Hello! This is my first official story but I don't really know if its good so please write a review pointing out my flaws. I'm not a native english speaker so spelling mistakes to. Also if you have any ideas how the story goes further put them there. Maybe we can create story together then.
It was a rather cold morning, a cold breeze messing up my braid. I don't care though. I like my hair when it's a bit wild, even when my family says it's not. My family, with that I mean my father, my grandmother and my brother. They like to control my life so I do every little thing that I can do to let me feel a bit more free. Like messy hair and pulling my skirt too high. I take my braid and put it at the side of my head as i walk through the busy streets of London on my way to the metro station for school. I then start noticing girls in the same schooluniform as me and boys in their uniform and I know I am close. I see the 2 pevensie sisters talking to eachother, I don't know them well. But susan, who is 2 years older then me, is so beautiful. I don't know any other words to describe her hair and full lips. I almost have as dark hair as her, but it's a bit more of a dull brown that almost everyone in england seems to have. I have a pale skin like her, but I just look sick with it. All together with my brown eyes I am the most average looking person in england. I'm okay with that, but i wish I had one thing that made me special, like light green eyes or cute freckles. I wake up from my thoughts when i walk into the metro station. There is screaming and shouting. I roll my eyes, this is again one of those boys who try to hard to look cool with fighing others. I still go look because maybe my best friend, Louise, is there. She loves to laugh at them, with her light brown hair that always falls straight down her shoulders and brown eyes with a bit of green she looks pretty. But her personality is even better altough sometimes a bit hurt too easily. I am lucky to be her friend. I search to the crowd but I don't see her, probaly too late. So I just look at the fight, its three boys against the brother of susan and lucy. I don't remember his name though. Suddenly someone else jumps in to help him. Its the other brother, I think its edward? I don't know. After the fight I see Lucy and Susan walking towards their brothers rather irritated. I notice that lucy's hat fell of and decide I should return it. When I pick it up and look up I can't find them anywhere. But then I see them at a bench a bit confused. The metro is coming so I run to them. I feel a bit weird in my stomach, the feeling you get when you're nervous but a bit nicer. I got too confused that i just bumped into lucy and fall. The wind became stronger and stronger. As I touch the ground with my hands I feel.. I feel sand?