Hello guys!
This is my first fanfiction ever and English is not my first language, so I'd be sooo fucking happy if some people would take their time to read this and leave a review.
Please tell me what you like, what you don't like and if I made too many mistakes in grammar or spelling. I spend a good amount of time thinking about the whole plot and I'm actually pretty content with the result, but I don't want to fuck up everything with bad English. If that's the case, then I'll have to search for a beta reader.
In the end, this fanfiction should have 6 or 7 chapters.
Oh, I'm talking too much. :D
Have fun and praise Jashin!
PS:I want to thank Wierdowithagun so much for her review and the constructive criticism! I have to admit that I'm a big fan of her work (check it out ;)), so I really appreciated and followed her advice.
Without her, everything between Hidan's birthday and the part when he's 16 wouldn't exist now and that would be a pity, since I think that it became a very important part of the story.
So now this chapter is dedicated to Wierdowithagun! Hope you'll like my realization of your advice :)
GelberBlitz
Naruto does not belong to me, it belongs to Masashi Kishimoto!
Chapter 1 – Disgrace
Yugakure has always been a neutral, peaceful, little village.
They were never really involved in any wars, they didn't participate at the Chunin Exams, because they wanted no attention, they wanted no rivalry, they just wanted to live a life without any trouble.
The village hidden in the hot springs didn't even have a wall around it, because it was not necessary. There were no special weapons, no kekkei genkai, no secret techniques, no interesting scrolls or anything else that was remotely worth traveling all the way through Yu no Kuni.
And did you ever hear of a Nukenin from Yugakure? Or any kind of shinobi from this place? Probably not. Many people didn't even know that this village existed and the villagers couldn't have been happier about it.
Of course they had ninja, but as you know, Yugakure never participated at the Chunin Exams, so there were only some genin and they couldn't really do any damage.
All they learned was a negligible bit of taijutsu, kenjutsu, fuinjutsu and ninjutsu, which was mostly limited to Bunshin no Jutsu, Kawarimi no Jutsu, Shunshin no Jutsu and sometimes some medical jutsu, since there were only missions like finding a lost pet, helping old people with their grocery shopping and other ridiculous stuff, which didn't bring a lot of money and thus made the whole ninja-crap rather useless and just for fun.
To top the harmony, all people looked pretty similar to each other. The typical villager of Yugakure had dark brown or black hair and tanned skin. Only a few didn't have brown eyes, but a shade of green mixed with brown.
But this wonderful morning at April 2nd would be a great event for Yugakure.
Kizoku and Asai Yu from the Yu-Clan, the old noble family who founded the village many generations ago, would finally get a heir. After so many failed attempts, this would be the birthday of the longed-for child and the whole village was decorated with all kinds of flowers. Many people waited and celebrated in front of the remarkable villa at the north end of the village, desperate to see their offspring as soon as possible.
Finally the signal rang out and everyone looked to the front door, where Kizoku, the beaming father, held a little baby in a light blue blanket and… wait. There was something wrong.
He did not look happy. Starting in the front rows, the crowd grew quiet. After some moments the whole village seemed to hold their breath and then you could hear them whisper.
"What is this?"
"Is he ill?"
"What's wrong with this child?"
"Poor Asai. She tried so long and now that she finally has a baby, it's like… like this."
There he was: Hidan.
Pale skin, grey, almost white hair and bright fuchsia eyes.
Asai couldn't take it. Everyone hated her little Hidan only because of his looks.
Even her husband Kizoku refused to spend time with the boy. He had always been a rather cold person, which probably was because of his origin. He was the heir of the noble Yu-Clan and this family was so used to being above others and being deeply respected by everyone, that he eventually became as snobbish as his ancestors.
The demeanor of parents influences a child a lot after all.
But she had still fallen in love with him all these years ago and had been so cheerful when they were finally expecting a child.
Three long years they had tried to get her pregnant.
Nine long months had this little treasure grown in her womb.
