Hello everyone! Before starting anything let me tell you that English isn't my mother tongue so I apologize if I make mistakes (and they may be plenty). I use MW to write my stories and it has a spell checking feature but we all know it's never enough… Hehe, with Gamer4COD's help, nothing can stop me now!
Writing a story about Zootopia is something I wanted to do for a long time so here I am. Also I can't improve if I don't practice so… I hope you'll enjoy my OUR work and leave a lot of feedback. This will help me train my English and force me to do a better job. If you want to throw rocks at me take a ticket and wait your turn. You know what? Nevermind!
You may also know that this is my very first fanfiction. I've written before but never a fanfic and never in English.
/!\ Warning, this fanfic will contain a lot of blood, drugs, lemon… and pretty much everything my twisted mind can come up with so: R-M (and may be upgraded E on AO3). But don't worry I'm not a monster (I think) so you can expect a happy ending to my story. Okay… here we go! (Slowly reach for a shield)
Disclaimer: I don't own any of Zootopia characters (too bad, we would already be working on the next film)
Judy Hoops is the happiest bunny of the world. She managed to get to the police academy of Zootopia and her hard work is starting to show some results. She's given 3 days off the academy to meet with her family. What she doesn't know is that the family business is slowly decreasing and that her parents are having trouble paying their loan. When a loan shark appears to collect his money by any means necessary and threaten her family Judy stands for them, ready to fight for their sake. That's the last thing she remembers before waking up on a crouch in fever.
1- Making a mistake (rewritten)
"Okay now listen up cadets!" shouted an artic bear, Major Friedkin, who happened to be the best instructor of the academy.
It was eight o'clock in the morning and all of them were gathered in the parade ground, near the large gate of the academy. "You have three days to relax before coming back to hell, be sure to spend it resting and come back in full shape for the last two months of your training. Those will be the hardest and I wouldn't be surprised if half of you didn't make it to the final exam!"
Judy could hardly contain herself. She wanted to go back to her home, tell everyone how great she was doing and that she was making huge progress. The first two months of her training where extremely hard as they were meant for biggest, strongest and fastest mammals. When she came home for the first time, she had to hear her parents tell her, for the hundredth time, that there wasn't a bunny cop before for a good reason: they weren't meant to be. And she had to admit that she had started to believe it too.
She still stock to her decision and went back to the academy to spend two month more of training. Through days and days of hard work she was slowly moving to the top for her class as she managed to use her brain to find new ways of dealing with everything she was facing.
She started to get used to the simulations at the academy, doing as fine as any other cadet and even better than some. The last time they went through the ice wall she managed to get first by jumping on all other cadets. This earned her the smile of their instructor as well as some congratulations and a laugh from the cadet she hooped on.
She knew their instructor didn't mean what she was saying. She just HAD to tell them they were destined to fail to force them to give their very best.
"One final thing," said the bear. "Those of you who don't make it back in three days will be considered as dropping off the academy! If there is anything that prevents you from coming back in the meantime, you HAVE to notice us or all of your training will be over. Now dismisses."
After saying goodbye to the instructors and talking a bit with the other cadets about what each of them would do during their days off, Judy left for the train station and took the first train to Bunnyburrow, impatient about meeting with her family.
During the trip she remembered the last time she came, two months ago. She was exhausted then; happy that she was at the academy but sad to see that, maybe, she could never compete with the other cadets. This was, of course, before she went through her hellish self-training; sacrificing sleep to study and training her body like nobunny ever did.
Now she was overflowing with pride! She proved everybody at the academy that she could do it; she proved it to herself, too! Two months to go and she would also prove all who badmouthed her or didn't believe in her that she was right: she could be a cop and WOULD be the first bunny cop of history. She took her Carrotpod out and put her Gazelle's playlist on as the train went on its way to Bunnyburrow.
When she arrived she was surprised by not to seeing her parents and two-hundred and eighty siblings waiting for her like two months ago: when she had told them she would be coming home her parents were extremely happy and promised to pick her. But now, all she could see was some of her siblings (Jon, Jack, Jessica and Jill) from the same litter trying to hide their sadness behind fake smiles as they greeted her. A moment passed before one could engage the conversation.
