Hey guys! This is just a little thing I put together using Japanese literature since I'm learning about haikus and cinquains. Please tell me how I do.

Annabeth's POV

Heatless nights swarm me
Hateful days welcome me now;
Why must it hurt me?

Rachel
Bitchy, Evil
Living, Stealing, Deceiving
My boyfriend kisser backstabber
Hatred

What have I done now?
What human would hate me so;
Must she be jealous?

Elizabeth
Rich, Snobby
Seeing, Wishing, Unloving
Green-eyed red head beast
Crazy

Why am I writing this here…

Damn it! Why am I even writing this about her? All Rachel Elizabeth Dare is an annoying, bitchy, backstabbing bitch! Won't she just get the freaking clue that my Seaweed brain, not hers. The next thing I know, Rachel bursts into my cabin at 3:00 freaking AM! Just to tell me that she will find a way to make Percy hers. The only reason I am here writing this right now is because of Τηε λανγυαγε μορταλς ξαλλ "τηε γρεατ λανγυαγε μορταλς ξαλλ Ενγλιση". Or the language mortals call "the great language mortals call English". I wish I could just fill her head with candy and let the Ares cabin take a swing at her with a baseball bat. Yeah, I can go deep down…like deep, deep, deep down.

So, what did you think? I'm sorry if it doesn't make a lot of sense because it just so happens that I
have to wake up at 5:00 AM every morning for volleyball practice, but I will make time!
R&R!

~Syddy