Oooookaaayyy. So I've decided to do what countless other writers have done, and tackle My Immortal. Wish me luck. (By the way, what I add will be in bolded italics, and parenthesizes.)
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AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) (hahaha, no. actually, I don't get because you're goffik. Is goffik even a word?)2 (what about the number two?)my gf (ew not in that way) (if not that way, then what way? Gunfondler?)raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. (poor raven, you must have been driven insane after the first two words and given up. It's okay.)U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! (poor justin. I feel for you.)MCR ROX! (I like MCR, but hearing her say that they rock just killed me a little on the inside.)
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way (that's a nice long name, two questions. Why the random apostrophe, and dementia? That's telling us you're going to have issues.) and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) (you were born with a head full of 'ebony black' hair? Can something even be ebony black? No, just ebony. Or just black.) with purple streaks and red tips (um, yeah. Honey, as much as it pains me to say this, that sounds repulsive.) that reaches my mid-back (so it's not actually thaaat long.) and icy blue eyes like limpid tears (lol,wat.) and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!). (I happen to not know who Amy Lee is, but I think I'll stay and take a nap.) I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. (Didn't your parents ever teach you that incest is not the way to go?) I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. (That's most vampires, if Twilight is anything to go by. Then again, I'm not so sure about that.)I have pale white skin. (That's also most white vampires, honey.) I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) (wait, I THOUGHT YOU WERE A GOFF? Because you know, you're like goffik… so goff. Haha, get it? Goff=goffik, goth=gothic. Oh wait, no, you wouldn't and it's not you that goffik, it's tara. I beseech you, forgive my ingnorance.) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic (I don't live in England, so I can't be sure, but are there even Hot Topics IN Europe/England?) and I buy all my clothes from there. (Really? I thought if you loved Hot Topic you'd get all your clothes from, say, Abercrombie.) For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it (Intense, yo.) and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. (That's even more intense. Black, black, black, pink, and black?) I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. (Wait, why are you wearing white foundation if you've already got 'pale white skin'?) I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining (obviously, the rules of weather don't apply at Hogwarts. Duh, where have I been?) so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. (Because that's how kind, courteous people respond to people who stare at them? Oops, I always asked them if something was the matter. I guess I didn't get the memo.)
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was... Draco Malfoy! (dundundundunnnn.)
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly. (Draco Malfoy? Shy? Pssht. Excuse me for a moment, Tara, Ebony. I need to go crack up in a corner where it won't offend you.)
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. (Oh, what a simply enlightening conversation! Tell me, what is your view on world peace?)
AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! (I still have yet to figure out 'fangz' means.)
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So tell me, is it any good?