"Hey Jude," Jon finally said, "mom and dad are sorry but we had an unexpected guest at the burrow and they couldn't come. They told us to leave the farm and pick you up."
"It's okay," she answered, "can we head home? I'm exhausted and would like to see this 'unexpected guest' and ask him why he couldn't let me see my parents." She chuckled with a smile.
All off her siblings looked at her as if she had said something terrible before Jessica broke the silence: "Trust me Judy; even you shouldn't do that…"
Before she could get the chance to ask what she meant Jack took her bag and moved to the old family pickup. "We don't have much time guys, we got to get back to the field and help the others. We'll throw Judy at the burrow on our way."
Her three other siblings nodded and hopped in the car followed by Judy who started to have more and more questions. The fact that none were answered during their trip to the burrow, and that her siblings tried to tell her that "everything was alright," didn't helped.
"It's okay Jude," said Jon "Mom and dad are taking care of everything, no need to worry." But the look on his face never convinced her. Beside, with her training she was able to read between the lines and understand when a situation was desperate, which was pretty close to being now.
When they made it to the burrow Jack spoke again: "Judy, whatever you hear or whatever happens in the burrow, please, stay away from our guest," he looked her eyes as if what he was asking was a matter of death and life. "Promise me right now that you won't make it harder for all of us," he added.
Judy looked at him with surprise. Was it this bad? What could have happen when she was away? And why did it sounded as if she would make it worse? Still she accepted and nodded at her 'elder' brother, unable to speak.
Judy headed to her room, the burrow surprisingly empty, as if everyone was sent away urgently. She had hoped she could spend some time with her family but, as she walked to her room, she didn't cross any bunny. She started to fear she would have to wait for dinner if she wanted to see anyone. After unpacking her bag, she decided to take a walk around the burrow and search someone to talk to; someone who could explain what was going on… She thought she would at least find her younger siblings, but they were nowhere to be found. She muttered something about how nice it was to be given a few days off only to spend them alone in such a huge place and decided to go to the dining room to grab something to eat.
As she closed by, she found the doors locked and could hear talking on the other side of the door. She tried to eavesdrop but the talking stopped right when she was next to the door.
She then heard her father ask: "Is everything okay, Sir?" his voice extremely weak.
Someone she didn't know answered him with a deep, calm and yet cold voice: "It seems one of your too many kits is right behind the door."
'Too many? What with this specist comment?' She thought just as her mom opened the door, ready to shout at who-ever-was-behind-it… And froze at the sight of Judy.
Her mom went through the door and closed it behind her. She was in a mess, as if she had been crying for the past several hours. Yet she took Judy in her arms in a silent hug neither of them wanted to end at the moment. It was Bonnies Hopps that broke the silence first: "Judy, it's good to see you. How have you been? Did you unpack your stuff already? Sorry for not picking you up by the way but we have something very important to discuss with our guest here. But don't worry it's okay we –" She could have kept going like that for a while if Judy hadn't stopped her.
"Come on mum, take a breath," she shyly chuckled, "I'm good, you don't have to excuse yourself, it seems important." She was boiling with questions. Why was her mother crying? Who was the other mammal she heard? Where were all of her siblings…?
Just as if she had read her though Bonnie explained: "You're right Jude, I must look like a mess. But it's okay; really, all of your siblings are out so we can talk business with our guest. The farm didn't produce a lot this year and it has been getting harder to repay our debt… But it's okay you know, we asked most of your siblings to help at the farm." she smiled.
Judy started to thing she had heard the 'it's okay' part a bit too often and was now sure that nothing was okay. She was now sure they were either saying that to prevent her from poking her snout/nose into this case or they were saying it to convince themselves more than her... She was about to ask for explanations when Stu opened the door. He tried to appear calm and cool but failed as he couldn't keep his paws from shaking or calm his twitchy nose. This shocked Judy; whoever was behind that door was bad enough to put her parents in a state like that.
