ok to be quite honest with you all, i didn't like the way i wrote the first chapter. it was much too generic as far as d/hr fics go and i want to be different. i also want to thank dazed*kitten for pointing out to me that i was making my characters look like sex gods (which i definently don't want). so here's a revised version of the first chapter. and anything in ' ' is hermione's thoughts. for some reason whenever i use italics it doesn't show on fanfic.net so i have to use those instead.
ok, quick a/n just to start this off. this is my first fanfic, the first that i've actually written anyways. i've probably planned a hundred out in my head, just never sat down and wrote anything.
anyhoo, please please please review! constructive criticism is the best, especially since i want to improve. and i'm not going to continue if no one reads this, but i really want to. so REVIEW!!!!!!! and btw, i'm a huge fan of d/hr so that's what this is going to be.
Diclaimer: nope.
Draconis
Hermione started down the corridor from the dungeons toward the Great Hall, starving, after yet another hour and a half's detention with the one and only Professor Severus Snape.
'Gods she couldn't stand that man.'
Insufferable know-it-all, humph! she thought to herself angrily.
If anyone, he's the insufferable know-it-all! Greasy git actually accused me of not being able to do anything but stick my nose in a book!
She was fuming, he had made her scrubs caldrons again, second time this week and it was only Wensday. He had assigned her detention for having the nerve to tell him he was incorrect about one of the facts concerning the creation of the Aphrody's Potion.
The creator was Alhodes Runis, not Alhodes Nunis!
She considered it very important and had politely pointed this out at the end of class and he had snapped.
"Detention Miss Granger! For being an insufferable know-it-all incapable of doing anything but putting your nose in a book so you can correct everyone every chance you get." He had barked at her, then smirked.
"You can stay after class and scrub the caldrons from todays potion."
And todays Aphrody's Potion had been a particularly messy one. It took her an hour and a half just to scrub the five caldrons that the advanced potions class had used.
'And Malfoy! He actually sat there and smirked the entire time. He really enjoys seeing the 'mudbloods' get ridiculed. I hate him!'
Finally nearing the Great Hall, Hermione hoped she wasn't too late, because tonight at dinner Dumbledore was annoucing the new heads and she had to be there when he called her name. Then, she and the head boy would be shown their new rooms. She had yet to find out who the new head boy was.
She was almost to the entrance, when she felt a strong hand encircle her wrist and a hand clasp over her mouth, pulling her into the shadows.
ok, quick a/n just to start this off. this is my first fanfic, the first that i've actually written anyways. i've probably planned a hundred out in my head, just never sat down and wrote anything.
anyhoo, please please please review! constructive criticism is the best, especially since i want to improve. and i'm not going to continue if no one reads this, but i really want to. so REVIEW!!!!!!! and btw, i'm a huge fan of d/hr so that's what this is going to be.
Diclaimer: nope.
Draconis
Hermione started down the corridor from the dungeons toward the Great Hall, starving, after yet another hour and a half's detention with the one and only Professor Severus Snape.
'Gods she couldn't stand that man.'
Insufferable know-it-all, humph! she thought to herself angrily.
If anyone, he's the insufferable know-it-all! Greasy git actually accused me of not being able to do anything but stick my nose in a book!
She was fuming, he had made her scrubs caldrons again, second time this week and it was only Wensday. He had assigned her detention for having the nerve to tell him he was incorrect about one of the facts concerning the creation of the Aphrody's Potion.
The creator was Alhodes Runis, not Alhodes Nunis!
She considered it very important and had politely pointed this out at the end of class and he had snapped.
"Detention Miss Granger! For being an insufferable know-it-all incapable of doing anything but putting your nose in a book so you can correct everyone every chance you get." He had barked at her, then smirked.
"You can stay after class and scrub the caldrons from todays potion."
And todays Aphrody's Potion had been a particularly messy one. It took her an hour and a half just to scrub the five caldrons that the advanced potions class had used.
'And Malfoy! He actually sat there and smirked the entire time. He really enjoys seeing the 'mudbloods' get ridiculed. I hate him!'
Finally nearing the Great Hall, Hermione hoped she wasn't too late, because tonight at dinner Dumbledore was annoucing the new heads and she had to be there when he called her name. Then, she and the head boy would be shown their new rooms. She had yet to find out who the new head boy was.
She was almost to the entrance, when she felt a strong hand encircle her wrist and a hand clasp over her mouth, pulling her into the shadows.