Hey! I can't believe it, ma first story! I've been reading for a while and all the inspiration and ideas have been making ma brain pulsate! I really hope you review ma story and you could totes go crazy. If you think it sucks say "it sucks!" but also write why so I know how to get better! Thanks for listening, I'm sorry for rambling, here is ma story. (and yes I know I'm writing ma instead of my, I just felt like it)
The Warm Rays
Chapter 1: Introduction of Surroundings
Smoke from his pipe exited his lips as he exhaled, filling the nightly air around him and causing it to appear tangible. The man who seemed to look young stared blankly into the abyss of stars and darkness as he reminisced about the past and all of its glory. Exactly one mile away from this, a dog yelped as it grazed a thorn bush, causing the windows of the house nearby to light up while a little boy a block away climbed into his parent's bed after having a nightmare. It was while all of this was happening that in the next district over, following the events that took place between Atsushi Ito and his girlfriend Masa In the back of Atsushi's car, Wakana Ito was born.
Wakana Ito wasn't raised the same way most children were raised due to her parents. In order to give you a good picture of how Wakana spent a majority of her childhood, then learning about her family is a must, therefore we will start with her father. Atsushi Ito was raised with the rash belief that if he didn't work (and work well) his world would fall apart. He had squinted eyes, and tight lips matching his cold demeanor. He disliked stepping in gum, and disliked cleaning it off. He disliked when his coworkers had unproductive conversations, and disliked in even more when his boss was in on them. Atsushi liked reorganizing his desk, the sound of hundreds of keys on keyboards, and signing his name in a complicated manner. Wakana's mother, Masa, was a neurotic and incredibly superstitious due to a childhood incident involving a couple of friends, some face paint, and a chainsaw…. She had been scarred ever since (nor was told the truth). It only got worse as the years passed and she now blames any misfortunes on bad luck and demons. Now I am not saying that demons don't exist and wreak havoc, they just don't do it as much as Masa believes them to. Masa hates the paranormal and loose hairs that get stuck to her while bathing. She enjoys watching those old black and whites romances on t.v., cleaning the kitchen (and keeping it clean), and seeing her planted flowers growing proudly and not limping (she liked to think she could look like that). She was fidgety and thin.
In this town the neighbors on the left of Wakana's house were elderly and sweet and still managed to make love every now and then, and the right housed an artist who painted her many (and I mean many) cats while dreaming of the day her paintings would become famous after she died. The town was small so everybody knew everybody's face, but nobody knew more than that. Unknowing to him, this would be the place the love of Rihan's new life would be born and raised and that is just the end of the first part of this story.
So what did ya guys think? If it was too short or too long please tell me, I gots to know! Please review, they make me happy… ill update as soon as I can, and feel like it so stay tuned!