"Bonnie please, we still have a lot of things to discuss," he said in an attempt to sound as if it was nothing, "could you come back please?" He looked at Judy and tried to put a smile on his face: "It's nice to see you Jude; we'll talk at diner, promise."
Bonnie and Stu walked through the door again but before Stu closed the door, he looked at her one last time before adding: "Judy, this might sound odd but please could you refrain yourself from coming near here until we tell you to? This is really important."
"Okay, dad," she answered looking one last time at her dad closing the door while dropping his smile, his ears falling behind his head.
When evening was coming, Judy saw more and more of her siblings come back from the fields. Most of them seemed exhausted: 'the day must have been long for them,' she thought. Despite the tiring day they all had, they greeted her as nicely as they could; asked her about the academy, her roommates… Some of them seemed to regain strength while listening to her. They were happy that she could do what she loved.
Of course something had to spoil the good time they were having. A scream came from inside the burrow. All ears stood up and a swarm of bunnies ran towards the dining room where they could all hear the sound of a solid wooden door being broken. When they managed to get closer they all saw a long… slim… black… thing? On all fours? Heading for the outside of the burrow followed by Stu unable to make a proper sentence and repeating endlessly: "I assure you we… we'll find a way," or "It's not what it seems, listen…"
Bonnie was sitting on the floor of the former dining room, which now looked like a junkyard. She had her head in her paws and was sobbing in the middle of hundreds of broken chairs and tables.
Judy ran to her mother: "what happened here?"
Bonnie looked up and at Judy before putting her head in her paws again as she managed to say: "we don't k-know what he-he's capable of. He-he said he would g-get all his money b-back today even if he has to b-burn the burrow for it." She then resumed her crying.
Judy ears stood up enraged as she dashed after her father and the monster that had made her mother cry. She wasn't a cop yet, but she would bring justice for her parents.
As she stepped out of the burrow she could see her father on his knees before the now standing mammal that looked slightly smaller than a Tiger. The said mammal was wearing a long Gothic like hooded Duster coat along with a scarf that effectively hid his identity and specie. Even his paws were covered by gloves…
On any one she would have thought that it looked stupid with the three straps that kept his coat close and the whole 'Pawtrix' vibe it gave. But on this particular mammal, it looked somehow fearsome. Maybe it was the way he stood: with both arm outspread of his body which was lightly leaned forward in a stance that let little to imagine: He was using his size to intimidate them.
"Just one more month! We'll get you the money in a month; we just need to sell some product. We can barely feed ourselves and…"
"Enough!" the simple word made everybunny freeze, ears laying against the back of their heads. It wasn't shouted nor menacing, but cold and distant and was enough to draw the attention. It was at that moment he decided to reveal his species.
Judy gasped when she was what was hiding beneath the coat he opened. The animal standing in front of them had no fur on his face, in fact, he had black scales. His face was a bit lengthened and rounded at the level of the snout… that he didn't have but instead wore two curved gaps. His mouth, twisted in a disgusted grimace, revealed some thin razor shaped teeth. A forked tongue darted between them from time to time as he looked at the effect of his revelation had on the bunnies around him… And he was obviously pleased. A sight like this one was already enough to scare a bunny to death, but his eyes made it far worse: all bloody red with no sight of the Iris in them.
"You can barely feed yourself?" Quoted the giant lizard, "Do you know how long I haven't eaten myself?" his tone was slowly increasing; "it's been three days since I've had eaten a proper meal… You may understand that someone with my size needs a lot of food and can't be feed with carrots or blueberries or any useless prey's food…"
He's bent down a few inches and spread his arm a little wider, as if he was about to charge, making him look even more dangerous. He was now clearly invading Stu's personal space. And the proximity of his teeth with his face made the old rabbit shiver.
"In fact, if I came here myself instead of sending someone collect my money," he was now shouting so loud it hurt Judy's ears, "is that, if you refused to pay, which you DID, I could still feed myself on your progenitor!" He turned back and walked toward some of Judy's sibling with madness in his eyes.
