This is my first fan fic. so please give me critism...it would be most appreciated

Slowly walking up to a bright summer morning haruhi rolls out of bed and looks out the window… she gets dressed, getting her blazor and going to mark another day off on her calendar.

Haruhi: Oh my god! it's the 15th all ready! She cried. That means shes coming today!

Haruhi ran out of her room and grabbed a piece of toast and her bag before putting her shoes on.

Ryoji (Haruhi's father): Whats your rush?

Haruhi: Todays that day! The day she comes! She cried again putting her shoes on and rushing out the door.

Haruhi rushes to school and when she gets to her class she is greeted by her friends, Hikaru and Karou.

Hikaru: Hey Haruhi

Karou: Whats up?

Haruhi: I have a surprise for the host club after school today.

Karou: Really?

Hikaru: What is it?

Haruhi: It wouldn't be a very good surprise if I told you. She laughed and sat down

K/H: wow…if it makes her giggle it must be good.

(That day after school)

Takami: So where's Haruhi…*Tears up* I bought her this really cute blue dress for today.

H/K: *shrug* We don't know. She said something about a surprise.

Honey: Really! Maybe its some yummy cakes.

Haruhi walks into the club room ½ way.

Haruhi: Ok good your all here.

Kyoya: Whats this about…its waisting host time.

She pulls on someones arm to lead them in

Haruhi: come on, don't be shy.

Then someone in cut up jeans with red suspenders, a shirt that says "rocker" and their hair cut almost exactly like haruhi's walks in. They all stare at this new person and are slightly confused.

Haruhi: everybody, this is my cusin, Yukki. Yukki is going to be living with me for a while and going to our school.

Yukki: Hello, My name is Yukki Nazuko. I look forward to being your class mates.

Hikaru: So, Is Yukki a boy….

Karou: Or a girl?

Haruhi looks down and swallows.

Haruhi: She a girl…but ….well the thing is, I need you guys to let Yukki join the host club….Just for a little while, I promise!

They all stare at Haruhi then Yukki. Yukki starts to turn read and stand up straight.

Kyoya: Why?

Haruhi: Its complicated….she, needs a place to be able to make friends cause…well….Yukki's not that good at it…..

Yukki looks down and doesn't say anything.

They all look at kyoya.

Kyoya:…Sure….

They all look around in shock

All: really?!

Kyoya: yeah… its about time we got a breath of fresh air.

Yukki: What? ....A....Host?