Yeah I know this Fanfic has bean commented on to hell and back. However, that doesn't mean I can throw my hat in to the ring of Harry Potter sh*ty fanfic and also you know who I am ,The One The Only Marty D and lets get on with my commentary on My Immortal. (Side note: hey guys its only going to be TOTOMD Nick is only a Moon Daughter 2 reviewer and I'm not sure if I want to make a Harry Potter OC to help TOTOMD I decide on it on chapter 4)
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) ? and I thought XxMoonlightxx writing was hard to read. 2 my gf (ew not in that way) homophobe much raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. Yeah and they did a great job U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!2012 was weird
Chapter 1: meet the witch
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way nice name no I'm mean it I really like old fashioned names and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name if your name after your hair color isn't that kind of an insult.with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-backand icy blue eyes like limpid tearsand a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) no I'm staying I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie *great get ready for witch Flavia
I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white you got Twilight in my Harry Potter . I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England Scotland and also then your a vitch no wichire oh I know a b*tch where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen)congratulations you know your age lets go get some ice cream I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) no your a emo to the extremo and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there UK readers do you guys have hot topic over there if not I'm immigrating immediately.
For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots nice splash of color you really are a goth I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about Hey guys it's raining and snowing no school today A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them yeah way to go flipping people if for just looking at you also you guys are welcome the story thats all 1 paragraph I divided it up for you guys
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy! let me guess he going to run away or do something stupid and get embarrassed
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly. this is the first dialog ladies and gentlemen just take it all in "what's up Draco" and "Nothing" your changing literacy as we know it But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away and then I never returned
AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz!
now so you guys know unlike moon daughter 2 I have never read this so I remain unbiased on live it hate it. But if what they are saying is tire and It's Bad like AWFUL then get ready for me to pull the hair out of my sole. I would also like to point out that the original was deleted so I'm using another commentary for this so I'll leave the credit of the review so you can the story and the review just a head up the author in interrupts the story a lot like more than me so yeah see you when I see you
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