But before he could do any harm Stu took something from his pocket, aimed it at the reptile and shoot him. An electrical buzzing sound was made when the Taser prongs embedded to the reptile's back… Before a strong tail appeared from beneath the coat and sent Stu flying; the sound of breaking bones following; as the black reptile turned back with pure hate on his face.
"You're DEAD, prey!" he said while lifting Stu by the ears, making him scream in pain while one of his arms hung limp, twisted in an unnatural way.
The giant lizard started to shake Stu as if he was nothing more than a kit in his hand:
"Did you really use a Taser on ME?!" He shouted. "A fox Taser! Wait 'till my boss hears about this and you can consider your debt doubled! We'll turn your family into SLAVES or if you're lucky we'll just sell you on the black market as FOOD!"
Judy couldn't stand it anymore, she rushed toward the insane predator, jumped and landed a strong kick in his mouth, sending some teeth flying and forcing him to let go of her father. She landed back and retreated a few step away waiting for his response. She was ready to take him on; she had managed to knock out a trained rhino at the academy after all, she could easily beat this monster that seemed to rely on brute force alone.
His response came slowly; he turned carefully to face her and… started to laugh, louder and louder until his full mouth was open as he made the weirdest sound she ever heard. It wasn't the sound of someone who just lost some teeth… or he really had strange tastes. After a few seconds he started to gasp for air, breathing through his now half shut mouth, keeping a delighted expression.
"I have to say, rabbit, I never thought something like you could exist." He said still smiling.
He put a knee to the ground and bended slowly so his head would be at the same level as hers. She didn't know how to react; this male just took her kick really well and even happily laughed about it. Who was he? Why didn't he look mad at her for what she did when he almost tore her father's ear offs for using a Taser that barely tickled him?
"Trust me," he added, "I've never see anyone stand against me as you did. And you can believe me when I tell you that I've already came across tons of animals and none were near as courageous as you."
The only thing Judy couldn't believe was how sincere his words sounded. As if he was happy to finally find someone strong enough to stand against him. Her attention focused on his paws that he slowly raised as if he was surrendering. She looked away from his eyes for a few seconds to look at his… claws? That easily outmatched the sharpness of a tiger's… And made a big mistake.
While she was looking at his paws, the reptile spat one of the broken teeth he kept hidden under his tongue in her right eye. The shock was so strong – she never imagined he could do something like this after seeing him so calm and open – that she used both her paws to cover her eye, closing the other one in pain. By doing so, she left her guard wide open and he bit her on the right shoulder. In the same time he stood and turned on his left side before opening his mouth again, sending the poor rabbit flying several feet away. She crashed into a wall of the burrow with her whole body in pain. All the other bunnies froze in fear, no one daring to move after seeing such a display of savagery.
Judy managed to get back on her feet ready to keep on fighting but she suddenly started to have trouble breathing. She panted as if she went through hours of running at full speed. She looked back at the reptile who didn't move an inch from the place he was when he threw her. He kept looking around to see if anybunny was stupid enough to stand against him again.
'How could he play so dirty?' She thought. Did she underestimate him? Thinking he would rely on brute force only when deep down he was more vicious, colder than the blood that flowed in his veins? By the time those thoughts went through her head she started to lose focus. Her vision became blurry and she couldn't feel anything from the wound he gave her. The more she tried to breath the harder it became and she started to fell herself lose conscious. The last thing she heard was her mother shouting her name and the sadistic laughter of the most dangerous predator Bunnyburrow had ever seen.
She then felt something poking through the skin of her neck and fell into a dreamless coma.
SO! I thought it would have been nice to rewrite small things here and there and ask G4COD to look through this chapter (as well as the next two too). I hope it's better (hell it should be with his correction).
Maybe you're thinking that a duster coat can't look good on anyone else than Nero but try to remember that the goal of this lizard's attire is to hide his species, not to look cool… But I have to admit I love Trench and Duster coat…
Now, until next time!