Eleven looong, looong hours she had been in labour and endured so much pain to see her baby, hold it in her arms, touch the cute tiny hands and feet.
She didn't care that Hidan looked different. He was just special. He was her son.
But time passed and people began to shun her. Asai's old friends didn't invite her to dinner or shopping trips anymore, many of them didn't even greet her when she walked through the village with Hidan.
And one fateful day she heard some people talk to Kizoku. They suggested to him to just kick her and the albino out, because she had embarrassed him and the clan by giving birth to this unworthy freak of nature and she mocked him by even being happy about her failure.
Asai felt so miserable and she was so afraid of actually being kicked out and maybe ending up on the street without any money to feed herself and a 2-year-old child.
The pressure was unbearable and so she decided to surrender. Maybe it was better for Hidan anyway, because at least he wouldn't be kicked out and had a nice home and food.
She hired a maid (the first one of many to follow, but she lost count after 15) and didn't spend time with him anymore. Soon she was integrated into society again and her stressed relationship with Kizoku got better.
But she still wasn't happy. Every time her boy wanted to talk or play with her and looked at her with those beautiful, unique, fuchsia eyes, her heart broke a bit more.
Asai wasn't able to look at him anymore.
When Hidan was seven, he wanted to become a ninja. He was bored all the time, because nobody wanted to play with him and he spent most of his time alone in his room with the plenty of toys and stuff the other children were jealous of. Why were they jealous?
It wasn't fun at all to play with a ball, ninja action figures and things he didn't even know how to use all by himself. The little boy couldn't imagine anything better than having friends… or at least one friend… or caring parents like everyone else.
One day he had gone to the playground with as many toys as he had been able to carry.
Full of hope the little albino had asked the children there if they wanted to play with him, he had even offered them to just keep the stuff they liked, but he hadn't calculated on the parents.
They had dragged all the other kids away from him, telling them that he's a freak, that they are not allowed to play with him and that they would have to stay at home for at least a week if they ever played with him.
He still didn't outright get why everybody always treated him like this. Was he really this awful?
But anyway, Hidan wanted to become a ninja. This way he would have something to do and the teachers would be forced to bother with him, because they had to train him and the other children would be forced, too, because they had to practice with him.
Besides, he had this strange feeling that there would come a time, when he should be able to defend himself. The boy didn't know against what, though.
Like always, the heir of the Yu-Clan got what he wanted, even though his mother had to pay the academy to accept him and when they found out that Hidan couldn't properly use his chakra and thus was only able to do taijutsu and kenjutsu, she had to pay even more.
By now he was almost 14 and he wasn't the clueless little boy anymore.
The albino knew that he was different from all the others in Yugakure and that's why everybody shunned him. He was the disgrace of the village, a failure, only a burden on his parents, who deserved to have a normal child, a brilliant heir to the noble clan, but they got him.
Hidan didn't want to bother with them anyway, he hated Kizoku and most of all Asai.
Every time he accidentally entered the same room of the villa, his father only gave him disapproving glances and his mother didn't descry him at all. For her, he was obviously not even worth the effort of turning her head to at least show him that she noticed his existence.
And it has always been like this. Hidan couldn't remember a time when it would have been different. His father smiling at him or his mother looking him in the eyes just for once.
Hell, she even seemed to suffer only by being near him. What was wrong with this woman?
At night he always dreamt of the same thing. He just wanted to punch every single villager in the face, spit at them and then leave forever. But he would never actually dare to do that, the boy was far too self-conscious and contained. And what should he do after leaving anyway?
In Yugakure he may be one of the best in taijutsu and kenjutsu, but outside the borders of Yu no Kuni he would be dead meat without any skills in ninjutsu and genjutsu.
So the young albino just swallowed his anger and put up with his fate. He didn't have another choice after all.
Finally it's done! :)
I really put effort into this and hope that some people enjoyed reading it at least half as much as I enjoyed writing it.
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