Hey everyone! I've been over Dino Prince and, after realising what a travesty it was, have decided to re-write it. Hopefully it will be an improvement on what I first wrote.
Prologue
During a time of magic and knights, there had once been two nations, each with its own prince. One lived in the Eastern Kingdom, where his widowed father, King Hasselberry, ruled fairly. The young prince, Tyranno, was often seen searching for dinosaur fossils, and so had become known as the Dinosaur Prince. In the Southern Kingdom was the other prince; Prince Jim, the wild Crocodile Prince, along with his mother. It was arranged that the two princes would marry when they reached eighteen, for they both enjoyed each-others company and seemed to care for each-other very much.
Both kingdoms had celebrated the future wedding, and the uniting of the two kingdoms. Everyone except a dark sorcerer named Adrian Gecko. Using the more forbidden and ancient magicks, Adrian had planned on wresting control over the Eastern Kingdom from the Hasselberry's for himself. His plans had been foiled by the commander of the East Kingdom army: Jesse Anderson. Banishing Adrian, Jesse and his men had pursued the sorcerer, who had sworn revenge. The soldiers had returned without their commander, every one of them badly injured. They told tales of an unknown creature with terrifying power attacking them, and how Jesse had taken it on to buy them time to escape. The King sent out search parties, but they returned time and again without Jesse. Tyranno, who had seen the light-hearted commander as an older brother, had mourned his loss along with the soldiers, figuring him to be dead.
And this…is how the legend begins…
I'll admit the prologue hasn't changed much; but the rest definitely has so bear with a girl. I'll get it straightened out XD
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