've given you the positives, if you have any questions ask away" the hokage concludes with a rather grumpy tone.
"Just one, how do I gain access to the kyuubi's chakra?" Naruto asks with a fresh tone, brought about from imagining the shocked faces of anyone who'd come toe to toe with him only to find no damage being collected on him.
"No." Hiruzen states
"Eh" leaks from Naruto's dumbfounded face, 'He can't keep such coo-. I mean things important for my survival as both a ninja when I'm older and as a jinchuriki from now onward.
"I won't let you train in the kyuubi's chakra until your older, you'll, if I'm assuming right that you will become a ninja, have an unfair head start. Please for my sake just live a normal childhood" first part stern, second part begging, Hiruzen conveys his attention as such.
"Don't kid with me! Do you want me to have no advantage over an enemy ninja when I'm faced with one! Ah and normal childhood what is that, does it taste good! Not to mention I'm a jinchuriki, I'll naturally have an advantage over my peers, but that doesn't matter, what does matter is the collect them all game surrounding us that any organisation would be love to be apart of! Haahaa haa" rage evident in his lecture, Naruto concludes with an exhaustive pant.
"…" The hokage stands there with disbelief prevailing on his face, accompanied with a few parts surprise, all the anbu in the room and even Naruto himself could tell how taken off-guard the Sandaime was, though only Hiruzen knew that it was not the never before experienced anger of the young blonde that shook him, but the unflawed reasoning that permeates his every word.
Those words were truthful of that there was no doubt, every individual inside the small room sided if not consciously then sub-consciously with Naruto's irrefutable reasoning.
"Haaa, I feel pathetic" Hiruzen whispers to himself before gazing down intently on to Naruto, who is quick to the challenge by levelling his own unyielding gaze full of determination against the hokage, which does well to personify a diamond by announcing he won't bend accompanied with the dazzle of his youth.
"In one weeks time Jiraiya, our authoritarian on fuinjutsu will be in the village for his monthly report. He will instruct you on how to gain access to the kyuubi's chakra and control it; in exchange you will see Inoichi Yamanaka once a fortnight and will at all times be monitored and guarded by Tenzo, he has mokuton abilities to keep the bijuu suppressed" he concludes while pointing out to an anbu member among the dozen gathered around.
"Tenzo will alert you to the arrival of Jiraiya, just come as soon as you can." Hiruzen finishes with a smirk at the excitement and happiness that cover his face that still shows the strong determination exhibited in the staring contest.
"Oh, and Naruto." Hiruzen quickly exclaims.
"Yes?" Naruto responds inquisitively.
"Happy Birthday" Hiruzen responds while placing a three pronged kunai into his small little hands.
"Thanks" laughs Naruto happily.
AN:1B
Okay honest to god question what do you think of my punctuation, I've always kind of been uncertain on how to effectively and/or correctly use it so I'm largely going by instinct and what 'feels right'.
Secondly Naruto is super smart, 'well that hasn't happened before' (sarcasm BTW), I'm planning on linking it in with a chakra conversation I hope to make happen next chapter.
How do people like my date, now there is some basis for this, sense no one said any year in the anime or manga (I think) I've based it on the hokage's age sense I remember something about them being the first of konoha trained shinobi rather than the integrated adults. So I took his age minus eight years as the point where Naruto is four and lastly took a six year time period where he would've spent as a child should prior to training as a shinobi sense academy starts at ages of six.
Anyway, as for the plot only a few things I would like to happen are set, but major and minor antagonists aren't also no heart stopping secrets to the world are in my head yet so there is definitely no foreshadowing in this chapter maybe by the second or third chapter I could input some foreshadowing that xianxia's do a lot though there could be larger gap of time where there is no foreshadowing, honestly I believe it to be important for this book to thrive so as to not seem out there in the logic of the story.
Update schedule well I wrote this after a week so I want to say weekly but I love to procrastinate so until I become an organised and determined human beings don't expect anything concrete, I do hope however to not take half a year to post and all like this one fanfic I really want more of, well since it's a different franchise let's stop talking about it.
Anyway, good or bad, how and why? Please respond in a kind and graceful manner my good gentleman and ladies.
(Ha ha ha, look at me I'm already lying. I was going through a little edit on font when I noticed the kinda foreshadowing at the end, haha).