this is my first story... ever, so please forgive me if its not worthy of your reading.

any way the story takes place as an alternative to Kakashi reascueing Naruto from where he and Sasuke battled, one with the cursed seal(level 2) and the other with the most powerful bijuu, anyway, on with the story

i rated the story to limit my crowd to the more mature age, just to get some honest remarks on the story, and possible the story will live up to its rating later on

REBIRTH

Water trickled down from the sky as he lay, his orange jumpsuit torn and shredded by the power of the last attack he received. His victor staring down, he felt the sorrow breach him as he thought back to his promise. The promise he swore would keep. Her face burned him now as though she already new of his failure.

As he gazed up at the sky, semi-conscious from the pain he had received only moments ago. His chest burned as the lightning cursed and singed his skin and muscles.

Soon darkness crept over him, and he fell to the endless sleep

"what happened to me" his voice was strained and tired

"hello, is anyone there?" he opened his eyes, but only to see nothing

he was surrounded by a void, no light, no people,.. no nothing

"wh, where am I" his eyes widened as he began to remember

"SASUKE, WHERE ARE YOU, YOU COWARD!" he glanced around the emptiness.

A small light began to emanate in front of him, it grew into a large square of brilliant light. The brightness burned his eyes as though he was staring at the sun itself.

"SASUKE, YOU COWA" he was cut off

"QUIET ALREADY! Im coming im coming" a female voice emanated from the glowing gateway.

Two slim pale legs stretched legs stretched out from the portal, soon followed by a slim body covered by a grey dress, the skirt was split and seemed as though it was more for practicality than for show, while still maintaining beauty in its design.

eventually a head popped out of the illuminated square, her face was illuminated in the warm glow of the doorway while wearing the face of an angel.

Naruto noise began to bleed as his face dead paned.

"SASUKE, YOU PERVERT, WHAT ARE YOU TRYING TO DO!!!"

"WHO ARE YOU CALLING A PERVERT!" Naruto was launched from the spot by a huge mallet "AND MORE IMPORTANTLY, MY NAMES NOT SASUKE ITS SKULD, AND YOU'RE THE PERVERT!!!!".

Naruto lay on the floor again, his face was in pain from the impact.

He sprang to his feet, aware of what had occurred and attempting to protect himself

"well that's nice, not even a thank you!" Naruto spun round

on the dark floor sat the girl, her black hair only visible against her face. A pillow adorned her lap, it looked as though someone had been using it…click

Naruto jumped "what the hell just happened" he stared at her questionably, while making a pose as though he were ready for anything

"you were unconscious from when I lost my temper, so I thought it only fitting that I by the one who nursed you, though I was expecting you to be lying there for a little longer."

Naruto dropped his pose, he gave a questionable look to her.

she seems to mean no harm,.. well now she doesn't anyway, maybe she knows where I am.

"If you're here to help, do you know where we are then??" he glanced her over as

she shuffled round to face him properly

she looked like she was about his age, her face is so beautiful he couldn't help but blush whenever there eyes met.
she giggled when she noticed his blushed.

She eventually stood up and spread her arms, "We are in the land between the living and the dead, AKA limbo!" she winked at him.

"YOU MEAN IM DEAD!!" a small blush crept onto his face.

"not yet, that's what im here to help sort out.." she pulled out a small book and glanced at one of the pages before stowing it away again "im here to offer you the chance to be granted one wish, I would have visited earlier today, but it seems I slept in a little bit" she scratched the back of her head and made a cute smile that made Naruto blush again

"this one wish will first be processed by and then granted if the wish is deemed acceptable."

Naruto stood there staring, his gaze seemed lost in the back ground. He was being offered a chance to change things, he could save Sasuke, he could bring back the old geezer, he could wish for anything…

"take your ti". She was cut off

"I wish I grew up with a family" he whispered, his eyes wept at his words.

TO BE CONTINUED

please R&R the story, i would like some positive re-enforcement and some constructive critisism, anyway, id like to see what you think, i may or may not continue writing this depending on your views.